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GetDaDraws
GetDaDrawsLv23yr
2021-03-12 03:22

So far this feels like a story about a middle schooler wish fulfillment written by a middle schooler. I know and understand yes hentai logic but hentai logic can only go so far till you might wonder if your reading a parody of a story or a actual story. I wouldn't mind giving a more in depth description of what I didn't like but nope the author didn't seem to care so I don't either. Just know that its bad Character descriptions are a -. So bad it's "Female Name" was a bully has under developed bre@$t but also large. And has blonde hair Personality is a - I've been bullied. She bullied me. World Building is a - Japan...with I think American names mixed in Smut is a -....its not good...its short... Grammer is a - so many mistakes almost every paragraph has something wrong. Like it was translated with google translator. Plot - no real plot, goals, progression, and not like one shots

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It is hard to make a review of this novel as there are as many bad things on it as there are good. Whatever, Let's get on with it. Writing Quality: There are many typos scattered all around the chapters, there is no chapter that has at least one, the delivery is average and nothing particularly outstanding, yet it can be considered decent to others I have read on this site so, 3 stars. Stability of Updates: So far, there are plenty of chapters so, good. Story Development: There is quite a bit of development in this novel, MC kind of grows up to a certain extent, I liked the whole Mahouka arc as it wasn't just MC throwing OP spells left and right, MC genuinely worked hard to marry Maya and I like it. Character Design: MC's character although I didn't like it at the beginning for being too much of a bastard and not one of my tastes. I kind of understand his behavior I mean we're talking about girls that made his life hell, so it is understandable in a big scope, after his revenge is done, he tones it down. I consider Shiori, Aimi, Ichinose, and Ryouka (?) good OCs I would have liked further development with Risa, but that's good as well. As for the fictional characters, some are loyal to their personalities, some aren't but the characters are likable regardless. World Background: Good enough, nothing really important to distinguish here. As for my personal opinion: Well, I believe this novel could have had a better path than the one it took, at the beginning, I didn't like it as my type of Smut is Vanilla, maybe that's why I liked Mahouka Arc. That mini-series of vengeance against the wife that was cheating on the husband was probably the closest you got to what you wanted to be accomplished in this series. Just as NTR is painfull, there is nothing better than the retribution. And I'm sure that what most people hate about NTR is not the actual NTR but the fact that MC doesn't do FK ALL about it when most readers if put in his position would be out for blood. You have the perfect chance for that here, it is good doing stories like Mahouka and all that but I believe the objective of this fanfic should be something like: 'Make MC reincarnate into the body of Otome Dori's MC after he saw the videos and plan his vengeance. First, retrieve the girl with most ******** *** possible. Second get in touch with all those bastards' wives and daughters, destroy their businesses etc etc...' If you did something like with all those hentai that have left people frustrated, you would have a masterpiece here, and you don't even need to keep the girls in the harem as he will be ejected from the world he was in, so it is more like mini-stories. Well, best regards.

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