I'm Gohan!

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Nice!, I like it, good story, and it will probably follow the canon, but I still hope you change things a little. '18 is my waifu!!!' [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

well gonna drop the fanfic now. writing quality and stabaility of updates is quite alright. problem is author forces to keep powerlvl of gohan down to so he can follow the cannon and gohan doesnt get too op. Issue is MC is suppose to be quite smart...even more when readers picked that out and facts later show that reader where totally right, author is just totally toxic and tells readers there comments are stupid...So the forced canon kinda makes the world background and story development bad. All in all I enoyed the start of the fanfic but the quality droped quite fast and It got poison.

The writing quality is equivalent of the average chinese novel. so ehh... Story Development is eh... Character Design is also eh... nothing special but nothing out of the ordinary or OCC. Until the Yamcha incident. Keep reading to know why. oh I also got insulted as Yamcha fanboy for giving valid criticism lol World Background is also eh. The novel doesn't really explore the world building then again its a fanfiction. Most ff don't even bother w this part. So let's talk about the Yamcha incident. Let me explain like those 4chan story because it much more fun. >be me a ff enjoyer >reading a DBZ ff >hoping it be a good a ff where it fix many mistake that Toriyama made such as neglecting the OG series such as Krillin, Yamcha, and Tien. >yamcha become much much stronger >yamcha IQ is lowered to room temperature for some reason >become a comic relief telling the enemy about the Dragonball because? >still die to sibamen suicidal attack >me criticize author for writing Yamcha so Out Of Character >got called as Yamcha fanboy in return LOL ff author aren't the most mature being but this is just childish. Don't bother reading. Look elsewhere maybe fanfiction.net.

Go Gohan Go Go to Piccolo Go Gohan Dodge I said DOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOODGE!!!

First few chaps were okay and then went downhill from there.

its allaround pretty meh. The grammar is terrible, writing is ok but also a bit boring, consisteny/logic are also kind of bad. I can only recommend this to people who are realy desperate for dragon ball fanfics.

the grammar honestly sucks, and the author has made no attempt to fix it. the story design is meh, as they simply just follow the plot. the author has made the characters stupider then the original show and that says a lot. the plot also feels forced. over all, needs lots of improvements.

Its really good since I haven’t seen a lot of love for Gohan in other fanfics. My only and biggest issue is that he has a really big mouth. Why does he keep saying stuff that he shouldn’t know when he doesn’t need to ? It just take any immersion in had out of the story.

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It’s annoying how gohan makes dumb decisions and gets nerfed for the sake of plot.

the premise and execution is interesting but what I don't like is his childish mind set (especially the slip ups, like how?) and the mediocre English . I recommend using that grammarly app.

At first it was good. But later it all went down hill. The author deliberately keeps making the mc average so that he struggles each time, someone with the knowledge of everything shouldn't be like that. And they also keep saying that they don't want to change much if the original plot, but if we would've wanted to read that we might as well read the original story instead of this.

I like it, because the other dragon ball fanfics are about a protagonist who has never fought in his life, but when he reincarnates he becomes a god in 30 chapters, In this fanfics that doesn't happen, the MC evolves with each chapter. Keep up the good work author

Pretty good so far, it seems like it would follow the canon. I just hope the author would add tag’s to the novel since that can give an idea of what type of story it would be.

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I like the story as far as it is currently going, I just hope that the Author does not leave Piccolo so distanced from the power of the Saiyans until the Sagas of Dragon Ball Z are finished. Also why not give Krillin as a Wife to Zangya

Dropped this story before the cell arc All the new androids showing up just to stop him from destroying cell so the cell arc happens is INCREDIBLY forced. Good story but around the freiza fight you can tell that the author doesnt quite know what he wants to do as he keeps throwing in things from other movies. Overall the its a pretty good fic but when a plot is forced so hard that it becomes hard to read it just fails to be my cup of tea.

I'm really enjoying the story, but I think it could benefit from a bit more realism and gore. This would give each attack a greater impact both in terms of the lore and the overall story. Adding some spice to the story would make it even more dramatic. It's not necessary to go as far as Mortal Kombat levels of gore, but incorporating broken bones, cuts, missing limbs, and organ damage would take the fights to the next level. If you're looking to go the extra mile, I would suggest using martial arts techniques boosted with Ki to showcase different skills.