I did some revising. Please do tell me if it's better now. I went and fixed some confusing dialogue(and left others confusing because I meant it to be) and fixed the 'daddy' problem😅

I've got ways to go😅

🤣 again I'm so sorry. I was trying to convey sort of her attitude? Its definitely cringy, if you know a way where I can give the readers the MC's attitude please tell me. 😂 I'll also work on dialogue.

😂 I'm so sorry, I will definitely improve on those. I should have taken it a bit more time to editing and revising. Thank you very much for the review!

Lmao I'll try my best😁

I see, I see, well fine lad I hope you enjoy my horribly inconsistent book😀

Judging by your profile pic I can see your a man of culture.

lmao Lock Up The Simp!

Hey Author, Even though your novel has flaws it's still a good read! trust me, as a fellow new guy. Just write for fun and have other people's opinions after that. If you wanted to make your writing better we could give each other constructive feedback. Have a good day :)

Can't say your wrong:)

Don't worry I'm just reviewing my work! This is my first novel I've ever made so I'd love for you to give me criticism at anytime. I also suck at staying consistent soo... sorry. Hey! If you think that my novel isn't half bad then please give me a vote. It keeps me motivated and helps me stay consistent. Now enjoy this picture of a cute dog.