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Daoist_ChaosLord3yrCommentedSo is he wolverine yet ?đ
Recovery: 18 (+3)- Daoist_ChaosLord3yrCommented
Men in black vibes...
Considering that the single-letter names would be awkward and just like that, I was named 'Jay', my Sister with 'Qew', and my brother was given 'Kay.' - Daoist_ChaosLord3yrCommented
maybe it's just me but my first thought was : women gonna love him...
Lv.4<Nimble Fingers> (Common): Dexterity of fingers increases by four-fold. - Daoist_ChaosLord3yrCommented
Im imagining he's smiling like this
This chapter has been deleted. - Daoist_ChaosLord3yrCommentedUnfortunately, the girls did not know that after they left, the mark appeared in the city's database next to their names - [Synth].
- Daoist_ChaosLord3yrCommentedBut with training, and instead of pushing the air, he coats his hands in his energy then punches the air releasing a very fast shockwave, very much how like the strongest person in the world breaks the air with a punch resulting in a powerful shockwave. Though it's power would be limited. Which is why he doesn't use it and instead fires projectiles to boost its power.detailReincarnation in One Piece: The Adventure of Ian Louis! [COMPLETE!]Anime & Comics ¡ CrazyGuest
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That thief betrays everyone lol
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That cliffhanger lol
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I admire the attention to details, 6 shots from one revolver and 5 from the other. Kudos to you author
*Bang!Bang!Bang!Bang!Bang!Bang!Bang!Bang!Bang!Bang!Bang!* - Daoist_ChaosLord3yrCommented
This chapter was hella good, can't wait to see what happens next !
This chapter has been deleted.detailTransmigrated in Supernatural TV as Sam Winchester (Coming eventually)TV ¡ Samael_Son_of_Dawn - Daoist_ChaosLord3yrPosted
The concept was interesting, chakra - Qi cultivation - one piece fusion but here are what I have noticed in this fanfic: Writing Quality : This fanfic is hard to understand since english isn't the authors main language. the first 10 chapters are the worst and then gets better but still hard to understand. I encourage you author because english is very easy to learn, so i have no doubt you'll get better. Story developement : There isn't much story developement. The story starts off VERY fast. The author tried integrating the concept of cultivation of Qi in his fanfic and it is interesting but the way it is shown is once again VERY fast. A lot of time skips so it's more of a wish-fulfillement fanfic. Character Design : There was barely any character design, we learn the name of the MC in chapter 9... There is almost no interaction with any other characters in the story and if the MC does interact, it goes very fast once again. World Background : There is no world building in this fanfic, probably because the author assumes everyone knows the world of naruto. All of the things that have been mentioned can be resumed to this fanfic not having much flesh around the bones. Author if you're reading this, maybe you could go a bit slower and add some details, dont rush.