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a marvelous story mixed between fantasy, magic realism, I look forward that you will enjoy between it lines .ZeD_OnE.

Just a quick note, I am not going to be nice. I repeat, I AM NOT GOING TO BE NICE. (If you like this story don't read this rant as it is not aimed at you but the bad apples)

Thank you! Thank you! You have finally broken me to the point of anger...I was always trying to be nice and just simply present a story, an adventure, that was to please people and most of all please myself. I liked reading people's comments saying nice things, I even liked people saying ''Thanks for the chapter''. Then these lame party-poopers come in and say things like ''This is when story goes wrong..''. Fine fine some of my ideas seem ridiculous and aren't properly explained (because if I try to explain them you will get spoiled and then chapters do not have the same impact they had before). One thing is you don't see the picture I see, I'm only showing you a small piece the size of a puzzle whilst I have the entire image, you obviously won't like it until it's all assembled into one picture but this story is meant to be a journey for the both of us. Don't say I can't take criticism as the shit they give me isn't even criticism but plainly shit coming out of their mouths. 

I am fucking mad! And mad! AND MAD! Because few of these bastards insult my work and my ideas and I will not forget; the bastards who mostly insult me haven't even released one fucking novel coz they have No Balls to release their own novels they think they're better and yet they don't show it. MAKE YOUR OWN FUCKING STORY YOU DICKHEAD AND THEN UNDERSTAND WHAT IT MEANS TO BE AN AUTHOR! Authors put some work in the novels even if it's shit they have to write words on to the page and also plan the story, even if it is a fanfic there is a lot of things you can do with a fanfic but also harder to work with as you need to understand the series and the characters; if you're using the main character or cast from another popular series you need to imagine what they do in different situations and you need to make it seem as that's what the character is gonna do otherwise it won't be the same character that people know but just a look-alike with the same name and that's not what the readers signed up for. E.g. You make a novel where anime characters fight in a Colosseum and the main protagonist is - let's say Gohan and he acts very aggresive and wants to fight; people that know of him will know that's not the way Gohan behaves and would immediately feel disgusted. It's kinda tricky to be a fanfic author but it's generally hard to make a good story.

I have been noticing that his site sometimes has arrogant scumbag douches smartasses who have No Respect! No Respect for nothing! They come to your novel and they just drop a shit comment because they simply don't like something. Okay Okay! It's not like I didn't do something like that before...I read this dragon ball human something novel, the author introduced an OC character (and she isn't a saiyan) and it was out of random and she was so much better than everyone and came to the same level as the MC who trained for years and she only trained with him a few years in a gravity chamber for 1 year and reached a power level close or slightly over the MC which pissed me off as this random nobody was introduced. SO I went to the comment section and vented my frustration saying ''Fucking [character name] bitch!''. Then I and the author of that fic talked and before that he was also pissed about people complaining. Okay maybe I'm no worse than those scumbags but I show people respect and gratitude (e..g I thank you but your book annoys me) I will never let these fuckers who have not even tried making novels insult my work. Those so called 'Critics'.

Anyway...I'm so angry, broke and filled with madness that I'll - I'LL OVERFLOW YOU WITH CHAPTERS until I'll change your mind you piece of shit (''Trashy attempt at a au fanfic'' - Skepparn = shit). I'll release lots of chapters so that I am going to prove that I'M NOT LIKE  MOST AUTHORS! Some would probably give up after all this negative crap but not me.You have awaken not a beast but a psycho and I won't give up until I'll prove that I'm not your average author that you can mess with. I'm not taking bullshit from anyone and I'm doing what I want and I'm not gonna pay attention to your comments. I wish I can disable comment section as I really don't wanna see shit.

If you don't like my book, my decisions, my story, my character THEN YOU CAN FUCK OFF.

 You may say just like this one bastard, "You are insulting and threatening me''...YES! Say what you want, think what you want but simply I won't be nice to you if you won't be nice to me and other people in this community. I believe EVERYONE deserves respect and respect means treating a person as if they were a person (being nice - even if it is shit because humans should have common decency to treat people how you want to be treated). Respect doesn't mean the Quality of your work, You get praises, respect and praise are not the same so don't mingle them ([Webzayne] you bastard "you speak of respect like it is to be given out to just anyone, but I've been taught that respect is something to be earned."). Try to be less mean about the way you comment simply tell them it's bad and tell them the simplest reason because yeah people make mistakes but that doesn't mean that they deserve such treatment where they are insulted.

Saying something bad about a novel in the comments section and reviews is insulting, I say from my experience. Whenever I see something negative it makes me sad, annoyed and makes me question myself, makes me doubt my decisions about the future of the novel and it feels like whatever I do won't satisfy somebody but I want to make everyone happy love my story.

I realised that that is impossible that there will always be a dickhead that will stab you with his venomous words.

Some Of You Don't Have Respect and Will Never Learn Of It as you're stuck in your own shell of assholeness!

Dumbass: Great! I'm reading some shit about some shit author insulting us, randomly lecturing us and telling us what to do! Why do I have to listen to him when he's insulting me!? Fuck this and this guy!

Me(author): You simply don't understand...You pissed me off and I'm simply telling you how to not piss me off and other people in the community. You are simply trash that thinks he can do whatever the fuck you want insulting others work and I don't want trash like you here coming here anymore.

Dumbass: Hmph! I will and I'll fuck the shit out of your comment section! I'll destroy you!

Me: I'm already broken sorry and I will not take further damage. This is a warning that I'll simply find whatever way to kick you out of my story if it's to continually insult you everytime you come and say something bad!

Dumbass: You asshole! You can't even take fucking criticism! You take offence to everything!

