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At first author uses a chinese name then the MC name changes to Alex then without any advise the massive usage of cultivation references and finally without even ending the first chapter having a massive punch with the reveal that this is yet another disgusting cultivation ff ..... How much disgusting ff will be made in this website until they realise that this is just..... trash.

Writing quality: 2 star Story development: 2 star Character desing: 2 star World background: 0 star [img=coins][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]

It’s good and has potential but grammer needs improvment

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i liked little bit of it but i didnt like remaing part any of it i got exited at 1 st two chapters but it was gone and felt it was not good try to make it more realestic and dont put too much 18+

I like your fanfic, but you should put commas, also capital letters at the beg inning of each sentence or period. Also, you could use grammarly to correct English mistakes.