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Fightas89
Fightas89Lv142yr
2022-07-10 18:11

well gonna drop the fanfic now. writing quality and stabaility of updates is quite alright. problem is author forces to keep powerlvl of gohan down to so he can follow the cannon and gohan doesnt get too op. Issue is MC is suppose to be quite smart...even more when readers picked that out and facts later show that reader where totally right, author is just totally toxic and tells readers there comments are stupid...So the forced canon kinda makes the world background and story development bad. All in all I enoyed the start of the fanfic but the quality droped quite fast and It got poison.

I'm Gohan!

LordPhenex026
4.3
166 Chs

90の人に「いいね!」しました

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LordPhenex026
LordPhenex026作者

I'm sorry if the protagonist is not almighty when only 17 chapters have passed. You say that I'm forcing the canon when in fact it is the opposite, because here Piccolo and Gohan have even entered the hyperbolic time chamber before they did in the original series. If that was all, goodbye.

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Welbert_Oliveira
Welbert_OliveiraLv1

The author explained everything in the comments sourcing from canon materials so he's not toxic just expalining that the are wrong.

2yr
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Fightas89
Fightas89Lv14

that wasnt the part I ment you will see in chapter 9, a reader pint out that that mc could take a smarter route and get stronger, tho author called him stupid

2yr
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LordPhenex026
LordPhenex026作者

You're wrong. He said that Gohan's decisions were stupid. And I answered that if he doesn't like the Mc's decisions, he doesn't mean that they are stupid and that his comment is absurd. So, you misunderstood. And you have classified me as "toxic" when the reality is different.

Fightas89:that wasnt the part I ment you will see in chapter 9, a reader pint out that that mc could take a smarter route and get stronger, tho author called him stupid
2yr
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Fightas89
Fightas89Lv14

I quote "the only stupid thing here is your comment"...did I misunderstand that?

LordPhenex026:You're wrong. He said that Gohan's decisions were stupid. And I answered that if he doesn't like the Mc's decisions, he doesn't mean that they are stupid and that his comment is absurd. So, you misunderstood. And you have classified me as "toxic" when the reality is different.
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Yuki_55
Yuki_55Lv14

Fightas89:I quote "the only stupid thing here is your comment"...did I misunderstand that?
2yr
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10102020oo
10102020ooLv13

Agree on mc not being the brightest

2yr
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CuteWhale
CuteWhaleLv14

Fightas89:I quote "the only stupid thing here is your comment"...did I misunderstand that?
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FinnsRevenge
FinnsRevengeLv4

Yes, yes you did. Calling someone's comment stupid isn't calling them stupid.

Fightas89:I quote "the only stupid thing here is your comment"...did I misunderstand that?
2yr
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Franco_Inostroza
Franco_InostrozaLv1

Ya cumplimos el requisito subirás el otro capítulo?

LordPhenex026:I'm sorry if the protagonist is not almighty when only 17 chapters have passed. You say that I'm forcing the canon when in fact it is the opposite, because here Piccolo and Gohan have even entered the hyperbolic time chamber before they did in the original series. If that was all, goodbye.
2yr
Primordial_Saiyan
Primordial_SaiyanLv4

Man this comment section is spicy. Keep going fellas

2yr
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SirGallicia
SirGalliciaLv3

here for drama huh XD

Primordial_Saiyan:Man this comment section is spicy. Keep going fellas
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Primordial_Saiyan
Primordial_SaiyanLv4

Obviously

SirGallicia:here for drama huh XD
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Niggross
NiggrossLv11

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YellowNarwhale
YellowNarwhaleLv5

Your name...

Niggross:
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Zaelum
ZaelumLv5

Nice!, I like it, good story, and it will probably follow the canon, but I still hope you change things a little. '18 is my waifu!!!' [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

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rubber_band123
rubber_band123Lv5

The writing quality is equivalent of the average chinese novel. so ehh... Story Development is eh... Character Design is also eh... nothing special but nothing out of the ordinary or OCC. Until the Yamcha incident. Keep reading to know why. oh I also got insulted as Yamcha fanboy for giving valid criticism lol World Background is also eh. The novel doesn't really explore the world building then again its a fanfiction. Most ff don't even bother w this part. So let's talk about the Yamcha incident. Let me explain like those 4chan story because it much more fun. >be me a ff enjoyer >reading a DBZ ff >hoping it be a good a ff where it fix many mistake that Toriyama made such as neglecting the OG series such as Krillin, Yamcha, and Tien. >yamcha become much much stronger >yamcha IQ is lowered to room temperature for some reason >become a comic relief telling the enemy about the Dragonball because? >still die to sibamen suicidal attack >me criticize author for writing Yamcha so Out Of Character >got called as Yamcha fanboy in return LOL ff author aren't the most mature being but this is just childish. Don't bother reading. Look elsewhere maybe fanfiction.net.

2yr
AinzO0alGown
AinzO0alGownLv14

Go Gohan Go Go to Piccolo Go Gohan Dodge I said DOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOODGE!!!

2yr
neobenmike
neobenmikeLv5

First few chaps were okay and then went downhill from there.

2yr
JoSauer
JoSauerLv14

its allaround pretty meh. The grammar is terrible, writing is ok but also a bit boring, consisteny/logic are also kind of bad. I can only recommend this to people who are realy desperate for dragon ball fanfics.

2yr
Baldysalino
BaldysalinoLv13

the grammar honestly sucks, and the author has made no attempt to fix it. the story design is meh, as they simply just follow the plot. the author has made the characters stupider then the original show and that says a lot. the plot also feels forced. over all, needs lots of improvements.

2yr
Barnacleboy
BarnacleboyLv15

Its really good since I haven’t seen a lot of love for Gohan in other fanfics. My only and biggest issue is that he has a really big mouth. Why does he keep saying stuff that he shouldn’t know when he doesn’t need to ? It just take any immersion in had out of the story.

2yr
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