Sussy Baka in MHA

the only reason this story is popular is because its sus it's got great technical writing, but the execution is middling, chapters filled with redundancy, sighs every 10th sentence, 5 chapters could be reduced to 2, and you wouldn't lose any concept of the story or mcs thoughts. like naruto filler. everything else is basic MHA si, but mc doesn't know much about the plot

I hereby grant Amongus the authority to govern my mental faculties and unalive any crewmate or engineer encountered, whether through venting, firing upon them, stabbing them, or breaking their necks, with the intention of rectifying the malfunctions within our society and ushering in a new era wherein sus individuals shall no longer persist. Amen.

AAAAAAAAA AMONGUS SUSSY BAKA OMG I SAW RED VENT BLUE IS SUS EJECT HIM AAAAAAAAA GET OUT OF MY HEAD GET OUT OF MY HEADGET OUT OF MY HEAD GET OUT OF MY HEADGET OUT OF MY HEAD GET OUT OF MY HEAD

GET OUT OF MY HEAD GET OUT OF MY HEAD GET OUT OF MY HEAD GET OUT OF MY HEAD GET OUT OF MY HEAD GET OUT OF MY HEAD GET OUT OF MY HEAD GET OUT OF MY HEAD GET OUT OF MY HEAD GET OUT OF MY HEAD GET OUT OF MY HEAD GET OUT OF MY HEAD GET OUT OF MY HEAD GET OUT OF MY HEAD GET OUT OF MY HEAD GET OUT OF MY HEAD GET OUT OF MY HEAD GET OUT OF MY HEAD GET OUT OF MY HEAD GET OUT OF MY HEAD GET OUT OF MY HEAD GET OUT OF MY HEAD GET OUT OF MY HEAD GET OUT OF MY HEAD

It’s definitely a good story, but lacks substance. It’s slow going where even when a chapter is dedicated to training 50% or more of the chapter is just the MC thinking about, “how it’s so much work” or “how I’m so lazy”. They’re a very flat character and I’d hope that the author is going to change his mindset, otherwise this will be a very boring, non entertaining story. Because reading about a character who just wants to exist with no problems, no ambition, is just a doomed plotline with middling character arcs and a non satisfying ending. My only other complaint is how everythings going so slow, but that’s probably just because we’re still in the prologue and everythings being set up. Overall it’s a very good story so far. It’s just that if the MC dosen’t grow or have a change of character this story is going to plummet off a cliff, crashing and burning due to lack of anything actually meaningful to read or look forward to. (Written at the time of chap 14 being out)

I like the power set of our main character, this caught my interest, requesting the author to not to drop this

THIS IS A MUST READ!

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The protagonist of this work is definetly not sus, anyone who thinks otherwise will be immediately liquidated by an emergency Meeting. Signed: Definetly Not Impostor Signed in small print: Backstabber

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This is the peak of fanfic, this is why webnovel has a reason for existing

I want you to Understand clearly, that you will burn for this. But good work with using a new idea even if a little cursed.

Among us fanfic? Interesting Provide me with more chapters

one of the best fanfic on mha available, definitely try

I don’t know what these other guys are smoking, but this fic is my favorite rn. Not of all time, but it’s story is so much fun and entertaining, and we haven’t even gotten sus yet

I expected to read about some meme story about AMONG US (GETOUTOFMYHEAD) but I remained pleasantly surprised about the quality of the grammar and the story. You can see the author really put tought into the power of the Main Character and didn’t minded making as powerful as his ability deserved. And oh boy, finally we got a MC in MHA that will kill

This fic is a hidden gem. MC’s power set is also creative and as said by the author, it is inspired by Imposter from Among Us. Let’s see what you have store for us.

Considering this is your first novel, it is amazing! No doubt there are flaws but your storytelling style is really great and makes up for the flaws. I only hope you won’t degrade the quality of this novel. Take your time and write at your pace. Good luck Author!

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it is one of the worst fanfic's the i have read. there is almost no point in the first 15 chapters. it's clear the the writer put no thought into making this and i advise if you don't want to waste your time don't read it.