Me: NO! There's a line between criticism and plain shit. I want to simply...rid of the trash.

(To The People holding Negative views on my novel, simply siliking it I would like you to fuck off and never come back please! :)


And to those that have not said a thing, thanked for a chapter, liked my comments, said some good stuff and criticisms. I thank you from the very bottom of my heart. Thank You! You are the guys and gals that make me want to spend time writing and finishing this fanfic as I love seeing your reactions and praising my work. I'm not even slightly angry at people who criticise my novel (that is if you say a proper reason otherwise you look like a fool). And also I am sorry you had to see me like this.

(Some explanations and spoilers)

I am adding more than one reincarnated person in this fanfic. Why? You say the MC then isn't that special...true! But why be special? Fuck special! Also the main point is that the main character has competition and peers, people who are equal to him this will make him more dedictated to reaching more powerful heights and without. You say it is a stupid idea Skepparn you shit but is it? Has anyone of you thought outside the box?

Also  why add Chi Long? This hidden criminal organisation that can so-called destroy the four nations which in actuality was not to the Mayor was simply exaggerating and some of you didn't see it which makes you dumb. I added Chi Long to simply be the antagonist of this arc and maybe future, but simply this organisation is named after the master of it Lord Chi Long who will be a very powerful opponent. I took inspiration from eastern fantasy stories and mixing plain fantasy to add more realism to his combat and fun like mixing  talismans and anime card game type style together except this isn't turned based.
Kuro is simply too strong as a firebender and has long surpassed Ozai and is simply getting stronger and stronger. I need to add an opponent that is very hard and Kuro needs to lose very badly so that he loses his arrogance. I hate arrogant people and don't want my main character to be one.

What is he gonna do at the start of avatar? He's gonna make it play out like before but he's gonna go undercover to help out his family and keep them from harm. Kuro will also need to make Zuko set out and fight the avatar. Why?,,,To make it their relationship like in the series where through battle they had mutual understanding of one another and then fighting together alongside brought them closer.

What is Kuro's goal? Well right now he has no goal but his goal in the end is to simply break out from his new world. Don't ask why as this is one of the things I don't feel like going into detail. I don't like spoiling too much.

If I say the Kuro's reason to break free, his mentality, you see... people in stories (weather i'd be in anime, manga, novel) they not only like to see how the plot progresses, the fights, the designs they also like the mentality of characters how they progress, how they view the world, how people around them react and how the character thinks and feels. That mental aspect is one of the things that intrigues people if some.

Sorry poor nice readers that were reading this. 

To Scum I tell to fuck off.

Tomorrow chapter.

There is a tale of a spirit, a very powerful spirit one that dwells in the mortal plane. The Red Spirit, the demon of destruction as wherever it  went it created a path of destruction. It was so powerful that even the might of the avatar could not stop it. Everyone who heard Its name would tremble; every dragon and lion turtle that saw it would want to run from fear. Little did they know of the red spirit's true identity.

Kuro wakes up to find himself in the world of Avatar, where four elemental nations lived in disharmony.

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Disclaimer: Avatar Series, the characters and everything else does not belong to me except my OC. thanks

