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It started ok, but gets worse. The whole story is about doing a mistake, self loathing, and then correcting the mistake. The whole Ai thing is too weird too. like technically mc created it so in a way he created his daughter in the image to be a wifeđ¤Ž. Gven too. It would have been a much better story if the writer gave up the harem, sticked with charmcaster, removed the over sentience of the Ai, used the wishes properly!!!! The current situation is also weird since as a perfect body no bloodline should affect his mentality and emotions. overall not the best read but still readable since its one of few ben 10 fanfics. Be warned though, its gonna be really annoying.
the story is great overall and fun to read but returning back to one piece his debuff is waaayyy too much. I mean instead of all those otherworld travelling he could have teleported to a more peaceful island in one piece and trained to a much more powerful self. If all those powers gained from other worlds only account to a level even lower than buggy, its better to jst train in one piece itself than wasting that much time. Another thing which weirds me out is he has a whole mansion and stuff in him WITH ley lines but he himself can't use magic. Since its in his soul wouldn't he be able to access that ambient magic. Anyway other than that it was a really great read, specially the HP arc is better than most hp fanfics.
The story is really cool and i do enjoy it a lot but, why would a guy who literally burned to death and nearly died to a troll not use the full power at his disposal to make himself unkillable. I can't really imagine any living being who went through such a death and died under a fire unable to do anything about it due to his powerlessness would weaken himself and put his life in mortal danger again.