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  • davexlee
    davexlee3yr
    Posted

    first, I love the chapter naming. they are very refreshing and made me want to know more. the plot is enjoyable because it was well written. I was quite fond of the fighting scenes. MC has quite an insight too. overall it was a good story and very enjoyable. the fan of this genre will love it, as well as some new reader like me. keep up the good work, author nim.

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    Parallel Trials of a Somewhat Hero
    Fantasy · SarushiroEruma
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  • davexlee
    davexlee3yr
    Posted

    well written and very flowy from my point of view. I love the Mc, he has that frank yet childish kind of nature with a bit of mischief. the parent is no joke, I enjoy their interaction. it was very lively. my personal favorite chapter is chapter 6, the way you presented the information was well thought and easy to understand. all in, it was a good story and very enjoyable. I'm rooting for you, author.

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  • davexlee
    davexlee3yr
    Commented

    Welcome to the club, buddy

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  • davexlee
    davexlee3yr
    Commented

    I'm literally laughing out loud

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  • davexlee
    davexlee3yr
    Posted

    I'm reviewing after the first update. The earlier chapter is for the character introduction, it's informative and precise. I like to know how the plot going from here. I have a suggestion, maybe the author shouldn't use the punctuation mark as the way to stress a word or sentence. In my personal view, this kind of use a little bit hindering the readers' rhythms of reading. But overall this is a promising start! I'm waiting for more updates, I'm cheering on you author nim.

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    chapter 1 Ella Riz Rubinson
    Teen · Cherrymilk_0823
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  • davexlee
    davexlee3yr
    Posted

    It's very informative, fast face slapping. Golden duo between the MC and fluffy haha. I can vividly imagine everything from your words. There were some errors punctuation mark but thankfully not disturbing the reading rhythm. Oh, that father and brother's of Yvonne? I hate them. Thank you. In a way a reader would hate 'villain' of course, not about how you write characters. Other than that I really enjoy your story. Can't wait to move to next chapters. I'm cheering on you, Author nim.

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    Just let me be a cannon fodder
    Fantasy · Lou_Eli
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  • davexlee
    davexlee3yr
    Commented

    I do have a Lucas in mind😂

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    Just let me be a cannon fodder
    Fantasy · Lou_Eli
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  • davexlee
    davexlee3yr
    Commented

    Me! Me! Ask me!

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    Just let me be a cannon fodder
    Fantasy · Lou_Eli
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  • davexlee
    davexlee3yr
    Commented

    Me too, I've slapped hard.

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    Just let me be a cannon fodder
    Fantasy · Lou_Eli
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  • davexlee
    davexlee3yr
    Commented

    I'm in for the title. periodt.

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    Just let me be a cannon fodder
    Fantasy · Lou_Eli
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  • davexlee
    davexlee3yr
    Commented

    I choked on my drink, please this is too funny🤣 their interaction is gold. I'm sold.

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    Just let me be a cannon fodder
    Fantasy · Lou_Eli
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  • davexlee
    davexlee3yr
    Replied to davexlee

    It got posted before I finished my review 😂 anyway, moving on. The leads are so funny with each other. Writing this in 3rd person view make the situation so much humoring because each and every character was guessing each other's mind. The main idea is easy to spot, very enjoyable to read and its moving to more promising chapter. Keep up the good work dear Author🥰

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    Alive bond
    Book&Literature · eyaggelia146
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  • davexlee
    davexlee3yr
    Posted

    I love how the characters interact, they were lively without making your words seems messy. I have a suggestion, to be more careful with the punctuation mark. For me personally the forgotten space or the unavailability of punctuation mark kind of ruin the mood but it's only something minor.

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    Alive bond
    Book&Literature · eyaggelia146
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  • davexlee
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    Commented

    Generally speaking, she ain't your regular mom

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    Alive bond
    Book&Literature · eyaggelia146
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  • davexlee
    davexlee3yr
    Commented

    As someone with the aim to "kill people" I actually do find this sentence very useful, I'll use it next time 😂

    "I dont like the world kill. It is too savege. We will do something more elegant. We feed on pure energy. Just the past millenia you have discovered that the physical connection between humans is more tasty and nutritious. You dont need her healthy or sane to make a meal out of her. We simply want her alive."
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    Alive bond
    Book&Literature · eyaggelia146
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  • davexlee
    davexlee3yr
    Commented

    This one hit home🤣🤣🤣 sounds like my writing deadlines

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    Alive bond
    Book&Literature · eyaggelia146
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  • davexlee
    davexlee3yr
    Commented

    Anything with mother in it, can be a start of a joy or a disaster. No in between - at least in my life.

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    Alive bond
    Book&Literature · eyaggelia146
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