"Have you been well, princess." 
Kyaa. You look more like Isekiel now that I see you this way. 
"And have you?" 
"Yes. We've met not too long ago, sir duke Alfius." 
What did he eat that he grew up like this? Isekiel won't grow the same way, right? 
"Princess, I am glad to see you healthy. I have worried a lot hearing the news of princess being terribly ill." 
Mr. White dog started to talk. 
"I've also heard of the wizard who cured princess." 
But his eyes were sharper and thin when he spoke of that black idiot.
"Also heard that he had been chosen as princess's friend...." 
Ah ha. You're proud's been killed. Of course since his son lost to a boy who just appeared out of nowhere. 
I made a sad face pretending not to know anything. 
"Eung. Since Atti can't be friends with mr. White dog's son and daughter because I didn't study Atlantan a lot." 
Roger Alfius cleared his throat when I mentioned the conversation we had last time. 
But he was an experienced man. He didn't stop now and he took the chance of seeing me. 
"To state, my son is leaving to Atlanta for more experiences. So he can speak Atlantan very well. So if fine, my son and princess can study Atlantan tog...." 
"Woah! Amazing! Then Atti must study harder while that oppa gets back!" 
"I mean, I could ask my son to help stud...." 
"I was going to go see dad but Atti will study. Atti can be smarter than she is now! Then mr. White dog, bye bye! Tell that oppa to have a nice trip, too!" 
Felix and I were a perfect partners now. Felix bowed a goodbye when I pulled on his cloth. 
Roger Alfius I took a glimpse at before leaving had a face saying he had lost again. 
But he won't think that a 7 year old like me would plan this out but is very frustrated that I am a kid whom he can't talk to well. Keke. Very fun. 
"I will extend my study length from now on too. I should do my hardest when I am princess's friend now when soon to be friend is studying abroad." 
Gasp. Forgot he wss listening again. Only because you had a feeling of a delivery service rather than a body guard! 
"Noooo. Felix is great just as he is right now." 
"No way. Studying isn't that hard, besides it can be fun." 
And I ended up firing Felix's will up higher. Y-yeah. Studying is great. Let's all study. Now, open the book! 
"Welcome!" 
I welcomed the black idiot. Now that I see I didn't tell him I was going to go see Claude. Gasp. I almost bailed him if it weren't for that white dog. 
"Hah. Why are you welcoming me? Suspicious." 
Eek, can't you speak a bit nicer? I can welcome you like this sometimes! 
But I knew why he was looking at me like that. *clears throat*. I spoke to him after clearing my throat twice. 
"Hey, can you send me to that place again?" 
"That place? White dog's house?" 
Ohh, great understanding skills.
"When, now?" 
"Uh, you will actually do that for me?" 
"You asked. Is it just for words too?" 
"Not really." 
It was out of expectation he didn't ask the reason. Why is he so obedient? Did my hit effect him? I was going to give up if he said no or make a deal out of it. 
Well, since he said yes, I opened my mouth for one more wish. 
"Yes, and...." 
*** 
KYAAA 
But why do you have to send wme this way! 
"Euk, couch, cough!" 
I was cursing the black idiot. Seems like there are more ways of teleporting than falling. 
Vecause for proof, I was coughing in a small dusty black space.
"Ouch!" 
Where is this place? Why so small? Ack, I bumned my head. My brain cells. Wahh. 
"Pr...!" 
But at lease I think I came to the right place. When I could see again from the tears and the dusts, I could see Isekiel with a shocked face. But 'Pr' you said? 
"W-what are you doing there?" 
He asked a but panicking. Seems like he was shocked much for stumbling over words. But it seems like he was about to say something before that. What was it? 
"May I help by your hand?" 
I was supported by Isekiel offering his hand. Ek. Was it chimney? Chimney? 
"Aet dost." 
Wahh. I ate dust. Ptt ptt. Lucas why'd you had to do that? 
Isekiel brushed the dusts iff me wjile I was frowning from the dust. Then he started to take the black things off my head one by one. 
Oh, is it because of Jennet? Your movements are very natural. I've only felt this from Lilly so I was amazed by his skills. 
His and my eyes met in the air. 
"Red eyes...." 
Isekiel muttered in surprise. Ah. I've asked him to make my eyes a different colour and seems like he did. (He smirked saying there were nothing he couldn't do). 
But why red? Was he surprised because I looked like a ghost? But the black idiot's eyes were pretty. 
"Umm, it's be nice if you didn't stare at me too long." 
Isekiel seemed to have realized that now. He quickly stepped back and apologized. 
"Excuse me." 
Umm but you didn't have to back away like that. Isekiel and I were just standing not being able to do anything, not even our eyes meeting. 
He stayed still for a while until he asked.
"How did you...." 
I answered fidgetting with my hair. 
"I-I suddenly disappeared last time, right?" 
"Yes. I was worried." 
He replied.
Kyaa. Of course. I Knew he was going to be worried unlike some people. Isekiel looked at me then smiled as if feeling relieved. 
"I was expecting it too but it is relief to see you have gone back to your place safely." 
Gasp. What are you? A saint? How do people like you who make others feel so refreshed exist? It was a great choice I chose to come back here. I would have felt guilty if I made a kid like him worry all along. Wahh. 
"Uh huh. I didn't say bye so I came back." 
Since that mr. White dog is in the palace too. But I wouldn't have come if you were someone like that black idiot.
"So that means you've come because you were worried of not giving farewells...." 
Isekiel muttered to confirm. Ack. Its a bit embarrassing to hear it from him. 
"So this time you came to see me." 
"Right..." 
Well it was to see you too last time because that black idiot sent me to see you. 
Then I had to be surprised. Because the ears by the silver hair was red. 
Gasp. Is he embarrassed? By something like this? Wahh, cute. This kinda reaction is the best! 
Anyways you were alone in this room. Hmm. It must be Isekiel's room, right...? Its a bit suspicious because it doesn't seem like a room for a kid. 
"What were you doing?" 
Hehe. You saw me okay. Then bye! Pshhh! 
I will feel guilty if I disappeared like that so. But those thoughts were soon replaced by his next words. 
"I was studying『The time and space's radius of culvature research of partial differential equation and criticism with wisedom of logic errors of Gale Shieler's who invented special theory of relativity.』." 
...Pardon? 
What's that? A book title? You saying you are studying that when you are 10? Really? They said you start basics at 8. But what's this? 
"...What about socials? Do you know Bill Roitch? How about Joseph Rotuse's recursion theory?" 
"Do you already know of Bill Roitch and Joseph Rotuse? That is amazing. I am currently studying Coel's philosophical realism symbols." 
"[Talk about daily life with Atlantan]." 
"Huh? Umm.... [Why the sudden question? There's nothing in my mind right now as it is so sudden. Anyways do you already know how to speak Atlantan?]." 
"Explain philosophical realism symbols in Atlantan." 
"[Harphus Coel? The first theory in Markville in year 231, a subject based directly on crust of the foundational objects and external objects...]." 
"How much of Psykansia official language can you speak? [God speaks that you guys were born from my blood, you guys won't be able to escape from the paradise of corruption.]. Do you know the lines after this?" 
"[However I will redeem you after times, so celebrate and give your loyalty until the corruption.]. Oh my gosh. Thinking you've already memorized Psykansia Bible 'till page 12 line 42. I heard you can reach that far when you are 15." 
S-sh*t . Do you know pages and lines as well...! I don't even know that! And you are 10! And you didn't hesitate 1 second before answering. 
You know Harphus Coel that I didn't learn yet and you can also explain it in Atlantan! Life communication was also so clear! Moreover he used the 'i' pronunciation said to be difficult so well!
​

When I opened my eyes I had become a princess!
But out of all characters in this romance novel, why is it the princess who has the fate of dying to her own blood-related dad, the emperor!
If I want to live, I must not be seen by that emperor dad.
“When did this kind of scumbag start living in my castle?”
The man who doesn’t have single drop of blood nor tear to drop, that cold emperor Claude! Will Atanasia who had been caught by the emperor be able to survive?
“I… What do I do…..?”


