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Duality

作者: JohnnyKbca
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John was a secret agent before he died while avenging his little brother. But death was not the end for John, as he had the chance to reincarnate in another world. Now watch him grow from a slave's son to a hero and a legend. PS: I write as a hobby, with my job and college coming first, so the release rate may be slow and random. Author tags: Sword Wielder, Reincarnation, Original, Late Romance, Male Protagonist, Transmigration, Academy, Action, Cultivation, Revenge

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Chapter 1A New World: Book 1 Prologue

The bullet whizzed by Colonel Anthony McKay's left ear, missing his head by mere inches as he dived behind the brick wall that separated the kitchen from the living room. Two more shots followed next, both leaving holes in his cover but failing to fully penetrate it. Panting for breath, he gripped the pistol tightly.

It all happened so fast.

One minute he was lazing on the couch with his dog Donut, watching the evening news. Retirement had been a long time coming and, after dedicating most of his life to the army, he planned on enjoying however many years he had left.

Then out of the blue, Donut's ears perked up and he darted towards the entrance, growling and barking as he turned a corner. Out of McKay's field of view, someone kicked open the door, two shots sounded out, and then Donut cried in pain.

Not stopping to think, McKay pulled his pistol from the holster and slid the safety off. His late wife Patty used to call him paranoid for always carrying his gun around, but better safe than sorry, he argued. It took him decades, but it finally paid out.

A black man with a buzzcut and a green cap leaned over the corner. He shot at him, barely missing as McKay not so much ducked as he threw himself to the floor. The bullets pierced through the couch where he had been sitting, blowing out pieces of the pillow's white stuffing. The old colonel returned fire through the couch, aiming at the man's general direction while dashing towards the kitchen.

More shots. Bullets left fresh holes in the wall, and the sound of glass shattering pointed to at least one finding the television screen. None of them found him, though, and he managed to reach the kitchen.

"Who are you?" Anthony yelled out. "Why are you doing this?" The sound of an empty magazine clattering over the floor was the only response he received. Kneeling by the side of the doorway, he pressed the release on his pistol and pulled out the magazine, counting three bullets through the witness holes before pushing it back in. Plus the one still in the chamber, he only had less than half-a-clip left.

Anthony heard another clatter, heavier this time and also much closer to himself. He glanced to the side. A thick, green pipe rolled over the floor into the kitchen, large holes perforated over its length revealing the metallic charge inside. His heart sank to his stomach, and he immediately covered his ears and closed his eyes.

The flashbang blast shook Anthony's entire body, and he felt like he had just gone deaf. The sudden flash of light went through his closed eyelids, almost blinding him. Trembling hands almost lost their grip on the pistol, and he had trouble even looking straight.

He couldn't sit there waiting to recover though, for he knew what would come next. Barely standing straight, McKay leaned to the side and shot wildly at the man running towards him, the close distance helping offset his impaired aiming.

Still, the first two shots missed by far, one of them opening one more hole in the couch. The man returned fire, and McKay felt a sudden pressure in his chest, almost like a punch. The Colonel kept pressing the trigger. The third shot blew a hole through the holster on the man's hip, and the last one hit him right in the gut. Just as well, because he felt another punch to his arm, making him drop the now empty weapon.

Wide-eyed, the intruder stopped. His knees buckled, and he keeled over.

Only then did McKay chest and arm start hurting, as if his body was slowly realizing he had been shot. He found it hard to breathe, and even trying to stand up made him light-headed.

Lying on the living room floor across from him was a man he had never seen before, McKay was sure of that. His vision began to go dark, and it took him more and more effort to breathe. As he lay there on his kitchen floor, staring at his would-be-assassin, one question refused to leave his mind.

"Wh–" He coughed, the taste of metal filling his mouth. "Why…"

***

Timelord Chronos lay his back down on the desolate moon, bushy hair and beard as gray as its surface. To his side, a tall scythe made of a long piece of gnarled wood with a rusty blade at the end. Above him was the vast expanse of space peppered with the shine of countless distant stars and a single blue little planet nearby.

That was a fascinating discovery from a few centuries ago, and a secret he has kept to himself ever since. An uncharted world populated by billions of humans, all of them untouched by the Laws, all of them uncultivated.

In theory, such a thing shouldn't be possible. Cultivation was essential for progress. Without it, no creature was capable of ever developing rational thinking and evolving. In practice, however, here there was a planet full of such impossibilities. The product of billions of years of random chance, they lived their lives unaware of how extraordinary their simple existence was. Of how precious said lives were.

Chronos sighed. In a flash he was sitting down, both legs crossed and the ancient scythe atop his lap. Before becoming the Timelord, he once had a family, if one could call it that. A wife he never loved, three children he couldn't bring himself to care for, in a homeworld he left behind. Only after abandoning the mortal realm and ascending to immortality did he meet Ananke, his one and true love.

