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Benny_Manatee

Benny_Manatee

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Aspiring hobby writer, hope to be full fledged in the future ^^ I like mystery stories, and I do like to write them as well. TC got Silver Prize for WPC #194

2021-06-24 JoinedHungary
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  • Benny_Manatee
    Benny_Manatee2yr
    Replied to Daoist_Iveyflame

    Probably will be. Glad you like the story!

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  • Benny_Manatee
    Benny_Manatee2yr
    Replied to Shirubafokkusuhime

    I'm not trying to start a fight either, I just tend to reply in the same style as the critique/comment/whatever. First and foremost, this is a story with superpowers. It's not that it's only about that, rather that aspect is just the means to an end. Characters have a single superpower, that they can manipulate in certain ways. I don't want to spoil anything from later on, but there's a secondary system, but that's not about having a power, rather using your own body in certain ways, according to what you're good at. In that sense, no it's not his only skill. Furthermore, most characters are quite 'creative' with how they use their abilities, thus making them a bit more colorful. But then again, that's the opinion of the author. Take that as you will. And as I said, go ahead, read it until chapter 40, it's free, and if you liked it, go ahead and read more. If you don't like it after that, you don't have to, but please do remember, that I started writing with this work. In the first 40 chapters it shows a lot how inexperienced I was, and after that, I like to think that the quality gets way better. If your problem was only with the premise, tell me, I'll try to figure out a way to make it more appealing.

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  • Benny_Manatee
    Benny_Manatee2yr
    Replied to Shirubafokkusuhime

    Look, to each his own. If you don't wanna read it, don't. If you do, go for it. Saying that a story is dull, before giving it a read is kinda arrogant, or naive. Can't decide. Don't mean to be rude, just judging you based on a comment.

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  • Benny_Manatee
    Benny_Manatee2yr
    Replied to ib_z

    I think it sounds cool lol

    "I'll take that name, Francis. Call me [Tentazione]!"
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  • Benny_Manatee
    Benny_Manatee2yr
    Commented

    See this! I just gifted the story: Inspiration capsule

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  • Benny_Manatee
    Benny_Manatee2yr
    Commented

    See this! I just gifted the story: Inspiration capsule

    Ch 1 Prologue
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  • Benny_Manatee
    Benny_Manatee2yr
    Commented

    See this! I just gifted the story: Inspiration capsule

    Ch 1 Prologue
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  • Benny_Manatee
    Benny_Manatee2yr
    Replied to R3vfor

    Thanks for your constructive criticism! Really do appreciate it!

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  • Benny_Manatee
    Benny_Manatee2yr
    Commented

    See this! I just gifted the story: Pizza

    Ch 1 Prologue
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  • Benny_Manatee
    Benny_Manatee2yr
    Replied to high_men

    I'm gonna update the synopsis, I guess lol There's nothing of that sort really planned. MC does Temptation in other ways, and usually doesn't use his powers to tempt anyone into his bed.

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  • Benny_Manatee
    Benny_Manatee2yr
    Commented

    See this! I just gifted the story: Pizza

    Ch 1 Prologue
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  • Benny_Manatee
    Benny_Manatee2yr
    Commented

    See this! I just gifted the story: Pizza

    Ch 1 Prologue
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  • Benny_Manatee
    Benny_Manatee2yr
    Commented

    See this! I just gifted the story: Inspiration capsule

    Ch 1 Prologue
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    How I Became the Strongest Sovereign
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  • Benny_Manatee
    Benny_Manatee2yr
    Commented

    See this! I just gifted the story: Inspiration capsule

    Ch 1 Prologue
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    How I Became the Strongest Sovereign
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  • Benny_Manatee
    Benny_Manatee2yr
    Commented

    See this! I just gifted the story: Ice cola

    Ch 1 Prologue
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    How I Became the Strongest Sovereign
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  • Benny_Manatee
    Benny_Manatee2yr
    Commented

    See this! I just gifted the story: Ice cola

    Ch 1 Prologue
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    How I Became the Strongest Sovereign
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  • Benny_Manatee
    Benny_Manatee2yr
    Commented

    See this! I just gifted the story: Inspiration capsule

    Ch 1 Prologue
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  • Benny_Manatee
    Benny_Manatee2yr
    Replied to Stevefpx

    All in all, thanks for the review.

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  • Benny_Manatee
    Benny_Manatee2yr
    Replied to Stevefpx

    There's tgis thing called pacing. Im trying to hold back as much info as possible, until needed, or shouls be hinted at. I agree with most that you said, but i dont recall a second where Dan was trusting, at least in the beginning.

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  • Benny_Manatee
    Benny_Manatee2yr
    Replied to damdamdam

    There definitely is a gap between them. Claire always had her power, along with decent training. Dan spent about a year in prison, just trying to experiment with his power, after discovering it for the first time, at the age of 18. Also, he grows later on, if you keep reading, you'll see what I mean ;) and don't worry, there is a proper training arc as well :P

    Or, was all of this just a dying man rambling on about some rather sentimental tangent?
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