the story is really intriguing. I love the cover, and the synopsis reveals nothing of the initial plot twist, which I really appreciated. Perhaps a tighter writing style could make the reading flow better. In any case, your work, your choice, writer. Really good work, I'm glad you're having success.

The story is original, it took me a long time, and it's very nice to have added religious and mythological elements, transforming them in the service of the story. I also like the kind of black humor you have added from time to time. Just a note, if the dialogue takes place between two well-known characters, avoid describing who the sentence belongs to each time the sentence is spoken. Slow down the pace a lot. Keep it going!

A lot of onomatopoeias, I like it. I think you have to improve your writing a bit. There are a lot of descriptions, but sometimes I felt like the characters disappears. A lot of Fantasy does this. I suggest to focus more on the Characters to make situations more immersive. ^_^

It is not my kind of genre but it lets itself read very well. I like the writing style, seems more a diary than a novel. The MC, characters and situations are also pretty realistic. Good job, enjoy writing and keep up!

Thank you for the review <3 Yeah, I noticed some errors but I will fix it all.

Thank you for the review, it really warms my heart to read such words. I'm x2 motivated now <3

I started this novel months ago, with the intention of turning it into a light novel with illustrations in the future and a series of related works. One day in a video game, maybe. I paused the project for a long time, and it actually hurt. Unfortunately, it has happened many times to not receive feedback, and consequently, to feel miserable ... But now I have sent these thoughts away and I try to publish a chapter almost every day, so, if you happen to be around here give me your opinion , let me feel that you are there, so I will be more and more motivated to continue. Thank you.

I'm not used to System based Webnovels but this caught my attention, I just keep reading it. I have nothing to say that the others in the comments haven't already said. Good Job bro.

The story is interesting. Being a fan of descriptions and details I don't mind reading them in quantities, but in my opinion they should be rationed, and alternated with the dialogue and the development of the story. Good Job c:

Thx. I'll try the best I can.

New chapter incoming today/tomorrow. Stay Worried.