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The novel presents an intriguing premise but suffers from poor execution. The dialogue is excessively verbose and often nonsensical, severely impacting the story's credibility. The protagonist, Jon, behaves inconsistently with his supposed age, resembling someone in their late teens or early twenties rather than his actual age (9). This disconnect, alongside poor portrayals of other important characters (including their decisions and dialogue) highlights the author's lack of understanding of the characters, further detracting from the narrative. Additionally, the reliance on the trope of "the old gods granting knowledge" as a convenient explanation undermines the plot's integrity. Overall, a promising idea, but not her more.
in progress :)
Well I would love your opinion, my idea for the change was this (Makes a pact with Spirit Dragons (that look like chinese dragons) after Arthur Pendragon did them a favour which saved them from great peril. They have no physical form. From there, every Pendragon goes to that sacred place, and makes a pact with A dragon spirit, capable of harnessing their powers after going through several trials, each one unlocking more powers) your idea is great as well, what do you think needs changing, what could I incorporate?
I'm ashamed to admit I hadn't thought about that. We can cover both, it could be interesting to see how both sides affect each other in close proximity.
No, i really want to limit his legacies. He probably won't get any more honestly.
I really appreciate you're comments! I do have these bursts of guilt for neglecting this story especially when I read comments such as yours. I love the passion, and I'm glad I was able to provide such a rich experience for you. I don't plan to ever drop this story, thought as you would've noticed, the update rate is extremely slow. I plan to pick it up again, changing a lot for the next region, since I know I would go back and change a lot of things. It doesn't really feel like Pokemon anymore, it's gotten out of hand. So if I do ever get to the next region, I plan on grounding it more, making simpler. I hope you'll stick around, and I appreciate the support. Much love.
no, just been very busy, I'll write one very soon!
more like a computer analysing the data, and coming up with ways to prevent it from ever happening again sort of thing.