Thunderpuppy21

It’s meh. The protag is honestly just a lucky idiot. Rather than building up slowly through smart plays. The protag plays a stupid fake, wins the ultimate prize and it’s over. Then the story just muddles about with no sense of tension or progress.

It’s a mess, but a fun mess. It tries to be dark and gritty, and instead ends up being edgy and silly. Characters are flat, the protag constantly makes dumb decisions and never gets punished. Violence is used for shock value and quickly becomes meaningless.

This is a hard one to judge. The writing and story progression is solid. And while many people have problems with the protag. I do like him, even if his personality can feel forced at times. But the problem is the simulation. From a writing perspective. Simulations have one big drawback. They deflate all tension. Nothing that happens in the simulation matters, because it will all be undone. Which was fine for the first two simulations. As they were short and mostly ways to convey info to the protag. But the latest one has spanned almost half the book. And it tries to have dramatic moments. But it’s all a simulation so the dramatic moments just fall flat. Interesting relationships, tense fights, all of it ceases to matter. Because the protag is gonna jump back in time and do it all over again. So it’s hard to stay invested in it.

It’s Warmaisach, so of course it’s really good. It has all the hallmarks. So yeah, read it, it’s one of the best stories on this site. I do have to say, I think this is my least favorite of Warmaisach’s stories. I enjoyed it a lot, but coming off Kill The Sun, this feels weaker. Though that is an unfair comparison. But I think the biggest problem for me is the protag. The protag is great, he is very different from Warmaisach’s unusual protagonist. The protag is a sociopath; Not in the typical Webnovel edgy way, but rather, a very real sociopath. And this is super interesting, at first. However it quickly gets boring. As the protag makes little development as a character. The protag gets stronger, but he never changes as a person. I do have hope that this is building up to something though.

It’s fine. World is pretty standard. MC is super generic, just lacks any standout personality traits. Supporting characters have some personality, but it’s super surface level. The biggest fail for me is the power system. The lives system is neat but not used effectively. It’s never used to create drama on the protagonist, only extras. And the protagonist gets double everyone else, just cause. The rules also just change on a dime. The class change system is honestly really boring. It lacks interesting limiters for the MC to work around. He just walks up to people and gets their skills. Feel like there was a lot of room to have it create some tension. The time limit was used sometimes but not very effectively imo.

Around chapter 100 is really where things started to feel rough. And tbh, it only got worse as it went on. Specifically, it was a lot of fluff text. Using 20 words to say 2. Which is part of your writing style. But it felt like it went from reasonably tame, to every sentence. Also the phrase “we’re not X, we’re Y” gets thrown around nonstop. It comes in different forms, but it felt like every other chapter.

Literally sacrificed himself to save someone else 2 chapters ago.

This is a team effort. We gotta get all we can from Author-San before next week. Sorry author, we love you, but this is about more than just chapters now. Do your best!

I really want them back. Their work was so good.

Uncredited stolen work. The actual work is on HH.