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Author-san, I WANT MORE.👿 please 🥹

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The storyline is good. However, what gets me is the use of present tense and past tense. I thought I could just overlook it, but it happens continuously, and I have read more than 100 chapters. Here, I am reading and correcting every present tense that should be past tense. I do not actually know if I can still read this just because of that. The storyline practically follows the generic 'i am going against the heavens because dah dah dah' so I mean I am not missing out if i discontinue reading but man I put effort into reading this. Ace is likable, but I found his growth and mindset development weird, and he trusts too easily, but I guess that is just me. I don't know, man. Author san for what you created, you are amazing as I do not have the ability to create a whole new world for readers to emerse themselves into, but please get an editor.

If you are looking for fast pace story line look no further. This is honestly a great novel. There are puctuation errors that could be fixed, such as differentiating thoughts and actual speech, especially when 'talking' to the system. But as soon as MC is reincarnated the storyline MOVES and does not stop. There honestly could be more background, but overall, this novel has potential.

a man of class i see.....nice slayers reference 👏🏼 and if it wasnt kudos to you

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