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Djabilong
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2021-03-02 23:47

It was actually pretty darn good for the first couple dozen chapters, albeit a bit silly at times. But after a cetain point it all devolved into bland smut and two dimensional pointless villainy with no real goal and endless repetition. Still, I highly recommend reading the first thirty chapters or so, then deciding for yourself if you want to read the rest or not.

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Djabilong
DjabilongLv6

UPD: a couple 1-star reviews just magically disappeared while 5-star spambots like Fox remain. How peculiar.

Djabilong
DjabilongLv6

I wouldn't argue on account of tags, even though half of them weren't there at the beginning and got added without my knowledge as the story progressed (because let's be honest - you look at the novel's main page once to see the synopsis, and that's usually it). R18 tag is one thing that *was* there from the start, but that's a general term that could mean anything. Now, if smut tag was there since the beginning, I would've peaced out right then and there without bothering you. Still gonna call you out on the review front though. You can't deny that from a side perspective it's pretty iffy that %insulting% reviews from someone who didn't read the story get scrubbed, but the ones left by water bots and "expexpexp" folks remain. I don't need to tell you what it looks like, do I?

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Djabilong
DjabilongLv6

Nobody's accusing you of anything, the bots in question are widely known around the site and target people at random according to their profiles (honestly wouldn't be surprised if it's WN's own doing, in some weird backwards scheme of attempting to attract traffic / making the site look "livelier" to outside eye). I'm simply pointing out the frankly pointless bias. There's nothing for you to gain from higher rating and no free time to spend on anything, and yet lowballers are somehow important enough to spend effort on, while highballers are a waste of time? Looks less like question of pride and more as insecurity. Might as well leave it be if it's all the same.

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Konrad_The_Fourth
Konrad_The_FourthLv4

Anything than can be considered to them as insult is removed by them(lol) even if that review is sometime is speaking truthfully albeit with added insult, I only pity those future readers reading this thinking this would be a cool villain type of mc who will kill a protagonist like a badass

Djabilong:UPD: a couple 1-star reviews just magically disappeared while 5-star spambots like Fox remain. How peculiar.
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Tyyx
TyyxLv1

This is the internet lol

Konrad_The_Fourth
Konrad_The_FourthLv4

Nah, You two are just snowflakes you could have just deleted the reviews who is purely insulting the story and the author , But, You guys also deleted some honest review, And although they have a few insults on them it was still a honest one that could help new readers if this kind of story is for them or not, But, Since it has a insult even though the reviews is real, And the author is butthurt why not just delete it, right?

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Konrad_The_Fourth
Konrad_The_FourthLv4

Haha, Yeah, Let's delete honest reviews because it has insults on them so it's logical that it no longer count as one😂, yeah? Oh also let's also compare my family to the novel as if my family is something you could put reviews on, Sounds logical right😑? Nah, Your just dumb sh*t comparing a family to a novel as if they can be reviewed on, Would you like I review your family🤔? Ah, Let's go outside and call some random woman a whore, And go on a trial and call her a snowflake, Yeah sounds definetly like me calling a really not that good story because they delete some honest review just because it has insult and called them snowflakes🤦‍♂️ Also d*mbf*ck I'm not saying you should ignore the reviews that is purely an insult, What I have problem is how you guys delete honest review that can help new readers if the story is to their liking or not just because it has a insult you guys can't be that soft, right? Nah, It doesn't change my mind a bit(So go waste your head against a brickwall), Also stop twisting what I'm trying to say, You speak as if I'm insulting you and the author because you guys deleted pure insults review *sigh* Even though my only problem is how you guys delete reviews even though it's honest enough to help new readers if will they like it or not just because it has an insult

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Konrad_The_Fourth
Konrad_The_FourthLv4

There's a lot of brutally true reviews that says a lot of what the novel is about on how you would question yourself on how tf easy bleach girls fall for the mc to how one dimensional the villain is And that is true on what I've read from your novel so far And although they were not critism they still can be considered as honest review that would save a lot of new readers time if they were searching for good FF And also f*ck you for asking me evidence that you guys deleted

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Konrad_The_Fourth
Konrad_The_FourthLv4

Suit yourself you could just delete any reviews you don't like making those new readers think they'll have a good read, And it's not like i could stop that knowing how low guys like you would go, If you can compare people's family to your shitty ff like they can be reviewed then what stopping you from doing something else🤷‍♂️

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Konrad_The_Fourth
Konrad_The_FourthLv4

Then reply that to those who said it Lmao How would I know the author's family is getting insulted

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Alfha_Robby
Alfha_RobbyLv6

the problem here is the fact that people find it acceptable to delete 1 star review but keep 5 stars bot exp exp review alone. just admit it you guys just want to rig the review system like the typical novel here.

