Jay_Synergy
Teenage Author spending his time writing down his imagination. Support is always appreciated. Not a professional but I try to upload regularly.
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Jay_Synergy3yrPostedAuthor's shameless review here. This is my newest story "The Villain Within". I am not sure of how often I will upload new chapters but I will try my best. I will also be doing things a bit different as I try to avoid major clichés to make my story a bit more unique. Some of you may remember my previous work "Man Made Demon" and thanks for the support on that work.
- Jay_Synergy3yrReplied to NikTitanik866
I completely agree with your points which is why I dropped the story, and thank you for taking the time to give constructive criticism. I have plans for another story soon and plan to use all I have learned from experience, reviews, and comments in order to make it a much better story than this one was.
- Jay_Synergy3yrReplied to John_0548Ch 29 Friend Or Foe?
- Jay_Synergy3yrReplied to JlairuCh 20 Terrifying Discoverey
- Jay_Synergy3yrReplied to AlphasaCh 15 A Gift
- Jay_Synergy3yrReplied to CaptainBoyHole
no.
[Warning: DO NOT ENGAGE IN COMBAT] - Jay_Synergy3yrReplied to CaptainBoyHole
If only he could :(
"Damn it! Damn it! Damn it!" he angrily screamed and pounded the floor as tears flowed out of his closed eyelids. - Jay_Synergy3yrReplied to DelinquentBalloonCh 25 All Together
- Jay_Synergy3yrReplied to darklord_hades
Yes >_<
[1 Available Stat Point] - Jay_Synergy3yrReplied to Adramelech
umm. You got a point. I'll change it to say he kept the skill activated during that time.
This paragraph has been deleted. - Jay_Synergy3yrReplied to tuba_sanCh 1 End Of An Era
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- Jay_Synergy3yrReplied to ghostshepherdCh 3 The System
- Jay_Synergy3yrReplied to Adel_QuinnCh 5 The Trial
- Jay_Synergy3yrReplied to Meat_Muncher
The water he drank had a spell that....through him into his thoughts where he would bet bullied and his dad comforted him. It wasn't his memories because he remembered that he was in a new world and his dad told him to keep fighting. Eh....idk how to explain it
"Your mom left because she had to" he claimed now trying to hold back his tears. "and you didn't choose to go to that world. You were forced there, and treated terribly." - Jay_Synergy3yrReplied to Meat_Muncher
Im not that far into one piece.
"We will have to continue that training tomorrow, but for now let's see how much your hardening skill can improve your strength." he added as he stabbed his staff into the ground. - Jay_Synergy3yrReplied to SirZed
I think about this every time he activates a skill, maybe I'll change it to where he does not have to say it. However, it's mainly so the readers know what is happening when he uses an ability.
Angry at the man for laughing, he took his stance one more. "Harden" he yelled before swinging his arm towards the huge boulder. - Jay_Synergy3yrReplied to _En
You have a point although I did come up with details for this which I chose to remove. Basically, they knew he wasn't actually a demon but a normal human with average strength. Also, it isn't that the dungeon is weak but one of the weaker dungeons. Dungeons are used for adventuring and stuff, they just threw him in one because why open a strong one just to send an average person to death. He would have 100% died if he didn't have The System.
He was unable to see much of his surroundings but overheard guards ask the escort for ID before saying they could "past through the walls."