Shattered Ascendance

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So far so good! Some things I liked were; - The world building- it’s an interesting concept - I enjoyed how the narration is simple and not hard to follow or understand as well as the symbolism to create a connection - It feels like the MC will think and talk more childish in the beginning but I’m guessing it matures with the more he gets older, right? And a few minor things I took note of; - Split long paragraphs. Most readers are on phone so it’s looks long on here, but author if ur writing ur chps on laptop i suggest checking how it looks on ur phone once it’s published and see which ones to split - I suggest having a difference in narration and dialogue for example the MC could call a character by a nickname when speaking but when u write it u could put the full name instead of the nickname. Another example is “his mother,” instead of “mommy,” when writing that isn’t dialogue. Overall well done author! [img=coins][img=recommend]

The implementation of its characters, world and its environment, very well described and detailed that feels alive, conveying the feeling very well. Good management of different perspectives in his writing and intrigue, something very unique in his stories. A very promising plot, with very realistic, beloved and memorable characters, a book that I recommend and that you must read.