Revenge is always sweet

Cringy,Rushed,Forced to max and super repetitive. I'm surprised that it still has a 4star rating. I guess *** sells more than I thought.......mm

if you want dumb hentai fanfic this is it, I myself dont like it but you might. The mc is reasoning is bad/dumb. Kkdkdndndndndndnndndndndndndndndn

The synopsis got me so I hope it is good and it doesn't get dropped. A question to the author : is this an original world or ist in a crossover?

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This is a good hentai fanfiction, but the author needs to get better with story telling since sometimes the mc is doing something and on the next paragraph its starts with another event and author won't mention or describe the passage of time between events and starts making things confusing. Story i don't expect much since is hentai and a fanfic, character design, the originals are meh and mc switching bodies and names sometimes confuses me. World building, there is almost no need for it since is fanfiction and the mc is still on the original world aka og earth. All in all updates are good enough.

Not even as hentai and smut this trash story is good, the worst is how the mc have more than one appearance so some girls only fall in love with one of his apearence this is pretty close to ntr

It is hard to make a review of this novel as there are as many bad things on it as there are good. Whatever, Let's get on with it. Writing Quality: There are many typos scattered all around the chapters, there is no chapter that has at least one, the delivery is average and nothing particularly outstanding, yet it can be considered decent to others I have read on this site so, 3 stars. Stability of Updates: So far, there are plenty of chapters so, good. Story Development: There is quite a bit of development in this novel, MC kind of grows up to a certain extent, I liked the whole Mahouka arc as it wasn't just MC throwing OP spells left and right, MC genuinely worked hard to marry Maya and I like it. Character Design: MC's character although I didn't like it at the beginning for being too much of a bastard and not one of my tastes. I kind of understand his behavior I mean we're talking about girls that made his life hell, so it is understandable in a big scope, after his revenge is done, he tones it down. I consider Shiori, Aimi, Ichinose, and Ryouka (?) good OCs I would have liked further development with Risa, but that's good as well. As for the fictional characters, some are loyal to their personalities, some aren't but the characters are likable regardless. World Background: Good enough, nothing really important to distinguish here. As for my personal opinion: Well, I believe this novel could have had a better path than the one it took, at the beginning, I didn't like it as my type of Smut is Vanilla, maybe that's why I liked Mahouka Arc. That mini-series of vengeance against the wife that was cheating on the husband was probably the closest you got to what you wanted to be accomplished in this series. Just as NTR is painfull, there is nothing better than the retribution. And I'm sure that what most people hate about NTR is not the actual NTR but the fact that MC doesn't do FK ALL about it when most readers if put in his position would be out for blood. You have the perfect chance for that here, it is good doing stories like Mahouka and all that but I believe the objective of this fanfic should be something like: 'Make MC reincarnate into the body of Otome Dori's MC after he saw the videos and plan his vengeance. First, retrieve the girl with most ******** *** possible. Second get in touch with all those bastards' wives and daughters, destroy their businesses etc etc...' If you did something like with all those hentai that have left people frustrated, you would have a masterpiece here, and you don't even need to keep the girls in the harem as he will be ejected from the world he was in, so it is more like mini-stories. Well, best regards.

The writing is least decent, and the grammar is... I must say pretty bad? and the usage of punctuations, the inconsistency of it and how rush the story is, where there are some parts of the story that needs clarification. The capitalization too... I don't know, but it feels like this novel was written by a 13 year old. Sorry for being harsh, but yeah that's my review for this novel.

So far this feels like a story about a middle schooler wish fulfillment written by a middle schooler. I know and understand yes hentai logic but hentai logic can only go so far till you might wonder if your reading a parody of a story or a actual story. I wouldn't mind giving a more in depth description of what I didn't like but nope the author didn't seem to care so I don't either. Just know that its bad Character descriptions are a -. So bad it's "Female Name" was a bully has under developed bre@$t but also large. And has blonde hair Personality is a - I've been bullied. She bullied me. World Building is a - Japan...with I think American names mixed in Smut is a -....its not good...its short... Grammer is a - so many mistakes almost every paragraph has something wrong. Like it was translated with google translator. Plot - no real plot, goals, progression, and not like one shots

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Disappointed with this fanfiction. The idea is good, but everything you did is terrible. I read 22 chapters and gave up. He uses his pheromones for psychic effects and it can be said that he raped his sister.

Hehehe... This author is venting his inner emotional situation. Here, MC had been subjected to every characters details thing you could think of. One time he lost his memory, another time he watched his lover getting ra***, he himself allows his women to still sleep with other man. This author has NTR fetish, so be careful.

this mc is useless! he love to blackmail others and send his video with his girlfriends to others but when he is the who got blackmail he can't do anything!

sooooo cringy

Can you guys tell me on what chapter the story improves, like really IMPROVE compare from chapter 1-20 cause i stop myself reading there. Like i cant, no more, done my brain can't continue and i force myself it feels like im slowly killing my lifespan. Really wonna read due to update stability but the substance... i just cant :'( huhuhuhu

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The novel often feels forced. The system does whatever it wants with the mc: it teleports him to other worlds at random, it doesn't give him information about why it does it, and hell, that system has"viruses" that lead the mc to torture situations, ntr, and other things. And instead of thinking logically, the MC concentrates on fucking any female lead who crosses his path. (Google translate)

Man, the first few chapters are so cringe and edgy that i can't flip the next chapter. Can't even read the next sentence because of the cringe and how the characters act like hentai characters not how a normal person usually act. The MC itself is a gary stu with a "body of a model not edited" and has a "9 inch cock" with an attitude of a boy.. well his still a kid, a teenager mindset so i cant blame the author for that. I might as well continue forward and read this till the end.

The plot, char design, world background and the updating stability was ok. The only problem was the writing, most of them was the capital letters and paragraph(You can look at other people work as example). I really don't mind about the grammar. so anyways keep up your work~