It was really interresting, then a system.... Then everything is handed to him...

anothet psycho mc. The guy is unbearable, chapter 5 and i already want to strangle him. And a fucking bow as a weapon. I am out ! ------------------------------------------------------------------------------

Ok, so i was expecting nothing when i started reading. How wrong i was. It's really well written for webnovel. 5 star is to compensate for the really harsh review. The author don't go the Strawhat crew road, wich i find very nice (Contrary to a lot of people it seems). I find it refreshing, we still don't know exactly what he want's to do, MC still seems to try and find his way. MC is quite a calm fellow most of the time, and it's a nice change. He actually stop to enjoy the world :) In summary, it's a nice fanfic, it's no mac beth. But it's a cut above the other in my opinion.

The author doesn't give a F*** about his story. Wich mean the story is very badly written, structure syntax grammar are awefull :x If the author does not give a f*** why should we?

writing is not bad, but chapter size is awefull. If you transform what we have here in 2 or 3 chap instead of 11 it would be much better. As it is now these are not chapters but mere paragraph.

Wish fullfilment, there is more system and gatcha than true story in each chapters. MC ask for a system that is not too easy but can summon DK 1min after receiving His system, he can store capital ship in is inventory or even a full deathstar. So, there is work to do to make that one readable. And the author as the guts to allready ask for money...

It's not a story. It's 100% wish fullfillment. It's written like a shopping list of OP power. This is not the star wars fanfic you are looking for...