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đŸ‡”đŸ‡­ || demigod | shadowhunter | divergent | potterhead | tribute | grisha | and all the others i forgot to mention

2020-07-20 JoinedPhilippines
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  • ephemery
    ephemery3yr
    Posted

    Great story! The plot is very intriguing as well as the world background. There are just some things I like to suggest though. Instead of referring to the characters as His/Her Highness [name], you can just opt to mention their first names instead to make it more easy to read. Also, I noticed some redundancy. Searching for synonyms about the same word might help. All in all, the book is already good, just a little editing and it could already line up with the best. Good job and keep writing!

    altalt
    DEADIE
    Fantasy · Madyan_wani
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  • ephemery
    ephemery3yr
    Replied to Madyan_wani

    Thank you so much!

    altalt
    Throne of Ashes
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  • ephemery
    ephemery3yr
    Replied to Faysal_Ahmed_5058

    Thank you so much!

    altalt
    Throne of Ashes
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  • ephemery
    ephemery3yr
    Replied to bleedingpapers

    thank you! i'm glad you loved it <3

    Allyria woke up to the sound of muffled whispers in the distance.
    altalt
    Throne of Ashes
    Fantasy · ephemery
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    ephemery3yr
    Replied to bleedingpapers

    Thank you so much!

    altalt
    Throne of Ashes
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  • ephemery
    ephemery3yr
    Replied to Mel_Aniv

    Thank you so much!

    altalt
    Throne of Ashes
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  • ephemery
    ephemery3yr
    Replied to Aeipathy_02

    Thank you so much!

    altalt
    Throne of Ashes
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  • ephemery
    ephemery3yr
    Posted

    Nicely done! The plot was interesting and somewhat mysterious. The description and narrations were very easy to read although I can say that the writing quality still has lots of room for improvement. I do suggest you make the synopsis less vivid. Two-three sentences might not be enough to get your readers hooked. Still, good job and keep writing!

    altalt
    Xavion Silverfate
    Fantasy · bleedingpapers
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  • ephemery
    ephemery3yr
    Posted

    Very well-written. The scenes are perfectly described and the plot is also interesting. The synopsis was good enough to hook people into reading. There was one thing I noticed though, I just want to suggest to make the chapters longer, probably 1.2k-2k characters since it will be more efficient to read, some readers would also prefer it too. However, this is only my opinion, it's still up to you. Good job and keep writing!

    altalt
    Demoniac
    Fantasy · DarkseidEquation
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  • ephemery
    ephemery3yr
    Posted

    For someone who wants light and romantic stories, this surely is for you. I loved how you described all the scenes, especially in narrating the character's actions although there can still be something to be improved in the world background aspect. Still, good book and keep writing!

    altalt
    The Queer Emperor's Wife Is A Little Too Daring!
    Fantasy · _AiRen_
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  • ephemery
    ephemery3yr
    Replied to DarkseidEquation

    Thank you so much! I appreciate that you made sure to point out the things I'm lacking. I will surely put that in mind

    altalt
    Throne of Ashes
    Fantasy · ephemery
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    ephemery3yr
    Replied to _AiRen_

    Thank you so much!

    altalt
    Throne of Ashes
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  • ephemery
    ephemery3yr
    Posted

    This is a really interesting read. I also love your writing style, the dialogue and narrations are very easy to follow. Continue writing and good luck to your career!

    altalt
    Untainted
    Urban · angelicdemon
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    ephemery3yr
    Replied to lenkite

    Well, old film projectors already existed as early as 1800s. Hehe.

    The two of them giggled. But she understood and felt the same sentiment. Who wouldn't? History class is just as boring as watching a bad documentary, she thought.
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    Throne of Ashes
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  • ephemery
    ephemery3yr
    Replied to Tiffany_Pinyard

    Thank you!

    Ch 38 Blessed
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    Throne of Ashes
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  • ephemery
    ephemery3yr
    Replied to Rhoda_Dornoo

    Hello! I'll be updating soon. I'm just taking a break since I have to focus in school. Thank you for being patient <3

    altalt
    Throne of Ashes
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  • ephemery
    ephemery3yr
    Replied to Tiffany_Pinyard

    Thank you!

    Ch 38 Blessed
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    Throne of Ashes
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    ephemery3yr
    Replied to madskie00017

    <3

    Ch 6 Part of the Act
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    Throne of Ashes
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  • ephemery
    ephemery3yr
    Replied to Mhiz_Green

    Thank you! ^____^

    Ch 1 Prologue
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    Throne of Ashes
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  • ephemery
    ephemery3yr
    Replied to Samkat99

    Thank you! ^____^

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    Throne of Ashes
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