Wait...why was she so ecstatic? He didn't even tell her why the council didn't want her to rule yet... Ah, it all comes down to a magical prophecy...what else would it be? I'm still liking this story and I'm loving these descriptions!

oh...it took me a minute to realize that Lenna is her mother. Maybe you can clarify that a little so it's clearer?

Can you he not use any weapons in such a battle? To give him time until he can summon something? And why did his father adopt him if he was going to leave him to flounder? It doesn't really seem that logical to me. I feel like this chapter is building up for the character to make a huge comeback in some way. At least, I hope that happens.

Projecting...?

I love Cael's personality! I can already tell that he's an awesome character. I think we could use more physical descriptions of him. Since Adira is their only child, didn't everyone already know that she would be Queen? They had plenty of time to wrap their heads around it... My only concern with the story is that it doesn't really go into what impact her father's death had on her, or her family. The mother doesn't really seem to be grieving. It's clear that they knew he was going to die, but still, I'm worried about the grief from his death being swept under the rug to focus on the plot's conflict...which is that a woman will be Queen in a misogynistic nation. Plus, we as readers, don't really have a reason to care that the King has died as we don't know anything about him. I don't know if you explore that later on but right now, while I like the plot and characters, I think there needs to be more emotion.

Captivating start! I love the ending to this prologue! I wish we knew more of what Adira was feeling but besides that, the prologue was good.

That's another thing that needs to be clarified..

(This review is only of chapters 1-4.) The author has good grammar and spelling. The writing is clear and simple. There are some descriptions, but I feel like the author could go into more detail of what exactly the hybrids look like. At one point, I thought the wolf was picking up something with their hand, when they were actually using their mouth. There is a little development of the world given to us in each chapter, but we don't have a clear picture of the inter-workings of this world yet.I definitely see the creativity with the enemies the hybrid and his mother encounter. Because it is only the first few chapters, I did cut the author a break with the world-building, but I anticipate that a lot more will be revealed later. I like that bits and pieces are given to us instead of boring exposition about the world all at once. As for the plot, I'm not sure where it's going. The plot right now doesn't seem to be flowing well. The actions of the character are questionable too. I wish we could have seen more of the battle between the mother and the plant, and that her son would have joined, even if he wasn't strong enough. I don't understand how he can just stand back and watch his mother get attacked. It also ruins the anticipation and excitement because I expect that the mother will win, since the focus isn't on her. I also think that the encounter of the spirit could have happened later. The plot is too clunky with two big events happening at once. As for the characters, I haven't gotten a real sense of who they are. I don't really know what their personalities are like yet and so I don't really care for them. The plot is intriguing, but that can only hold people's attention for so long, you have to develop the characters enough so we can care about them. Overall, a decent story so far with potential. I wish the author well and hope the best for their story.

So he isn't going to help his mother fight the vine monster even though he was the one who provoked it? What a fine protagonist we have here...-_- I feel like you could put more emotion in this chapter to make it more exciting. Besides that, it has good descriptions and is interesting.

Wait...these wolves have hands? Were they half-human all this time?

In the first sentence, you should put a comma before "that" and after "days".

Hmm...so this is first person? I don't really like that it went from third to first person but okay... I think for the first chapter you need something more to grip the readers. Nothing has really happened yet so there's nothing that will keep people interested. I like your plot so I will read on but I think you need to spice things up more. And if they are only half wolf, shouldn't some of them be leopard? Why are they all wolves?

Interesting name...but it's the most normal name out of their choices. XD I also like how he just asks to adopts him and does so just like that, and how Richard calls him Dad, just like that. Normally I'd criticize those things for being that easy for plot convenience, but this isn't that kind of story.

So...is this the prologue or chapter one? It has an adequate start so far. I would suggest starting off with something more exciting than launching straight into the backstory. You need something to hook the readers. But the idea you have is good and it sounds interesting. I will be reading more later.

(This review is only of chapters one and two, which was what was written on the date of this review.) This story is gripping, enticing and action-packed. The plot has good pacing, and slows down to develop the characters, but also speeds up for the exciting bits and to create a feeling of urgency. The characters are well-rounded and likable and their actions are true to themselves. Because it is only the first couple chapters, there are still some unanswered questions about the characters' pasts and how they come to be in their circumstances, but we can clearly tell who they are as people. While we aren't given much insight to how this society works, we are given some insights to what their world is like in a simple way. The monsters in this story are also very original and creative, which I did give extra points for. The existence of these monsters and why the majority of the popular doesn't really seem to be aware of their existence has not yet been explained. I would also like to know more about where exactly they live and how it's run, what form of government they have, etc. The descriptions in this story are top-notch and it's easy to visualize. The story is well-written and there are hardly any grammar errors. Although the chapters seem long for webnovel, this story will keep you excited enough to finish the chapter and leave you wanting more! Overall, a very strong start so far. I would recommend for anyone looking for a fantasy action story to check it out. Once this story is completed and I read it till the end, I will write another review that will cover the whole story.

Yeah and I enjoyed it.

A chaotic yet ridiculous fantasy story with humor. How can I resist? A very enjoyable read so far! I will be reading more!

You're welcome. I'm happy to help. And it would be better to write in third person omniscient for that instead of limited. But if you are more comfortable in limited, I would suggest just writing from one character's perspective per chapter. Then it won't seem like your jumping around and you readers will be less confused.

This story is so incredibly detailed and well written! You are very creative and descriptive! I also like our main characters so far. I do wonder how only Riona seems to know what those monsters are and why they haven't encountered them before.

...Did the point of view change multiple times in this chapter? It threw me off balance and I would advise you not to do that. Or if you must, then change perspective in different chapters.