same... but not that much.

Ah yes, the first sentences themselves dictated that the author recognizes quality writing. The MC has a consistent design as the plot moves forward [Effortless, Humble and even Cautiously Smart]. I'm not that familiar with systems and cultivations but this book gave easy explanations for me to grasp the concepts of the two. I hope you'll do well and attain the success this novel deserves!

you can remove the [then!] after the word convenient for a smoother read.

You can remove the second comma here so it won't look too cumbersome.

just change it to~ [Another peak master cut him off]. to make it less clunky because the next statement showed that it was indeed a woman that had cut him off.

MC be following Covid protocols lol

lol "Lablats" and "<3".

add a space between hand and Fristly. gosh delete my comments later ahahaha I became a free proofreader.

Add a space on your last sentence... or am I just tripping?

Okay, first sentences in and I already caught the Author's way of writing... simple yet impressive and time-smart.

Lol Kelvin can be hot or cold... I apologise for my nerdy brain...

consider my comments as help when you proofread this for laterrrr good luck on your novel

had the was

"Show never tell" to the readers, all I learned from this was his character fits in generic definitions and not enough descriptions... Sorry I had to do some tough love if I want the writers of the novels I read to improve. 😔 How do we connect our senses to his given traits? I can say that I have a 300 IQ and a billion in my bank acc but no one would believe me if that's just me telling and not showing. (delete this comment later)

good luck to both of us ahahhaa

The intro made me say wtf 🤭 the story is actually fast-paced and easy to follow but the author should be a little more subtle with the information about the world. I find it difficult to do so in my novel but we can do this hahaha 😌

oh interesting...

Ahh yes I was just confused a little with the Chapter titles 😂 it made it difficult to follow because it said~ 1 Chapter Zero: Prologue" there's 1 and 0 so it got me astray a bit thinking that I skipped a chapter when I continued reading.

Damn don't be hard on yourself 😅

The idea of character development is there, even the MC is too brazen for himself 😂 which is kinda funny. This just needs a little organizing here and there and you're good to go since the grammar is okay.