Darius_Chromwell
A simple hermit. Idk who keeps logging into my account and using up all of my spirit stones, but if your going to do that could you at least invite some people to level up the account. thanks!
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I honestly really enjoyed this fanfic during the earlier chapters, but after a certain point there start to be so many flashbacks and time skips that it becomes incoherent to read. if the flashbacks where consistent it would be different but during a single chapter I think it flashed back to 3 different time periods making it almost impossible to keep up.
It was going so well and the author decided to ruin it by nerfing the MC to hell and back out of left field! Like what the hell, the mc meets a childhood friend who accidentally cripples him with a light touch, despite the fact that he is regularly nearly beaten to death in the gates and always comes out fine. Yeah no, I’m not buying whatever illicit substances this author is selling..
The main thing that you should note about this novel is that the main character is an idiot, not only is he an idiot but he gets progressively dumber as the novel goes on. Now don’t get me wrong I like this novel quite a bit, I’ll always enjoy a good dungeon society/ skill stealing story but the main character is what one would call a battle junky with a bad habit of practically announcing that he has cheat like abilities to everyone and their grandmother. I’d give the world and overall story 5/5 But character design / development is a -3/5 for me.
Honestly I was enjoying this fanfic, as a template system focused on swordsmanship it was interesting, but for the main character to suddenly out of left field get the ability to brainwash a jonin even if you claimed it was a genjutsu, which I don’t think it was ever stated that he possessed, Nah man I’m out next thing you know he’s gonna be a hive mind overlord and this is just gonna be another smut novel.
Another novel copied from FanFiction this one is called Yami: the gamer Kage and it’s by the author Imjusttryingtofindmyway. It is already finished and has 25 chapters with a total word count of 314k.
Honestly the story started out fine. I like the villain with a plot changing system type of story, but there are so many plot holes and inconsistencies especially in the later chapters I had to give up on reading it before making it to chapter 50. I think it’s a great first draft for a story but the author should probably use it as just that. I would love to see it rewritten and have those plot holes filled.
The story is decent up until they introduce the fact that there are multiple reincarnated characters all who have fragments of the MC’s system. That in itself doesn’t ruin the story but it’s more the fact that almost all of the rest of the story is written in the perspective of those other reincarnated characters, after reading around 200 chapters I don’t think the author even remembers who the MC is anymore.