DonHit
DonHitLv6

bro I am not trying to be bad for you but always keep in mind that once a fanfic has a tag with R-18 it means hentai does hentai need any logic? so some character changes is expected and it normal ^_^

Djabilong:I wouldn't argue on account of tags, even though half of them weren't there at the beginning and got added without my knowledge as the story progressed (because let's be honest - you look at the novel's main page once to see the synopsis, and that's usually it). R18 tag is one thing that *was* there from the start, but that's a general term that could mean anything. Now, if smut tag was there since the beginning, I would've peaced out right then and there without bothering you. Still gonna call you out on the review front though. You can't deny that from a side perspective it's pretty iffy that %insulting% reviews from someone who didn't read the story get scrubbed, but the ones left by water bots and "expexpexp" folks remain. I don't need to tell you what it looks like, do I?
Djabilong
DjabilongLv6

As someone who is spoiled by visual novels with great writing, logical plot and fleshed out characters... Yes, yes it does. The horny aspect is just a very welcome bonus - if you make it constant, easy and pointless, then it absolutely kills the value. You may love ice cream, but imagine having to eat a tub of it in one sitting, or, alternatively, eat nothing but ice cream for a week. Exactly.

DonHit:bro I am not trying to be bad for you but always keep in mind that once a fanfic has a tag with R-18 it means hentai does hentai need any logic? so some character changes is expected and it normal ^_^
Fishball_22
Fishball_22Lv3

I don't see any point of this 'ararguments' at all. As you can see, the fact that webnovel pit that option there, the fact that they had given authors the privilege to delete reviews, wasn't that meant to be used? 🤔🤔🤔 Also, people insulting your work really feels terrible but in the end, it's still better completely ignoring those people as it will save you a lot of energy. That's something I realized not so long ago and trust me, it worked. 😏

Xerox_STEAL
Xerox_STEALLv14

man I'm looking at these all arguments and all I have to say about them is that they're toxic and funny to me since they seem started for things that some ppl have nothing to do with imo

Djabilong:As someone who is spoiled by visual novels with great writing, logical plot and fleshed out characters... Yes, yes it does. The horny aspect is just a very welcome bonus - if you make it constant, easy and pointless, then it absolutely kills the value. You may love ice cream, but imagine having to eat a tub of it in one sitting, or, alternatively, eat nothing but ice cream for a week. Exactly.
Xerox_STEAL
Xerox_STEALLv14

and seriously what's up with the long paragraphs do u ppl have that much time or brain cells to spare

Djabilong:As someone who is spoiled by visual novels with great writing, logical plot and fleshed out characters... Yes, yes it does. The horny aspect is just a very welcome bonus - if you make it constant, easy and pointless, then it absolutely kills the value. You may love ice cream, but imagine having to eat a tub of it in one sitting, or, alternatively, eat nothing but ice cream for a week. Exactly.
Djabilong
DjabilongLv6

In case you didn't notice, you derived exact same mirth from watching people spit poison at one another as they did from directly initiating the process; even bothered going out of your way to give your two cents in an attempt to look better than the plebs instead of simply walking away. You've played yourself, welcome to our little family.

Xerox_STEAL:and seriously what's up with the long paragraphs do u ppl have that much time or brain cells to spare
Xerox_STEAL
Xerox_STEALLv14

I wanna take that as an insult as it kinda comes off as one but it's funny and I noticed it wasn't once I read to the end(thank god I did) so my response is just lol

Djabilong:In case you didn't notice, you derived exact same mirth from watching people spit poison at one another as they did from directly initiating the process; even bothered going out of your way to give your two cents in an attempt to look better than the plebs instead of simply walking away. You've played yourself, welcome to our little family.
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Xerox_STEAL
Xerox_STEALLv14

specifically that last sentence so I'm not going to start something for no reason dont have enough brain cells to get angry and argue so have a great day and I'm tired so good night😁

Djabilong:In case you didn't notice, you derived exact same mirth from watching people spit poison at one another as they did from directly initiating the process; even bothered going out of your way to give your two cents in an attempt to look better than the plebs instead of simply walking away. You've played yourself, welcome to our little family.
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Seud
SeudLv4

It’s really telling who’s in the wrong in this case, you having 0-2 likes average per response, while the other dude gets 10-16 average. At this point it’s just sad.

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