why does everyone do this in a fic "can't hear it's like I'm underwater" it's so easy to hear underwater unless you mean to hear someone who is talking underwater otherwise it's obvious what they're saying
I couldn't move; I could only faintly hear what was happening around me, but not very clearly. It was like hearing underwater, distorted, and far away.
forgot to say that it's really great to see fallout fics and that I don't mean anything I said to be insulting I just have trouble forcing myself to get through chapters I'm sure it gets better in the later chapters just my OCD acting up
I personally do not read stories where the first chapter does not catch my interest but that's just me. idk if all the chapters are like the first but it might be a good idea to slowly rewrite the beginning chapters in a better format as you get more experienced
I love star wars but this right here is absolutely horrible literally just a wish fulfillment novel, which I get it, it's your novel but it's really poorly made and executed and I'm surprised that you have so many views when others are more deserving of the attention.