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- Ruan_D_VD_Merwe1yrCommentedCh 18 Chapter 18
- Ruan_D_VD_Merwe1yrCommentedCh 38 Chapter 35: Incident (Part 2)
- Ruan_D_VD_Merwe1yrCommentedCh 19 Chapter 17: Target Secured
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I for one would love to see this story come to it's completion, it has a very interesting start. The only thing that bugs me is that we have no other strong character to compare to the mc's power scale to, there needs to be a clear understanding of the worlds power scale and where the mc stands on that scale. Oh and a bit more world background is needed.
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I loved your novel until the mc called Hagrid a smelly professor and wanted to steal his dragon egg, it is not personal. Hagrid is just my favourite HP character, that is my reason for dropping. Note to author; you can improve your click rate by using a spell checker. not to make you feel down about writing... Your English just needs some more work. You have potential.
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The request was for the author to use a spell checker, I want to read the novel but it gives me a headache, I repeated please for the comment word count. It looks like a good novel, the novel caught my interest. My request was only for the author to use Grammarly, it is in simplified Chinese. [img=faceslap][img=recommend]
- Ruan_D_VD_Merwe1yrCommented
his, he is male so his. if it is al female it is her.
The old man saw her friend in distress or was it something else entirely she showed the parchment to him and as he read the name. He was flabbergasted, he looked at her and she smiled and had tears in her eyes and she said, "He is not a squib." - Ruan_D_VD_Merwe2yrCommented
Magic is an object in English so instead of she, magic should be an it
Nodding my head , I slowly began to draw all the details of my ritual with a dragon brush . The longer I draw and the higher the moon is . The more clearly the magical energy is felt . And even how she gathers in this place, although the ritual has not even begun yet.