Why is he acting like a kid? I thought he was an old fogey.

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Story was going along pretty well up until Stark came out. As soon as he came out the story stagnated with boring canon plot with even more boring MC actions. The story should just stick to the MC and not literally rewrite what happened in canon as whoever is reading fanfiction should already have knowledge about what they are reading about. Hopefully the story doesn't repeat the same crap again.

Unneeded two chapters

So I guess he's a simp. He could of just mind wiped the part of him making the troll disappear or even appearing while they were in the bathroom, but instead went with the stupid decision and started blabbing about pretty much everything. I guess if you're a female he'll probably do whatever they ask or don't ask, pretty disappointing.

And then the story was ruined. Why did you have to add random oc's that no one cares about. Could have chosen literally anybody that was actually written in detail in the book series but chose the same cliched people.

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Pretty shit fic. Its almost exactly like the old fic but worse because the plot is slow af and the MC who complains about being in the Marvel universe somehow doesn't even know half the shit he's supposed to know. 30 chapters of nothing but murder and then some bullshit training arc just so the MC can meet Black Cat. The grammar is good but I wouldn't bother reading until there's at least 100 chapters.

Read 3 chapters and gave up. Pretty boring read. The MC is all over the place and keeps over thinking thingS while whining about everything. Plus the dude is a middle aged guy which means he'll probably be shit when it comes to sword fighting and other types of combat.

Don't bother reading this fic. The MC gets nerfed by becoming retarded enough to get ganked by a gimp and losing his memories so it's not even an SI anymore.

Waste of a read. The author obviously loves getting cuckolded in real life considering every chick the MC is with opens her legs for any dude. Then the unneeded drama and history lessons in every chapter is stupidly boring and repetitive. Then the whole 100 chapters about the world cup to only lose it. Like wtf why even write this shit because with how drawn out the story is there is only going to be one world cup. Who gives a fuck if he wins all the random accolades in soccer when he can't even get the one thing every player wants, The World Cup.

True she shouldn't be able to gain that much especially compared to how sasuke can only use chidori twice, which is less than canon.

Describing the anbu was unnecessary especially if it took most of the chapter to do so. You got them stop explaining every single little thing and write with the mentality that everyone who is reading this fic knows about the shinobi world through different fanfics or the series.

Bruh he's basically the same in the LN as he is in the anime. The only thing that's different is he's more perverted in his actions and thought process while being overly emotional about being weak af.

Story is taking way to long to set up a plot. Its nothing but the MC simping over chicks left and right to then get dragged into their worthless drama that takes up a majority of every chapter. It's just a cycle that keeps repeating that I'm basically waiting for his new chick to want to just be friends so she can bang other dudes and then repeat with the MC agreeing to wearing a greenhat. Other then that the grammar is pretty good.

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Can you end Jenna's plot line already. You honestly made the girl to disgusting to be interested in her life let alone being the MC's chick.

You have to stop calling the MC a magical ninja if he can't even use magic.

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