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Trash start. Braindead MC. Author lacks imagination so he creates a situation where the MC lets his enemies run away from him whilst he kills the rest of the group. On top of staying in that same exact location where he had killed the members after the fact for a while. Then gets all frantic when they come back for revenge with more people and a cat and mouse fame ensues. Maybe the authors braindead for writing this out đ¤ Also wanted to write this as there's way to many fake reviews on this novel giving a false depiction of its worth. Here's me balancing the odds.
There's your mistake as an author of this type of novel. Why introduce her with so much description and context as a harem potential member if you had no plans on mc netori'ng his father. Because if you do then it is netorare from that perspective for the mc. Also thanks to this comment I remembered why I dropped this novel. have a good day
Story is bad. Wish I could burn it as the author suggested. This is the tale of a character and his friends. The 'mc' is not unique, his powers are common place, he is not a genius, babysit non stop, travels with a set of people who power up easily like the 'mc'. MC actively makes sure they power up at the same speed as him. Wish I had read reviews before reading 100 plus chapters to come to this realisation. tyrant novel is much better but hopefully it doesn't turn out like this novel in this aspect of babysitting, travelling with non harem members for a long period of time and actively boosting their strength. He's not their master, being a friend in these novels should have its limits which hopefully you understand since with Tyrant you have managed to stay within.
*sigh* Please do us readers a favour author and remove system from the title - everywhere. It seems you failed to understand what a system is - 100+ chapters no mentions of any quest/mission/ goals for the mc which is why the story feels like slice of life, boring and no sense of progress. 40 chapters and only 3 days has done by. a bunch of the annoying young master trope being used to annoyance. no mention of his stats which is pretty laughable. All that's happened is information dumping and filler r-18. I doubt these problems will go away since its clear your idea of a system is just displaying skill titles lol and his harem members. It's disappointing since I thought I'd found something.
who said anything about being edgelord. if you dont find him cringe in the first 30 chapters then thats a you problem which Is worrying as an author. The fact he gets teased so easily and always complaining to his system is pretty annoying, especially since she did all that for him and he reacts the way he does is pretty shitty. I guess my biggest gripe is I can't stand immature characters, especially ones that have reincarnated. 17 is old enough to have a decent amount of maturity so its a shame you decided to 1st start your novel with a 5 year old, and 2, immature. whole attractive aspect of reincarnated stories is we don't have to deal with these cringe phases of growth. The first 50 chapters are a struggle to read for many reasons beside the things I stated above - the content, pace, context etc. Please read other authors work in this genre to get a better idea on how to write these type of stories -cultivator with an ai system would be a good place to start. I will trudge through the snoozefest that you created and see if it as fast paced as you said. I hope there's a major improvement after the first 50 chapters.
160 chapters and only 20 days passed is worrying. this is a bit too slow paced from that perspective. just a thought - add some time skips for training and miscellaneous things that happen in between. some conversations can also be skipped and summarised to keep the story progressing a bit quicker which also means his power will be progress quicker.
Wouldve been nice if you put a warning or mention the reader has to suffer through his child stages. Literally the worst arc of every novel and quite frankly don't understand how competent writers don't understand this. all the information dump at the start is also crass with very little hint of progress or even a bloody status check of the character. for a system story you barely get to see his status...gonna trybto sludge through till the racy scenes by which I hope he's reached a decent age at least a mid teen, and actually development of his power. Also hope he takes a more assertive tone and stops being the whiny, beta character you have presented at the start.
This is definitely your weakest mc yet and its weird why you intentionally made it that way. I mean weak as in his character. The situation with Su Fei was frankly trash writing, she was literally an abandoned chick. he didn't even fight for her despite loving her which quite frankly makes him a cuck despite all his gifts. Really disappointing considering how well your mc in cultivator with AI is but even he has glaring issues so yh. just my 2 cents