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The first chapters are captivating and intriguing. However,as we dont know much about the character at the beginning of the book it is hard to sympathize with her but we do feel an attachment as the book progresses. A nicely written story with a good pace, recommended for anyone who enjoys that type of stories
I suppose he learned to do it while he was in the human world. We saw Lucifer change during his stay in LA in more ways than one. Lets just say that his ability to lie came from the many years of staying in LA.
*understood *complained
You are still talking about the past so: *took me,fed me,came etc or *would take me,feed me
*I(i is always used in its capital form) *couldn't(cant talks about the present)
I really liked it and added it to my collection. Normally,I dont enjoy system stories but this one was way more than a series of game characteristics. It had good structure,despite the grammatical errors,the flow was steady and continuous and it generally resembled a fantasy book with system trades rather than the opposite.
The book has a relaxing start and a good flow. The grammar is also good.The main protagonist is relatable,depending on your lifestyle. Overall,a nice work. Keep it up.
Thats why he drinks alcohol. Because the burning feeling in his insides due to drinking reminds him of the same burning feeling of the vow that prevented him from telling the truth and saving his relationship Tragic😢
The story has a very realistic and emotional presentation of one of our society's biggest problems(child adandonment.It has a solid structure and a nice flow.Some grammatical errors here and there but nothing serious and I liked the attention to detail. I would recommend the author to remain focused on the parts that rely on her imagination (sofi's life,emotions etc) instead of trying to reconstruct modern society in her book. Dont get me wrong,that doesnt mean the author is not talented or careful. Its just that the smallest mistake can annoy the reader when you are writing about real-life situations(for example,children that are caught for stealing,dont get reprimanded and released,they are sent to foster homes) Overall a very good story with potential. Keep up the good work.
the funny thing is,the main reason people in my country dont get vaccinated is because they fear the vaccine will alter their DNA
The story has a nice flow and a promising start.The starting scene with the routine of the family is heart-wearming and relaxing but I think it is unnecessary long. Also,the mother's relaxed and cheerful attitude in some part of the books makes it hard for the reader to see her as a grieving parent. A good work,overall. Keep it up!