She gave him twelve beautiful daughters and then gave up her life in combat against the Godking's minions. Chronos managed to protect their girls from further conflict, but not from the very power he mastered: time.

One by one, they all succumbed to the ennui, the pervasive rot that ate at every immortal's soul. Arctus, his youngest, was the latest victim. Now, completely alone in the universe, Chronos struggled to find a reason to care about anything. His family was gone. His cultivation had been stagnated for centuries.

Maybe he should follow his daughter's example and throw himself inside a black hole to end it all. Or maybe he should go to the front lines and fight until his body and soul were destroyed, taking out as many sovereign powers as possible along the way. At least then his death could have some meanin–

There was a subtle change in the Laws coming from the planet, something so minuscule that not even he would have noticed in a normal world. A faint spark lit up in someone, signaling the first step on the road to cultivation. There were some worlds so attuned to the Laws that babies were already born on the cultivation path. This world was the complete opposite, and even this first step would require a prodigy the likes of which he had never seen.

Such a thing should have been impossible.

Another thing that should have been impossible.

This small, seemingly inconsequential world was much more than met the eye. Maybe uncovering its secrets could be a good use of his time. Suddenly Chronos was on his feet, and the next moment he disappeared as if never there.

***

His body felt weak. The gunshot wound didn't stop bleeding, and he couldn't feel his legs. He had seen this sort of injury before during his tours of duty, though it was the first time experiencing it himself. In the distance, he could hear police sirens, likely called by a neighbor who heard the shots. The smart thing to do would be to lay still and try to survive.

Then again, John wasn't bleeding on the floor and possibly paralyzed from the waist down for doing the smart thing. He was there with a goal. A goal he was committed to see to the end, even if it killed him.

John was left orphaned as a child after his parents died in a car accident. Lucas, his little brother, was the only family he had left. They always stuck together, so it was no surprise that, when John enrolled in the army, Lucas decided to follow suit.

That's what ultimately led to his death. Ambushed during a patrol, he and his squad were all killed after the commanding officer took too long to send reinforcements.

In the kitchen, the rotten bastard who let his brother die lay with his face up, chest barely moving. Maybe he'd die before help arrived. Maybe not. John had to make sure. The pistol had fallen somewhere under the couch, and he didn't have the time to search for it.

Bloodied hands and forearms left their mark on the hardwood as he dragged himself through the floor. The distance that could once be covered in a few steps had become an exhausting journey. The more he moved, the more he bled, bringing him closer and closer to a hemorrhagic shock. The exhaustion was like a thousand invisible hands holding him down, trying to make him submit. He wouldn't.

John forced through the pain until he couldn't feel it anymore, just like his legs. Each pull was punctuated by a memory flashing through his mind. Lucas standing proud in his blue service uniform during his graduation from basic training. The happiness in his little brother's voice as he talked about his promotion to sergeant. The gloom in the captain's voice as he notified John about Lucas' death.

With each flash, he pulled harder. The anger lit a fire inside him that burned the invisible hands away and, before realizing it, he had closed the distance. No sooner had he reached McKay did John's hands wrapped around the colonel's neck.

The old man, only half conscious by now, woke up with a startle. Legs kicked empty air. Weak hands tried to loosen the grip around his own neck, clawed at John'sarms, and punched his face.

To no avail.

The more he struggled, the tighter the hands strangling him became. Bloodshot eyes rolled so far in their sockets that the irises disappeared. Kicking turned into twitching, and his white skin turned a shade of purple.

John hated the man. If not for him, his brother might still be alive. If not for him, then John might not have lost everything. Hatred fueled his anger until it finally reached a boiling point.

And then something snapped.

McKay head hanged lifelessly, a ghastly expression forever etched on his face.

It was done.

His single goal achieved, John collapsed like a puppet with its strings cut. The sirens were closer now, and he didn't care what happened next. With the fire extinguished, the hands returned to weigh him down. They pressed on his chest, and suddenly his lungs couldn't pull in fresh air. His own arms were as good as glued to the kitchen tiles. His eyelids dropped down, and everything turned dark…

"What a waste," a wizened voice rang out.

The next instant, John found himself back on his feet despite not feeling his legs, eyes wide open. An old man stood in front of him, hair and beard forming a disheveled gray mane that fell down to his bare chest. His face was clear of any blemishes other than the wrinkles that looked chiseled. Staring at his dark eyes felt like gazing into the boundless void of space and realizing one's own insignificance.

"God?" the words escaped his lips.

The man raised an eyebrow and laughed, seemingly not caring for the dead body behind him. "Wrong, child. I am Chronos, a Lord." The words themselves sounded foreign, but their meaning was as clear as day in John's mind. "These are different things, though they might as well be one and the same to you." He pressed a hand against John's wound, but there was no pain.