Translator

catlovestowels

Artic had finished all his attempts after his last actions.happy to create his first living and self-possessed race. Artic and his people could store a lot of things because of the ring they had.
Naturally, under normal circumstances, living beings could not be stored in this ring. However, since Artic was a user of the "Law of Reality", he was able to completeü ly ignore it.
Artic's law had more power than perhaps even the divine attributes. Under normal circumstances, it wasn't in the hands of someone like Artic to obtain a law like Reality.
But after 100 years of experimentation, he developed a plan, and now he has the Law of Reality for that reason.
Artic had begun to re-read the information in his mind by the system to further develop the law.
"A common colloquial usage would have been reality mean "perceptions, beliefs, and attitudes toward reality", as in "My reality is not your reality." This is used often just as a colloquialism indicating that the parties to an agree conversation or should agree, not to quibble over deeply different conceptions of what is real. For example, in a religious discussion between friends, one might say (attempting humor), "You might disagree, but in my reality, everyone goes to heaven."
Reality can be defined in a way that links it to worldviews or parts of them (conceptual frameworks): Reality is the totality of all things, structures (actual and conceptual), events (past and present) and phenomena, whether observable or not. It is what a world view (whether it be based on individual or shared human experience) ultimately attempts to describe or map.
Certain ideas from physics, philosophy, sociology, literary criticism, and other fields shape various theories of reality. One such belief is that there is simply and is no reality beyond the perceptions or beliefs we have about reality. Such attitudes are summarized in the popular statement, "Perception isreality" or "Life is how you perceive reality" or "the reality is what you can get away with", and they indicate anti-realism – that is, the view that there is no objective reality, whether acknowledged explicitly or not."
Artic developed directly after applying the information provided by the system. He could feel his energy growing.
Artic, as he learned from the system, was not applying anything like in previous cases to go to later levels. All he had to do was keep using and improving his power. Naturally, his level would gradually rise. At the same time, the development issue would slow down significantly as the level was now more difficult.
He didn't have to be too smart to know that.
As Artic was thinking about all this, the flat space created by the system began to deteriorate. Within seconds, Artic realized that his mind had returned to his body in the cave. When Artic returned to his true body, he took a breath and looked around. who had lived in this cave for 100 years. So a lot of things seemed close to him.
He couldn't stop thinking from the inside out. What had changed on the planet in 100 years? Although he generally spoke to Anmerni every 10 years, as a result, Amerni was no longer his being.
When Artic first created Amerni, he had the Glass Law. But now he had the "Law of Reality", a much stronger and more comprehensive force. Therefore, Amerni no longer had to listen to himself.
Of course, Artic could easily control Amerni with his power. But he wasn't going to do anything like that.
After throwing away all these thoughts, he took a deep breath and gently shook his hand. With his hand waved, the rocks at the entrance to the cave he was in became directly invisible. The rocks were not invisible. They were destroyed from reality. But for a normal person and an outsider, they seemed invisible.
Artic flew lightly, out of the cave and began to fly up into the sky. After he flew into the sky, he started watching around. It was between the forest and the mountains. It was sunny and daytime.
Artic smiled slightly after thinking for a few minutes. Then he thought of Amerni, thinking about his "Reality Teleportation" ability.
With his thinking, Amerni appeared in front of him. Amerni was wearing a silver suit and his face had never changed. A few seconds later, he started looking at the old man in front of him.
Although Amerni was now a life form of his own, he could still feel its creator. So when he saw Artic, he smiled and started talking.
"Lord Altic, you've finished your work."
After Artic confirmed it with his head, within seconds, his face became 20 years old again. And then his physique and his whole body changed slightly. Artic didn't touch his body as long as he kept working. That's why he was physically old. Naturally, no Origin Level, like the previous Artic, would not age physically. But Artic didn't care about these things at the time.
Artic's height has grown to 2 meters and has become physically quite robust and muscular. His eyes were a mixture of light purple and smoke color, giving information and power to the person looking at it. He also had a slightly dirty beard and a handsome face. The edges of his black hair glowed with a slight purple color.
Amerni was not a fool. He understood that the energy given by his creator had completely changed. Amerni had reached Origin Level 5 within 100 years while Artic was working, and his law had gone very far.
Like Artic, he didn't choose any new laws. He continued to move forward tomorrow through the Law of Sharpness. In general, a powerful life form from Amerni is not currently present on the planet Armital.
Artic looked around slightly and started talking.
"Is everything ok?"
Amerni bowed his head slightly and began to speak.
"My lord, a lot has changed since you left. But your shop still stands in Gebin City. But we can't sell products anymore because in 100 years all the products we have have been sold."
Artic nodded his head sympathetically and spoke after smiling.
"Let's go to the store, make me a coffee and tell me what happened."


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"Artic"
"When the chessboard closes, the king and the pawn are will be placed in the same bag."
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Artic was a young student. He often struggled with his thoughts in his mind and tried to survive in the modern world. He was smart and liked to read, but he also liked to think about different things in his mind.
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Artic was killed trying to help a woman who was attacked. When he opened his eyes, he was in a different land with a voice in his head. Where he was reborn in the same body, people could have divine powers or possess special powers by developing their knowledge and philosophical perspectives on issues.
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To know if a person can cultivate is to know if one can feel the spiritual energy of the earth, and that requires a long process of meditation for only to know if he can recognize and feel it, in case he can, the method begins to absorb it within the Dantian, after the energy has been deposited inside the Dantian, is gradually merging with the energy itself and is released to the body, gradually opening the meridians of the body, expelling impurities accumulated within the body. The impurities will come out little by little until the body returns to a state where each organ, each muscle and each bone is clean and can absorb the energy of the earth and the natural elements to be one with the earth and obtain full power. As long as the body continues to undergo these transformations, the body and the spirit will reach a state with which they can equal the gods.

