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thanks, this is my first time writing novel. with so many comments I believe I can improve my works.

I think this is revenge, but not like villain that kills innocent, he just wants to trash avenger, etc

well, it is not just MCU, most fanfiction usually will get dropped, cz you will not get any money from it,

there is no story development at all. it just like the author adds a new paragraph for our mc. this kind of thing is disappointing. but other settings okay

well if it were me i will give up my seat 1. because it is annoying to buzzing around arguing. 2. well i i saw my mother pregnant and it is look not easy. although i am not good people but i am not lower my self to that level. it is just a seat for pregnant mother.

plot armor?

well when you read a novel please read their discription first. thanks

we dont know anything about where he is . and you just give us a haotian stage mc but we cant understand is haotian strong or not ? how much level are there,family background( he has or not it is better to tell us clearly) or hint .

candidate hinata ino afterall tsunade already auntie level

unreadable but still 3.5 star ? really

another star -1

my POV ? uh if this multi PoV then star -1

BS BS BS BS. i hate fanfictions that doesnt change the original line,

i think you need to change your system panel, it is too much if you show it every chapter , maybe you can make it simpel or you just show up new skill or progress

it is better uchiha : uh , ah, you see or "uh, ah,you see " uchiha

maybe it is like " things have changed " you can find it in grammarly

haha thanks

okay i will try to reword it, because i am not good at english so maybe i will make a lot of mistakes

please beware typo