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Too much unnecessary info dump . Put info at the bottom. Don't add Italian ,asian or etc other name just create some by yourself it will be good.your chapter flow to slow with too much redundant content PLZ work on this . Btw good idea keep working. character development not good . If you improve in will change the rating accordingly.
Fantastic writing till now, no major or troubling grammatical mistakes found. Nice plot. Hope the author atleast completes the novel.olz don't drop it midway after reading many dalulau fanfiction this is the best i have seen till now. God bless the author may he continue to write and succeed in his/her endeavours .☺️☺️🤗
Author can you please remove lord Krishna name, resemblance connection to it.The idea you are applying is putting a very weng image on lord Krishna please have your facts checked. The idea is offence to many. I suggest you try adding hypothetical background plz.😊 Btw nice novel
Where is 2nd CHP ?
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