All this explanation, Qiang Shen gave them to his parents and his friend. "Then, one can become immortal?" mama Qiang asked. "It's correct," Qiang Shen replied. "To achieve immortality we, the cultivators must pass through nine realisms: Human, Earthly, Warrior, Master, Grand Master, Sage, Heavenly, Divine and God. When a cultivator reaches the first realism, the body is strengthened. When you breakthrough in the second realism, the body absorbs the natural elements with the energy of Yin and Yang, when you breakthrough in the realism of warrior, that is the third realism, it is necessary to choose a Dao1 to be able to continue cultivating. When you breakthrough in the realism of Master, this allows the cultivator to use his Weapon at will, they normally use it to fly on their swords in the sky, the realism of the great master allows us to materialize the internal energy in the real world and we can forge spiritual weapons, in Sage realism, we can manipulate space at will, we can travel thousands of km with only one step, in the realism heavenly, if your body is destroyed, your spirit will remain and be able to continue cultivating, and when you breakthrough at divine realism, no matter how many times your body is destroyed, you can always rebuild it. To arrive at the realism of God literally means that, we can enter the place where the gods live.

One realism is more difficult than the other, and when one breakthrough  in the another realism, their life span increases. I am currently in the pinnacle of the second realism almost to breakthrough  the third realism, my current life span is almost 450 years. "

When Qiang Shen finished talking, his parents and his friend were shoked, they could not believe Qiang Shen was telling them, but seeing his face, they knew he was not lying.

"Well, I explained you what the path of cultivation is, let's start, Jiang Chen, I need you to sit on the ground as if you were going to meditate and close your eyes, I will try to pass energy from the earth, try to feel it!

Qiang Shen never knew how to do the basic meditation to start cultivating because they could not waste time when he began his training, so his teacher had to use the fastest but dangerous method which was to force him to feel the energy. With his help and when he succeeded to open by force his meridians to absorb the natural energy, on that occasion he did not know how long he was suffering pain in his body where even breathing was painful. In this life it was easier because, as he already knew how to feel and absorb natural energy, he opened its meridian more safely, so I use the same method as my teacher but in a more secure way.

Qiang Shen stood behind Jiang Chen put his right hand at the level of the head and the left hand put it at the level of the heart, closed his eyes and began to absorb natural energy from the earth but instead of absorbing it in his dantian He directed it to his hands and started transmitting it to Jiang Chen.

"Can you feel the energy that is flowing to your body?" he ask to Jiang Chen "no, I do not feel anything" he answered.

After being in that position for more than twenty minutes, Qiang Shen separated from Jiang Chen "no, apparently you can not cultivate." "Then what's going to happen?" Jiang Chen asked. "The only way you have left is magic" said Qiang Chen "that is the same path that my parents, but I need to know which way of magic you will choose".

"What way?" papa Qiang asked. "Yes" Qiang Shen replied "magic is divided into 6 types: elemental magic, magic of invocation, alchemy, sorcery, racial and spiritual.

Elemental magic uses the power of natural elements. The elements are earth, water, fire, wind, light and darkness. There are special elements such as ice, lightning and wood that you can acquire by handling more than one element.

The magic of invocation allows you to invoke beings, phenomena or objects depending on the power of the invoker.
 
Alchemy allows you to transform matter, forge spiritual weapons, make potions and make magic amplifiers.

Sorcery is magic based on enchantments.

Racial magic is almost extinct. Thousands of years ago, there were different races in this world, elves, dwarves, fairies, ogres, sirens. Those races now extinct at some time were combined with the human. An example of racial magic is in singers who have managed to captivate the masses through their voice, that characteristic was only of the race of the sirens.

Spiritual magic is where magicians use their spirit to manifest it and even use the power of the gods to perform them. The rituals enter into this magic.

All classifications are measured in degrees or levels and there are up to nine levels in magic... "

While Qiang Shen was explaining, the door is open and Qiang Xun enters running.


Notes:
1.- It can be translated literally by "the way", or by "the method" or "the doctrine".

In a destroyed world where humanity is on the verge of extinction, a survivor uses a spell combining the magic of different civilizations to return to its past and prevent the end of the world ... or at least, give humanity the weapons to be able to survive.

