Just as how first impressions can make it break a person, the first or second chapter usually needs to be strong enough to pull one in, but not so strong that the author can't keep up the consistency. As a former editor for non fiction magazine and an aspiring fiction writer, I have to give full points for writing ability and creativity. Just based on what I read, albeit short read, I felt that the title was slightly misleading. Looking at other stories where the protagonist comes back in time, instead of "Rebirth" a word like "Return" would befit this type of genre better. They both have similar meanings, but Rebirth would refer to a new beginning in an unfamiliar world or setting while Return would make more sense for a fresh start at an earlier save point just as how this novel's protagonist also comes back to an earlier age period and is determined to change his destiny. All this aside, I think I found me a good read to accompany my breaks at work. P.S. I work as a translator in the Japanese Embassy, coupled with my editor experience I can give a few more insightful and constructive criticism/pointers, should the author or anyone else may need. P.S.S. also note English is my third language, so I quite understand the struggle of writing without helpful tools like Grammarly which I use quite regularly.

Fun fact, this has more views than the actual novel...

maybe we should request novels

This has inspired me to release my own Blah novel.

I envy this world. A world where even orphans can get married easily. Our modern realistic world has fewer marriages probably.

Brilliant. The synopsis wasn't cliched. The chapter titles were. Brilliant execution of ideas, well written. So, after reading 2 chapters, I have no idea where this is going.

A decent story, poorly executed but shows promise. I'd recommend finding an editor to work with you if you ever do plan on marketing and publishing this story in the near future. Just needs a lot of polishing, and I'm sure you'll find more readers.

Chapter 2: Chapter 1: Prologue

That last line... this story breaks the fourth wall!!!

When the author sneaks in the MC's name without people realizing it.....

Wait, who the heck is Vladimir? When was this dude ever introduced?

The man crept to the kid and said, "Oi. Kid. You should go home. Your parents must be worried about you." As he said that he wondered to himself, 'Please just go home, I have a wet coat to fix and I can't stand around waiting for a kid to leave a tree.'

The man wondered, 'It's just a kid, but why is he crying out here and under a tree? Did he get scolded, or perhaps got into a fight? Well, that's not important now, I should help him get out of the rain.'

He began to take a closer look around his surroundings as he walked towards the sounds. The man was on the right track as the sounds grew louder with each step until he came upon a large tree. Lo and behold, a young child was crying at the foot of the tree. A boy, of about 6 or 7 years old.

He was about to walk away when the sobbing could be heard again. He stopped again and as he turned around he said, "I'm definitely not hearing things. But where is this sound coming from?"

The man paused. He could have sworn he just heard something. "Huh? Did I just hear... a cry? Sobbing?" He glanced behind him. "Nah, it's probably my imagination. I mean, the skies are busy crying. I really should get going."

He let out another sigh, looked up to the skies and let his mind speak, "What am I even talking about? I really ought to stop saying such nonsense and get going home already."

"Stupid rain! I just tailored this coat and you just had to ruin it?" He took out his somewhat dry handkerchief from his coat pocket and began to wipe his coat dry while muttering under his breath, "Stupid rain, I swear I will destroy you someday."

When the wind finally died down, the man let out a sigh in relief, but due to his umbrella not doing its job resulting in his precious coat getting wet, he angrily grumbled,

"Whoa! Give me a break!" Shouted the man, "My coat!"