Chronos tilted his head down, and John noticed the long rusty blade of an old scythe peeking from behind his mane as if strapped to his back. "Such interesting weapons." Pinched between two of his fingers was a deformed piece of metal the size of a pebble and coated red. A bullet. "I wish to study it more in-depth, but that can wait."

The dark eyes turned back to him, and John felt himself being stripped bare. Every secret, action, and thought of his was an open book under this gaze.

"It is quite an achievement to stumble on the path of cultivation," he said, and John was even more confused. Why was he talking about farming? "It's a pity you'll die before reaping its benefits. Even if I saved you, you would just be left stuck in this barren world."

John never saw Chronos move, but the next instant there was a finger pressing on his forehead.

"So consider this my gift to you." Darkness engulfed the room until Chronos was the only thing left in the world. "With your talent, you might lead the fulfilling life you never had. Or maybe you'll die before ever being born. Either way, I wish you luck." He winked out of existence, and John's consciousness disappeared.

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254 Chs
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0 :Auxiliary Volume
1 :Prologue
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3 :Book 2

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Dan_Ryder
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Takeaway: Reading this story is like listening to the drunken tale of a deranged mad man as he slowly trys to fumble through an incoherent story he can barely remember. So first we have to start with Writing Quality, I'm going to give this a solid 2. And that's only because the author got a little bit better over his time writing the story. Most of the use of prose and syntax is ill advised. Author also has the *******ish habit of using any synonym for said he can find in his story. Instead of painting a vivid picture of what happens through words the author tells you. Stability of Updates: A solid 1, if you start enjoying this novel, which you won't, don't expect any releases soon. Story Development: There is none, we have an mc reincarnated into a new world. We then get a flash back 30/57 chapters available. Then mc gets a McGuffin and sets off on some type of quest. Throughout it all the author consistently fails the reader to deliver a coherent narrative. This has a lot to do with the stability of updates, it just feels like the author keeps changing direction constantly at what he wants out of the story. Character Design: The mc is interesting, but all of the other characters lack any discerning soul or individuality that it's very disconcerting. They might as well all be named Random Stand in #1 or Random Stand in #2 from all the times the author introduces new characters that have no effect on the over arching plot. If a character isn't important don't even bother naming them. I mean half the characters introduced sit in a 30 chapter flashback, so it's pretty bad. The mother who is the star of the flashback is a walking piece of garbage with no redeeming qualities. World Background: Just your standard fantasy world, filled with mysteries and mystique that never quite get answered. At 57 chapters in we still barely know anything about the world, the op mc has barely set out on his Mcguffin warranted quest. I doubt the author even knows anything about it at this point to be honest. The world background was not well planned or taught out before writing. Might as well call the world DND Module World #32 for the lack of world building that goes on here. Detailed Explanation/Spoilers: It's honestly not worth the time or effort to read. I only read this because I thought the author knew a little about the tenants of story telling. None of that is to be found here. The novel was not outlined before writing, and the author lacks any sense of creativity. Reading this story is like meandering through a random DND module, with a very drunk Dungeon Master. The story starts off with your standard isekai, with a male protaganist reincarnated and being op from his memories of a past life. For some reason the author then chooses to spend half of the chapters in the story telling a flashback about his mothers prime. Yep, half the chapters available are a flashback with no relevance to the story... This is where the drunken meandering comes from. We don't even get to see the protag settle into his new life until around chapter 36. Yep, that's right you gotta read from around chapter 5 to chapter 36 on a random flash back that brings nothing relevant to the story. If the novel stopped at chapter 34 the main character would be Dene and she's nothing if not unlikable. No redeeming qualities what so ever. She even tells an explanative sex story to the 10 year old mc on how he was concieved in chapter 30. Yep no redeeming qualities. There's nothing unique that stands out about the characters presented, and this has to do with the authors failure to create any type of personality for the characters. There's nothing in the entire story that makes me even care about the story of the protaganist. I mean we did spend half the novel in the point of view of the unlikable Dene for one. After explaining to my son the joys of sex, lets go take him on a murder spree a few years later. Cause that's how you raise a 13 year old boy in a fantasy world. Oh my son's talented, he's perfect for this quest created by my mcguffin! Thankfully we don't have to deal with the sex and murder crazed mom anymore as she tragically dies around chapter 45. So the mother's story and everything was leading up to our mc having a tragic past, but it's not tragic at all because his mother's a walking piece of garbage. After that we finally get the pay off of the reincarnated wish fulfillment of the mc stomping around a fantasy world, cause you know he was reincarnated and trained by his walking piece of garbage mother in the art of murder. This goes off even worse, because the author just fails to tell a story with any redeeming qualities. By now you're completely phoned out of the story, not caring who the newly crowned op mc meets or interacts with, as he entirely mary sues his self through the world for around 20 chapters meeting random person #1 and random side character #10 all to show his superior prowess as a reincarnator with wisdom beyond his age trained into a living weapon by his living garbage mother. In closing the author had a cool premise and good ideas trying to mash together the tragic backstory, reincarnator, op mc tropes, But utterly fails in the attempt. This maybe could be a good story if the author was more experienced and rewrote this story entirely without the drunken meandering, but I digress. Well deserved 1.2/5 not worth your time.