Sergeant Tom shook his head and hid all emotions deep inside his heart. He still had to do his job. He then turned his head toward Alek.
Alek seeing Sergeant Tom, looking at him was like a cat who got his tail stepped on. All this time when Sergeant Tom was busy talking to the Old Medic, Alek was desperately looking for a way to slip out of the compound. Between all the guards and other recruits, all paths he thought of was well guarded and other recruits near him were like 'do you seriously think you run away?'. It turned out these still held a grudge on Alek for green haired beating them up for something Alek did. Especially girls, they were treating Alek as if he was a plague that needed to be eradicated.
Understanding there is no way he could escape Alek just gave up, decided to leave his future in the hands of fate. Sergeant Tom first looked at Alek and then at the crowd of spectators. 
"What are you all slacking for you horse shit examples of joes. Get back to your training right now or prepare to face twice the regular training tomorrow."
These simple words from Sergeant Tom were like an imperial edict for these groups of trainees which they thought death was better than defiance. Moments later not a single one of the trainees which surrounded Alek could be seen anymore. Looking at the situation, which was resolving itself, Alek heaved a sigh of relief. But Alek knew that it was just the calm before the real danger. The real catastrophe was already looking at him.
Sergeant Tom, after shooing away the extras, was examining Alek from head to toe with a little grin on his face. And that is what making Alek most terrified. To Alek, Sergeant Tom looked like an old tiger who just found the juiciest prey in years. For a split second, Alek felt like the temperature around him suddenly dropped to sub-zero levels. His voice was even shaking when he tried to explain himself even though he knew it was futile.
"You… see, sir. I… did not do anything. She.. just did that to"
"Save your excuses for now. For every crime, there is a punishment. Although that moron of a young master committed a small crime, a clear desire to commit a bigger one could be seen in his eyes. To protect a good seedling, I decided to throw away the rotten one" Sergeant Tom said as his smile grew more noticeable "As for you, young man, what kind of punishment do you think you deserve for the act you just committed."
Upon listening to Sergeant Tom's word Alek started to curse inside. 
"The f*ck u old son of a devil, you dare to ask me what I deserve. I am f*king innocent. It's not like I s*xually assaulted her or something. She f*king came by herself. And you say I committed a crime? You f*king committed the crime. Your f*king sister committed the crime. Your f*king whole family committed the crime."
Sergeant Tom just stood like a statue in front of Alek, not even speaking a single word further. The situation soon turned awakened between Sergeant Tom and Alek. As seconds turned into minutes, Alek started sweating like it was the hottest day of the year. In the end, he decided to give up.
"A fine choice lad. Even if you thought yourself as innocent, it did not have much meaning in front of me. Every criminal presents themselves as he is the only innocent, who got incriminated by mistake. As for your case, although you did not admit you are wrong, you did not deny it too." Sergeant Tom said, "Now follow me, first we need to conduct some test on you before we proceed any further."
Although Sergeant Tom did not punish Alek, he certainly felt like he was wronged. But a notification cheered his mood immediately. 

[Hidden objective completed]
[You have gained 300 exp]
[You Favourability with Sergeant Tom increased by +20]
[You Favourability with Old medic Heilia increased by +10]
[You Favourability with Katherine "Cathy" Flameheart increased by +10]
[Final quest reward increased]
After reading the game notification Alek was very happy. He had a bunch of reasons to be so. First, he got lucky and completed the Hidden objective. In reality, Hidden objectives are random and can be something easy as giving a kid an ice-cream or difficult like killing a total op boss monster which is unrelated to the player's quest. But once completed   they may even entirely change the course of future plots. And most important of all, they increase the final quest reward at least by a fold. 
Guilds and factions kept the importance of hidden objectives as a secret. But a newly promoted upper echelon of a certain third-tier player based guild got drunk and started boasting about himself in public channel. But in between his boasting, he let slip the information about hidden objectives. Then with a speed faster than light, it all over the galactic net. The impact of this incident shook the whole player base of Ascension. 
For a time, the Guild and factions were heavily denounced by the public and the joining rate became all-time low. In the end, the guilds and factions just shrugged off the criticism as if it was nothing in front of them. 
They made cases about how fair their guild system is to its members and how they are just guarding their secrets against their competitors. In the end, this turned into a major competition to poach new or solo players by promising them advantageous info equal or even greater in value than the information about hidden objectives. 
They also pushed the majority of blame onto the certain third-tier player based guild which in turn saw a decrease in member count. Which dropped to the fifth tier and was pretty much left to fend for itself. As for the guy who leaked the info, let's just guess that he found a new job after he was kicked out of the gaming circle.
As for the second reason, he the exp. With the 300 exp he received from the hidden objective, his total exp count reached 500. Now he had enough exp to level up to level 1. To every player, level 1 marked as the official start of the life of a newbie player. 
At level 1 player unlocked the strength and defense option in the attributes panel. Players can now increase their strength and defense by spending a set amount of exp and by fulfilling some other conditions. This enables players to display strength and durability up to varying degrees depending on various factors, but mostly strength and durability displayed is stronger than a normal person.
The most important of all is that players gain access to mana bar and skills. Well, before using, at least players need to learn or unlock them. 
Like any other game, mana and skills could be considered as the bread and butter of players. Without them, players would be no better than the average human. And with monsters equipped with many deadly attacks, players need all the advantages they have, just to fight in equal terms with them.
The skill system in Ascension is both easy and complex. With the game simulating a hundred realism, the fighting becomes more realistic while at the same time more dangerous. To balance the odds against this type of monsters, Ascension presents its player with a skill navigation system. The skill navigation panel or 'The Skill Tree' features a virtually endless amount of skills, which a player can learn. In theory, with enough exp and skill points, one can become the top player is easy eating candy. Naturally, this was not possible. With its near galactic size population the players, the game takes place in a world where time and resources were finite, with every single piece of resources being competed over, even the rich players could only sigh and specialize in a single playstyle. More than that it would be a waste of resources. 
As for unlocking a skill from the skill tree, it only seems easy from the surface. One would need to have the skill book or get taught by some master NPC to learn a particular skill. Once learned, one needs to spend exp and skill points to increase it.
Alek was starting to get frustrated thinking about the long road ahead of him. But the same thing made him excited. He wanted to enjoy the journey which lay in front of him.     
Alek did not waste any more of his time and decided to level up. He put all his exp into the level panel and reached level one.
[Congratulation to the user on leveling up]
[You have reached level 1]
[You have unlocked the ability to level up strength]
[You have unlocked the ability to level up defense]
[You have unlocked the Mana bar]
[You have unlocked the skill navigation panel]
[You have gained +5 attributes points]
[Next level up  condition: You need 1500 exp to level up]
Alek was now happy to finally unlock the mana bar. Although he did not have any skills which required mana currently, some advanced moves of the hand to hand combat technique, the silk's touch requires him to burn mana to execute them. Like when the green-haired beauty used mana to gain a temporary boost in both power and speed. This kind of skill could be executed by players to gain advantages over the monsters or other players in fast-paced PvP matches.
He then put all the +5 attribute points he had gained from leveling up into wisdom. With that, his wisdom which was 0 became 5 and now he had a total of 50 MP in total. Instantly Alek started feeling the difference between not having mana and a player with mana.
He felt like his mind clearing up and thought processing increasing a little, although it was a very very very little increase, a split second could sometimes decide between life and death. Although this did not mean Alek was now some kind of genius, with his average processing speed it did not change anything. 
To test things out Alek decided to try gathering Mana in his hands. He was just trying to mimic the actions of the green-haired beauty and its effects. At first, nothing happened. As Alek's patience was starting to run out, he slowly but surely was starting to feel as if his palm was getting hot. Alek suddenly got excited and checked his MP bar for confirmation. Sure enough, his mana had dropped to 40 from the original 50 points. Alek became ecstatic. Never in his wildest dream, he thought that he would be able to use magic. (A/N Who did not want to become a wizard or some kind of flame-throwing man or girl when he/she was a kid. Even I wanted to become ice spewing husky when I was a pup.) But his mood became even better when he heard another system notification.
[You have gained the skill Mana Manipulation Lv 0]     
This made Alek so happy that he wanted to dance in the middle of the street. He immediately called up the character profile and attributes panel to check things out.
[Name: Deicide]
[Race: Human]
[Class: None]
[Profession: None]
[Title: None]
[Affiliation: Contractors(Hidden)]
[Mastery] 
[Hand to Hand Combat Technique: The Silk's Touch (Tier: Basic) (Lv 1)]
[Skills: Mana Manipulation Lv 0]

