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Kei_Zhanyu

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  • Kei_Zhanyu
    Kei_Zhanyu3yr
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    Hey author, I think that your writing is pretty good. Keep up the good work!👍 I hope you can post a little more because I want to see what you do with the characters. Although this was a school project as you said in the syno**is, I hope you could include some more, say world building and more depth to the charcters’ personalities, this is because I personally found that the three witches that you wrote about were a little hard to distinguish between. Although your writing has a few flaws. I didn’t find too many blatantly obvious grammatical errors and also your use of imagery was good as it allowed for me to imagine the scene you’re describing well. All in all I think that you should keep up the good work!

    altalt
    The Treads of Fate Hang in Witches’ Hands
    Fantasy ¡ Purplish
    detail
  • Kei_Zhanyu
    Kei_Zhanyu3yr
    Commented

    Um... after the dialogue there is a bit too much detail. It kind of kills the mood a bit.

    Ch 1 The Meeting
    altalt
    The Treads of Fate Hang in Witches’ Hands
    Fantasy ¡ Purplish
    detail