grammar!

Probably because I'm 18+, and it's not in the popular genre XD

It's got potential, although needs some work in editing part. Please be mindful of using more commas and grammar wise...not as bad what I usually see. Fast development, keep it up. Never give up, always keep striving on like a river does!

I like the plot, and what you've come up with. Just one thing, you could make it more fluid? No need to write it out it's happening in front of the building, make us read it... give her the action. Keep it up!

As always, it's about grammar. The plotline itself is interesting for anyone, who wants to read a book about reincarnation. Keep it up, author!

The only issue: grammar. Plot: interesting, you easily play around with God-ruled world and the use of Harem is more interesting than it usually is. Once I have more time, I'll try to finish the story since I got curious. Despite some issues I saw, I could easily imagine the story as I'm reading it making me more and more glad that I picked it up. I wish you the best with this novel!

Other than spotting a few grammar mistakes, it was an interesting story to read - especially if you're into gaming stories, then this is for you. It's got all the necessary elements in. Lots of chapters that won't let you forget the story, and well-thought characters. Nicely done!

It's got an interesting start, although, may need some grammar editing it's still an addicting story you can overlook them. Easy and addictive read, one that I may just finish once I have more time on my hands. Definitely got interested in what's gonna happen.

interesting start. will check more later.

thank you, I'm glad you liked it :)

It has a really good start, I like the way you phrase things and hook readers up. I may finish it once I have more time but from what I've read, don't give up and be sure to finish it. Some paragraphs are just too long, but otherwise - a good read!

It's a good start, keep it up and just be mindful of a few grammar errors!

Oh, I like this sentence!