Attribute panel.
[Character Level:1] [Req Exp To LV Up: 1500]
[Current Exp:0]
HP: 100] [0.1 HP recovery/sec]
[MP: 40/50] [0 MP recovery/sec]
[Stamina: 150] [1 Stamina recovery/sec]
[Strength Level:0] [Req Exp To LV Up: 500]
[Defence Level:0] [Req Exp To LV Up: 500]
[Constitution (CON): 10]
[Vitality (VIT): 10]
[Dexterity (DEX)]: 15]
[Endurance (END): 10]
[Wisdom (WIS)]: 5]
[Intelligence (INT)]: 0]
After reading his stats, Alek was satisfied with them. He simply had no reason to complain about anything. First, he completed a hidden objective. Then he leveled up. And to add cherry at the top of the cake, he got a skill just with pure chance. If his apatite was not satisfied with this, he should just go fight the strongest boss in the area. Think of the strongest boss, he started sweating. With all the stuff going on he forgot about one of the worst possible danger he was to his life. He forgot about the old devil, Sergeant Tom. When he turned he head toward the direction Sergeant Tom had left, he suddenly felt an urge to pee in his pants. 
With a distance of 10 or 15m away from him, Alek saw Sergeant Tom with a blank expression like he wanted to say "Good job kid for finally noticing me, do you want a reward?"

After the age of the conquest of mankind and other intergalactic races in vast decided to make peace and usher in the Age of harmony.
But the conflict and threat of war never ceased.
To satisfy everyone's craving for war, Ascension Online, the first-ever game which connected every civilization in the galaxy was launched.
Soon enough, ascension became an integral part of the galaxy.
Alek Bradman, a 23-year-old college graduate, now joins the game with a dream to stand at the apex of the game. 
Follow him on his journey to ascend to the apex of the galaxy.
Disclaimer: The story may contain dark and sexual elements.

the group wanted to follow me so i walked to the boss area where elite tier wolves are lurking. with my current status, i can move anywhere as long as there are no slimes. soon they gave up.


although i wont be attacked by wolves and other monsters. theres a lot of limitations. first i cant mine ores or harvest herbs. i cant even pick up items that fell from players. im invincible but all i can do is to tour this virtual world.


well since ive got time to think about my situation. vr games have started 50 years ago, year 2120. the only difference is the realism level. it started at 30% until today's game with 95% realism.


over the decades more and more are becoming addicted to playing vr games. at this time 70% of the worlds population are playing vr games. thats why all corporations and even governments have invested in a vr game.


with all the attention to vr games over the years, many ordinary people like me have tried their luck in making money through new vr games. if not for the new world law* that made it impossible for a person without a diploma to sell anything in-game then i would have tried to become a pro-gamer years ago.

*world law - it started in the year 2143 when vr games have become a problem. kids dropped out of school and played games all day, making a living by selling some items. all governments have agreed to pass several laws that will be applicable to every country and kingdom.


i walked outside the wolves hunting area and just kept on walking without any particular direction on mind. the game is beautiful. with a 95% realism it feels like being transmigrated to another world. i never had the chance to appreciate its beauty before.


i walked for days ocassionally stopping to enjoy the view. sometimes i would simply sleep anywhere and no one would bother me. by the time i heard the system reminder of a forced logout for overstaying in the game, several days has passed. upon checking the time, theres still an hour before i finished the basic newbie survival challenge.


upon leaving the capsule, i ate instant noodles, took care of personal things and then slept for a couple of hours. when i woke up i checked the forums about the random pet reward. what i read surprised me.


the random pet reward upon not dying for ten days upon entering the game is garbage. it only gives slimes and tiny skeleton soldier. it looks like a 3 feet tall skeleton with a dagger. the bad part of it is that the experience gain of these pets are really low. plus they can only gain experience if they made the killing blow. the only good thing is that these pets sell for ten gold coins in any npc merchant.


almost everyone, except those weird people and those who likes slimes and skeletons, sold their pets. another reason they sold their pets is due to the fact that you can only have one pet in-game.


i logged in with the intension of selling the pet as soon as i got the reward. i totally forgot that im currently in a high level area several days from the nearest newbie village.


