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Plug_O_Stien

Plug_O_Stien

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2020-09-02 入りましたAustralia
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  • Plug_O_Stien
    Plug_O_Stiena day ago
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    This is some twisted version of F1. The glaring weakness of this story are; 1) the writing quality. It's evident to anyone who has ever used chatgpt that is is AI written. And it's badly done, with the writing feeling stilted and overly descriptive on aspects that don't need it. Next is the context of the Main Character's situation. We have no idea how he could be poor if his father was an F1 driver, seemingly wishing to gloss over it in the hopes the readers forget the clear lack of though put into this novel. Second, the realism in this is non-existent, with him not going through the proper procedures to actually drive in ANY formula car. This brings me to my main problem, WHO THE FUCK LETS AMATEURS DRIVE INCREDIBLY EXPENSIVE F1 CARS? Not to mention the intese physical and cognitive strain it places on these talentless buffoons, the activities they do are so stupid. They should be driving fucking fiats if these are the activies their having them do. Over all, the story lacks life, a good story direction and a ton of common sense. I say scrap the idea, go watch so videos on formula 1, get aquatinted with how someone would ACTUALLY go about getting there and then, only then, deign to start writing. And I mean you writing, not this sub par AItrash you had me wasting my time on. 1.4 stars. Don't waste your time on this.

  • Plug_O_Stien
    Plug_O_Stien2 days ago
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    Waste of time. The author is scared to use the powers of the tenseigan which presents the reader with a frustrating experience where we yearn for more instances of the majn character in action, yet receive crumbs at best. Most of the story is apent fucking eating. AS IF THIS WERE A FUCKING MUKBANG! In chapters 170 on, I'm 90% certain it's AI written, with chapters repeating themselves. More than 5 consecutive chapters are spent explaining that Shinki is observing the situation from bear country. It's frustrating, insulting and pathetic. Don't waste your time.

  • Plug_O_Stien
    Plug_O_Stien16 days ago
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    It was a mixed bag. The prose is average (3 stars) with some proper use of writing techniques but otherwise very simple with little diversity to add colour to the imagination. The dialogue is basic, with little characterisation and individuality. The story development proves to be a very interesting take on the pokemon world, prefering to capitalise on the grim dark possibilities there while still keeping it somewhat light. Though sometimes it is very jarring and stilted, with forced danger to remind us constantly that the wild is dangerous when it is not necessary. Character design is where I find it severely lacking (1 star). The main character is naive yet somewhat a nerd, and somehow a battle prodigy who never freezes mid battle. Considering his personality tilts towards cowardly, he sure is level head in battles. It creates a severe disconnect between his supposed trauma from events (that he should already be knowledgeable of and therefore not be shocked by considering who his father is) and the overly smooth battles and level-headedness. There are some sprinkles of world background in there as far as I have read (chapter 10) but over all standard mix of game and anime. So over all 2.6 stars. A little below average mostly because of the unlikeable main character. The story would have been better off with a charismatic, and energetic kid who can bounce back from traumatic events, giving the read an anchor of hope in a world that is being ripped apart by gods. I also hate this interarion Lucas, Barry and Dawn. Don't know why there are anything more than a footnote in this story. Lucas is arrogant, dumb and reckless, Barry is a pushover and spineless, while Dawn is the standard Cliche airhead. Also, the constant comments on the contests being for girls is plain stupid and sexist. The former CHAMPION of Hoenn was a contest winner. It's little things like this that bother me most. I know they are 14 year old kids, but it's truly unnecessary and adds nothing but distaste. I hope this has helped someone, if not, well, I have said my piece.

  • Plug_O_Stien
    Plug_O_Stien16 days ago
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    I skimmed past the entire chapter.

  • Plug_O_Stien
    Plug_O_Stien17 days ago
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    I only got through 8 chapters, that should tell you enough. The prose is lacking, sometimes spending upwards of FIVE PARAGRAPHS to explain the smell and colour of a park for fuck sake. It's unbearable. Furthermore, he is supposed to be an adult, granted the majority of adults aren't enlightend or anything, he should still be more nuanced with his perspective, rather than the pathetic mentality of a nine year old. The author dropped the ball hard. There is a lot of potential for world building, delving into the rules, how restricting they are, how they could lead to more unnecessary deaths all because people are too scared fo break the rules. How does that shape society, what are the observable after-effects of such rules. The story is long winded when it doesn't need to be. It should condensed, targeted and more specific with what its trying to convey. Over all, another let down.

  • Plug_O_Stien
    Plug_O_Stien17 days ago
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    Underwhelming. This story is a regurgitated mess like all the others. With a rutterless main character who doesn't know what he wants one moment, only to do mental gymnastics the next in order to want to be a hero. It's rather jarring to read. There are some nice moments with Jin, and Mei which made it somewhat bearable. But he feels so weak in every fight. The stakes are supposedly super high, yet the author or (more convinently) the character, forgets to use all of his busted abilities. Fights that shouldn't last more than ten seconds are stretched out into these super close life threatening fights that have me questioning the author's intelligence. Very poor world building, with many opportunities to expand on established lore waste over a comfy stable pre-established option. The only commendable part of this, is the update quality which I gave four stars (above average). Everything else needs improvement or better, start over, get rid of that stupid gacha system if you want to make a serious progression story, or... stop acting like the readers are stupid. Because all of us can easily poke holes through your arguments and reasoning. Knowledgeable JJK fans would be able to tell you that over a dozen curse techniques would be able to stand in the top 1 percent of heroes. Yet you put the bench mark at one for all and all for one. Ridiculous. I would say, if you are new to this website, this could be a good read. If you are on your way out, like me, I would say give it a try, but temper your expectations.

  • Plug_O_Stien
    Plug_O_Stien17 days ago
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    It's unreadable. The prose is awful, the dialogue is stilted and robotic, while the pacing is off, jarring me to the bone. If I'm right, the author just deletes all reviews that don't praise his enormous ego to the high moon. The story has potential, I was excited to read it, but the writing quality makes it impossible. I hope this helps temper the expectations of new readers.

  • Plug_O_Stien
    Plug_O_Stien25 days ago
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    Very clearly written by ai. Chatgpt is not good at creative writing, it's better to build your own skills and use it as a supportive tool rather than what you are doing

  • Plug_O_Stien
    Plug_O_Stien25 days ago
    に返信 Benoit_Valtin

    Because it's written by ai

  • Plug_O_Stien
    Plug_O_Stiena month ago
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    First chapter involves the simping ugly duckling (MC) getting NTR'd by his handsome best friend. Not a great start at all. And then, the virgin decides to use his position of power in the next few chapters to sexually harass his maid. I mean, can you be any more of a degenerate piece of trash. I don't recommend this to any sensible human being who hasn't had their mind rotted beyond repair. Good day.

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4.5
225 Chs