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The Plains in Super

作者: Qwynzelle
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Gem is a super girl who had been abandoned by her parents in the worst possible place ever. Despite being a superhuman, Gem was weaker than the lesser superhumans who found it fulfilling to hurt and abuse the elderly and children alike. The wastelands was a lawless place, so to seek for a better life, Gem was offered to join in an expedition. One that would finally set them free from the abuse. But this expedition required a lot of courage and sacrifice as it was proven to have little to no chances of success. And indeed it was a hopeless mission, crossing the flaming border with no equipment? It was as if these people had come here to die! One by one, Gem saw these people turn into ashes, their high pitched screams adding detail to the brutal flames that has formed an image in her mind resembling hell. She knew crossing the border was a false hope, but there was no coming back. "See you in the afterlife!" The cheerful voice of her friend echoed in her memories. Gem couldn't believe that out of the fifty people that she had come with, only one was able to escape the borders alive. The first one to do so in its entire history. She laid on the ground, feeling the dampness of the mud cool down her burning skin. "I... I'm alive? They all turned into ashes... but how did I not?" No one could believe it, they were all enraged. A little girl was able to survive such brutal flames? How did she do it and what could be the life waiting for her beyond the borders? Like a gem, strong and beautiful, are you ready to emerge into the world of superhumans, dear readers? Come and join Gem through her adventures as she uncovers the truths beyond the super world! --- Support and add to library if u like this book, also please do note that English is not my first language but I will do my best to deliver this story to you in the most comfortable and enjoyable way that I can, ty! Please send your kind reviews so I can see if you liked my story and the things that I should improve further. Cover picture not mine kindly send a message in the comments if you're the owner and you want it to be taken down ty ___ Hi, new book promotion shamelessly coming through! I have just recently published a new fantasy romance book called Chasing butterflies in Another Life (CBIAL) and I would very much appreciate it if you would check it out too! It's going to be my 2nd work so you guys can expect much better quality story and writing-wise with that one compared to this. Updates for this book will be slow since the other one will be my new priority. Again, thank you so much for understanding and have a good read!!

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1 :Beyond the border
2 :Enchanted Gem
3 :Pre-Tournament

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[Reviewed on: 08-07-2021] Reading status: [Read up to 7 chapters] [Basic strong point: Grasp on vivid descriptions, effortlessly indulging] [Basic weakness: Character's odd speech at times] GOOD POINTS: - Vivid imagery, readers can grasp and play the whole scene in their minds effortlessly - The storyline is moved by the MC, who drives the scenarios and plot by her acts - The sense of alienation is highlighted element, since the MC is an outsider in another world - It is still unclear what exactly the world is and the setting is, though it states a year but that's not enough. Thus, the mysteriousness is kept intact for readers to find out - There is magic, technology, superpowers, super humans, shade politics and whatnot - It appears to be something like 'sweet tooth' with mutations and tech tinge, but seeing the tag of 'transmigration' I really am confused myself. Nonetheless we will see about that further - The hype created with the situation in first 4 chapters is good enough to hook. Chapter 1 begins with a different approach from what we usually spot on WN. - Chapter 1 tells vividly about the history and the 'emergence' of the MC, without shoving the information down our throats - Chapter 2 clearly shows the grasp of the author over descriptive scenes (have patience while reading them) No doubt they are required and are strong point of author's style - Chap 3 and 4 moves faster and moves the plot to another setting - MC is a female with nearly no knowledge of her past or even a name, she is cautious, scared, interacts less - There are a lot of questions by the end of chapter 5, who is MC? How did her gemstone necklace work? What connection she has with Dette? What exactly is the world? - Since everything is told yet kept hidden, the amount of clues is reasonably given WEAKNESS: - Tense fluctuation begins from chapter 7 which no doubt surprised me since initial ones were wonderfully done - Capitalization is neglected at times - Missing punctuation - As a reader switching of narration from 3rd person to 1st person around chapter 6 was not appreciated, since most of us are used to 3rd person - Moreover 1st person felt 'detached' from the MC, which isn't the purpose of personal narration. It could've been executed well imo - The character of Dette is said to be a mother but her interaction with MC (after she saves her) is kinda childish. Her speech didn't appear to be off an adult as it should be, I had to go back to see whether I missed something or not about her age - In contrast the MC's character seemed mature even though she is seemingly a kid, probably a teen - The pace of the story felt abrupt to me, chapter 1-3 were moderate, whereas chapter 4-7 went on a fast pace - The unnecessary descriptions about the food, clothes and the stuff MC encounters in Dette's house should be concisely done, they felt longer and descriptive when they didn't hold any importance to the plot [Overall remarks: It's a good ride for people preferring a blend of magic and tech, who are willing to die each day with the sprinkles of clues and cliffhangers.] >.<

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