StupidNovel

Fan Fic from novel Lord of the People: Discount Artifact For Signing In at the Start I used this novel to practice my writing skill Bakalan ada beberapa perubahan disana-sini, Aku juga akan membuat beberapa original chapter yang memuat perspective atau reaksi warga sipil. Aku juga disini akan lebih mengeksplore personality karakter, terutama karakter-karakter penting dan juga Lord dari other territory Expect some mistakes and loopholes, because it's based on the original novel.

Thank god you answer it dude. The thought of MC become gay keep come to my mind that I get sleep deprived for almost 10 years

Hey, someone please tell me, is it yaoi? I found the tag NoYaoi but, you know... Just on case. .................... ..................... ....................

You're goddamn right

You know, I read it for a while, and keep skim over it because it's too cringe for me. I scroll some comment to find person with the same opinion as me.. But everyone keep talking about how good it is that it fell so fake. And boom, I found one person, I personally don't really mind with cliche story, but the way it flow is so wierd. Might be because it's an original story and the author is new.

The dialogue is too cringe. you need to try fix the dialogue a little bit. every thing that MC do doesn't have to said out loud. Other than the dialogue, it's all okay.

good luck with you all, I am out. No argument at all, it's just, this novel is not for me

Personally, I like this way. He's not OP yet, but have tendencies to be OP. Not a harem seeking yet, but have tendencies to do so. IMO, maybe the pace need to be quicken. There's some useless thing to say, something like CEO who keep busying himself with his paper. This kind of thing isn't won't change your story at all. So it best you can do some editing maybe? Ah I know it needs money or even time to do so. But it will make the story more enjoyable to read. Last thing, you're doing great. IDK how many original novel out there that I drop because the story isn't relatable or the plot is so forced that it makes you cringe. At least for now, I like how it progress, slice of life novel with harem romance in the future in modern world, with not so OP (yet) MC that doesn't depend too much on system.

The supposedly brother is real brother or not? by blood I mean. I kinda hate harem or reverse harem, so it will be amazing if there's only one ML

IDK bout U, but just with this one chapter, I already hate MC