ding
congratulations for surviving for ten days.
rewards
1 gold coin received
random pet allocation
battle alchemist assistant slime received
1000 experience points received


battle alchemist assistant slime - slime that can absorb effects and grant it unto the owner or an item.


this is a lucky pet. i explored its capabilities and its wonderful. when i pour health potion on my pet slime it becomes able to heal instead of corrode using its acid. i tried placing an arrow in my slime after it absorbed a healing potion and it gave my arrow a healing effect.


what i liked the most about this slime is its potential to increase my strength. i allowed it to absorb a ring that grants a +1 to speed. then i ordered it to transfer the "+1 speed" to me. and my stat permanently increased by 1.



as long as i obtain many stat enhancing item then ill become invincible. of course its useless since i cant fight monsters for a few years while the penalty is active.

peter was a beta player in the newest virtual reality game. his plan is to take advantage of a few bugs he failed to report. that way he will gain lots and lots of money. what he didnt know is that each beta tester has a dedicated a.i. that is reviewing their every action. the a.i. has long since reported the bugs and the main a.i. has already fixed them before launching the game.
peter tried his best but he is only an average player who got lucky when he was picked as a beta tester. without the bugs he doesnt have any advantage that he can use to earn money.
having sold everything to invest in the game, he is pretty desperate and in a fit of drunken anger he emailed the owner of the game company with a pages of insults.
unfortunately for peter the owner has made a special code in the game. he owns an item that can make one player lose a level everytime he kills a monster. and he used this to peter's game character.
how can you ever hope to play the game  when you lose a level everytime you kill a monster?

In the year 2030, after the great plague, a company named ||The Artifex|| suddenly appeared and with it's Leader [AL] made an announcement.

 Then came the three legendary "crafts"of Artifex.

Firstly, the Legendary Deep Dive system console Arcadia, with it's nearly 90% of Realism. Implementing Sound, Touch, Smell, Taste, and Sight with an accuracy of 90%.
And a supplement chamber that is out of the world, due to it's efficiency and speed.

Secondly, a godlike substance known as Spiravita. Which gradually enchances the capabilities of the mortal body the more you use it. The substance is split into 5 tiers namely from highest to lowest S, A, B, C, and D. While the failure products are E. Although a failure, E rank supplements are still good for the body, as it enhances the stomach's metabolism. Although there can be a few mild side effects such as dizzyness and nausea. This Mainly happens due to the fact that the metabolism is out of control and sometimes it becomes weak and sometimes strong, and also the fact that due to it being an E rank, the nutrients and proteins provided are not much.

Thirdly, [Realms] the Heaven-sent game for all of humanity, after all the stress which the Plague has brought, the public needed an entertainment in which they can truely let loose of themselves. but where can they do this in such a Lawful world? This is where the game [Realms] comes in. With customizable everything and the hundreds of class combinations that can truely spice up the gameplay, It truely is the long lost Godly game searched by many of the Peak level Gamers out there.

After 5 years of success with the Arcadia system console. The company ||The Artifex|| made a prototype of a new deep dive system console called <Dadilaer> with the famed 100% Realism function. 

And with it's release, the Leader of the company named [AL] went into a coma due to getting into one.

In the year 2030, after the great plague, a company named ||The Artifex|| suddenly appeared and with its Leader [AL] made an announcment.

 Then came the three legendary "crafts".

Firstly, the Legendary Deep Dive system Arcadia, with nearly 90% of Realism.
And a supplement chamber that is out of the world.

Secondly, a godlike substance known as Spiravita. Which gradually enchances the capabilities of the mortal body. The substance is split into 5 tiers namely from highest to lowest S,A,B,C, and D. While the failure products are E. Although a failure E rank supplements are still good for the body, it enhances the metabolism. Although there can be a few mild side effects such as dizzyness and nausea. Mainly due to the fact that metabolism is out of control due to it being an E rank the nutrients and proteins are not much.

Thirdly, [Realms] the Heaven sent game for all people, after the stress which the Plague brought, the public needed an entertainment in which they can truely let loose of themselves. This is where the game [Realms] comes in. With customizable everything and the hundreds of class combinations. It truely is a game searched by many of the Peak level Gamers out there.

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I sincerely welcome you all to my humble haven. I thank you for your time and effort in checking out my work. Words alone, can't express my deep gratitude and appreciation. From the bottom of my heart, once again I say, welcome!

The concept and perception of fantasy is beyond mere imagination or un-achievable reality. Some consider the nature of fantasy as an expression or narration of perceptual shaping of reality while others consider it, twisted imagination. To each one, his/her own power of discernment. 

But, no matter your point of view, you must know this. All forms of fantasy and magical realism, are not what they are thought or believed them to be. 

The inner eye is needed to see the true nature of fantasy and magical realism.   

The reason why some minds remember the details of the past while others can only recollect fragments of the past. There's only a fine line between reality and imagination. Between actuality and illusion. 

The insight into this, I will leave with the discerning minds of you, the readers, to determine. 

This very tale, was passed down to me through my ancestral generations. The actuality of this tale should be percieved from the point of imagination, in order to maintain the fine line. After many years of solitude, I've decided to share this tale with you. I believe it's time for you to know what truly happened. 

This work relates the tale of a young trueborn girl, Yao Ming. Born in the mortal realm as an ancient during the days of the Immortal Wars.

Her true story? 

Let's take the journey together, down the memory lane and find the answer to this elusive question. 

I, your humble author and the story-teller, will try my possible best to tell the tale as it truly happened. Nothing shall be removed and nothing shall be added. This, I can assure you.

Your importance as readers, can't be emphasized enough by me. You are the heart and soul of everything I am, as an author. I deeply appreciate and applaud you all. 

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