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DavidCeniceros

DavidCeniceros

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Author of ‘The Will to Wish’ and various other works. I enjoy letting my personality take over my stories. The style can shift dramatically between each story, so make sure to check out some of them!

2020-11-16 JoinedUnited States
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  • DavidCeniceros
    DavidCeniceros11mth
    Posted

    I really love this story so far. The worldbuilding is great, but the way you formulated your words was even better. It's incredibly unique the way you form your sentences, and the descriptions are great.

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    The Nine Monarchs
    Fantasy · TheMortalGod
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  • DavidCeniceros
    DavidCeniceros11mth
    Posted

    Really interesting story so far. What sets this one apart from most other stories I have read is the terminology. There are a lot of unique abilities being used, and you can tell that the author used a lot of creativity when crafting this world.

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    The Reverse Mana System
    Fantasy · Shadow_BLAck_1018
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  • DavidCeniceros
    DavidCeniceros1yr
    Posted

    The auxillary chapter shows me that you put a lot of thought into this world. The setting is grim, and the characters are rough. I think the strongest points of the story come from the dialogue. Each character is filled to the brim with personality. (I also enjoy the gore you put into the story.)

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    The Devil Under The Name Of God
    Fantasy · 1AM
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  • DavidCeniceros
    DavidCeniceros1yr
    Posted

    Ok so I read the first three chapters. I plan on reading more later, but there are some interesting things I've noticed. Quality 4.9/5 Decent writing style. Not too flashy, and also nor bad in any way. Other than a few errors in sentence structure, it was smooth. If there's one thing I can nitpick, it's that you haven't really done a great job of describing the appearance of the characters. I'm not going to hold that against you though, because you might have in a chapter I haven't read. Updates 5/5 Nothing to say really. Story design 3/5 In the first chapter there is way too much going on. Powers are used, names are dropped, there's fighting, and all at the same time it's hard to understand who's talking because we have no clue who is on what side doing what. I understand that this is some sort of flash forward scene, or a scene to get the reader interested, but it was a bit much. The second chapter is better about this, but there is still a lot thrown at the reader to understand. World Background 5/5 I can tell that there is a lot of stuff going on in this story by how much info was dropped in the first few chapters. The world seems like it is full of info ready to be read. Overall, it was a 4.4 from me. I plan to read more later, because this was certainly interesting. Good luck on future chapters!

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    The Impurity's Ascension
    Magical Realism · Tiphereth
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  • DavidCeniceros
    DavidCeniceros1yr
    Posted

    Overall really good story. The introduction is mysterious, yet full of information. The descriptions of the characters are well written. The only errors I could find is the occasional run on sentence. Other than that, it was really good.

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    How To Tame A Fiery Demon (BL)
    LGBT+ · Mythphilia
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  • DavidCeniceros
    DavidCeniceros1yr
    Posted

    Good, intriguing story, There are a few minor mistakes, but nothing that is unfixable. For example, the beginning of the first chapter is a bit explain-y. Too much info at one time can bore the reader. After that, the story is very fluid and smooth. Good job so far!

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    Mafia Tears
    Contemporary Romance · Sun23
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  • DavidCeniceros
    DavidCeniceros1yr
    Replied to NotBeatrix

    Thanks a lot for the great review! It means a lot coming from such a talented author!

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    The Will to Wish
    Martial Arts · DavidCeniceros
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  • DavidCeniceros
    DavidCeniceros1yr
    Posted

    This one was really great. Honestly one of the best I've read on the website. I love the kind of... powetic approach you took. (Best word I can think of) It reminds me a lot of books I used to read as a child. Less focusing on the characters or world and more focusing on describing the movement of scenes and characters. You really don't see that on this kind of website. And I really do respect that. When I write, I tend to lean towards character developement, and I know a lot of writers on here focus on creating the same fantasy world over and over. I respect that you decided to just... tell your story. You could've easily picked something that would of gotten you thousands of views, but you instead chose something that represents you and your style of writing. In some ways, I really look up to you as a writer. Keep up the good work!

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    Tempest And Temptation
    Historical Romance · NotBeatrix
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  • DavidCeniceros
    DavidCeniceros1yr
    Commented

    Very interesting name. Does it hold some kind of meaning?

    'Enough about this, she's home and safe with Kaelixson.'
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    Tempest And Temptation
    Historical Romance · NotBeatrix
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  • DavidCeniceros
    DavidCeniceros1yr
    Commented

    I'm really starting to fall in love with the writing style. Some stories need simpler styles, and some need more sophisticated descriptions to paint an image. You picked the perfect style that suits the mood of the story.

    However, despite the room's elegance and the warmth eminent from the crackling of the fireplace, there was something stifling about the room that no amount of beauty could hide. There was a chill in the air and a grim aura, impossible to ignore. Periodically, even a cool draft swarmed the room, while shadows encroached on the incoming daylight.
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    Tempest And Temptation
    Historical Romance · NotBeatrix
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  • DavidCeniceros
    DavidCeniceros1yr
    Commented

    Really good chapter. It takes a lot of talent to stretch out such simple scene with vivid, descriptive words. So far, this seems to be a near professional level work.

    Ch 1 Prologue
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    Tempest And Temptation
    Historical Romance · NotBeatrix
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  • DavidCeniceros
    DavidCeniceros1yr
    Commented

    Jesus, this is so good. Your descriptions are actually insane. Reminds me of stories I used to read in the library as a kid.

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    Tempest And Temptation
    Historical Romance · NotBeatrix
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  • DavidCeniceros
    DavidCeniceros1yr
    Commented

    Love the descriptive words so far.

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    Tempest And Temptation
    Historical Romance · NotBeatrix
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  • DavidCeniceros
    DavidCeniceros1yr
    Commented

    Excited to read it!

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    Tempest And Temptation
    Historical Romance · NotBeatrix
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  • DavidCeniceros
    DavidCeniceros1yr
    Posted

    So far its a good story. The world building is excellent, and the characters feel genuine. Keep pumping out chapters, you’re doing a great job so far.

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    Shadows Alpha 2089
    Fantasy · Rage_1
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  • DavidCeniceros
    DavidCeniceros1yr
    Posted

    Incredible story. The writing style is flowy, and the information given is never too much for the reader to handle. The world building is great, and it really made me feel like I was there with the characters.

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    The Sorcerer's King: ways of the witches
    History · Samcrowned00
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  • DavidCeniceros
    DavidCeniceros1yr
    Posted

    I really like the two main characters. They work well with eachother. The fantasy setting is relatable, and easy for the reader to understand and put themselves in.

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    Scarlette Overland
    Fantasy Romance · empressblackrose09
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  • DavidCeniceros
    DavidCeniceros1yr
    Posted

    Honestly, a very well thought out story. I can tell that you planned the plot before you started writing. I like how fleshed out the main character is. It makes him much more relatable than the average protaganist.

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    The Other Side/Rise of the Crow
    Fantasy · pblazarus
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  • DavidCeniceros
    DavidCeniceros1yr
    Commented

    Her ears are too high level for you peasants

    The woman thought; 'Actually, I can hear all your whispers and gossips around, and no need to lower your voices because it's no use'
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    Scarlette Overland
    Fantasy Romance · empressblackrose09
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  • DavidCeniceros
    DavidCeniceros1yr
    Commented

    Great sense of red emotions here. I felt a chill down my spine.

    The memories were still fresh inside of me, haunting my sight wherever I went. Clementine's eyes gawked at me, begging for me to help her from the miserable state brought by the monster.
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    NPC Code: Red Riding Hood
    Fantasy Romance · kuhaku_sora
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