NovelReview
NovelReviewLv1

The author requested this review to be done from chapter 17 onward. Writing Quality- 2- Note that 2 is actually better than 90 percent of all novels in this platform. The prose is a bit awkward with long sentences separated by commas. In writing we must focus on giving rich sentences. Short sentences are powerful (But it doesn't mean that we should make all sentences short. It will sound awkward). Also there are unnecessary words which could have been trimmed. Take the beginning of chapter 22 for example. 'It wasn't an easy sleep, however, as every little noise wake her up. And then every time she would double check the locks on the doors, losing precious minutes of sleep every time' This could be cut to 'Every fleeting noise jarred her sleep. She would check the locks with every waking, precious minutes of sleep lost' You don't have to tell the readers that her sleep wasn't easy. All of us experienced this kind of hellish sleep before. There are typos and incorrect spellings but once again, your novel is better than most in this aspect. We make mistakes and without editors, we cannot perfect every word. One more problem I saw is the occasional transition to omniscient point of view. I forgot where but this did happen a few times. It is not a big problem though some readers will notice it. Stability of Updates- 5 - I rate every novel 5. Not many readers know this but a single chapter would take hours to write. Story Development- 3- Chapter 17 to 35 focuses on Dene, the MC's mother. I rate this high as her story didn't feel like a backstory at all (Given, it is 18 chaps long). Her rise from a defeated wretched is a compelling tale. Do note that the standard I used is based on published novels. 5 stars would be story development rivaling Mistborn or something. Character Design- 4- Dene is a great character. Her personalities are fleshed out and she feels real. The readers would understand her actions. The dialogues are also great. The author slips world building and personality traits into dialogues pretty well. 5 stars in this would be character design equal to Glokta in The Blade Itself. World Background- 4- It is a normal fantasy world with kingdoms and such sprinkled with unique things. Cultures and the people were explained well. I can't really say more about this as I don't fully grasp what Webnovel means by 'World Background' Additional thoughts. Although my review only spans chaps 17-35, I think the author should cut the prologue. It is too long and feels like a different genre. Prologues are meant to present a flavor to the readers. It is like the first sniff of coke or something (for the lack of better analogy. Don't do drugs kids.). Final thoughts. This is a great novel. I can't say much about the MC but Dene's story is rich with her character. 95th percentile compared to the other novels here is my estimate.

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Maromar
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John Yao has awakened, may death touch his enemies! Duality is an isekai reincarnation novel that dips moderately into cultivation and very lightly into litRPG elements. Its setup immediately provides a cushion for any overcompetance by making the protagonist a veteran U.S. Army Ranger who made it into the special forces and then the CIA. In my opinion, there are far too many works in the genre that feature a **** (and sometimes even a tween!) that makes the decisions necessary to survive in a hostile world without any kind of remorse, repression, or shock. It's become disgustingly common. The consensus is to let it be when a modern fourteen-year-old gouges someone's eyes out without having nightmares about it for years when the most hardened of veterans come back from war with PTSD. With John already being an adjusted professional I find it easier to give him a pass when he kills without a following bout of introspection. Duality has an intriguing method for dealing with themes of racism and otherism. That is, the text doesn’t “deal” with it at all, but serves it with all the subtlety of a three-legged giraffe on acid. This is a good thing given the world he’s reincarnated into. Racial discrimination and supremacist beliefs are naked in the North and so the narrative matches it rather than offering a one-off mention and not confronting the issue. Potentially contentious aspects need to be confronted directly, lest the story disrespects them. JohnnyKbca appears to understand this. The piece has clear ideas, some solid points of logic, and a willingness to look at uncomfortable topics in the eyes. That’s where my praise ends, though. Duality needs some love on the mechanical side. The narrative often repeats information or stutters between the past and present. The repetition is particularly damaging when mentions of Southern characters' race and physical descriptions crop up. It’s enough to establish that they are dark-skinned and treated differently due to the fact, doing so constantly with few paragraphs between instances throws readers out of the story, especially in cases where that isn’t the main focus. To some readers, this might seem like the text is fishing for points of some kind, but the issue is one of overwriting, not author tract. Readers might pay particular attention to where it’s present alongside racial issues due to our trained sensitivities (I caught myself and ended up reading the story a second time to make sure, I’m glad I didn’t jump to conclusions) Take this selection for example: “As for his religion, she learned more about it. The Holy Flame was seen as the greatest power in the universe and the creator of life. Since the beginning of time, it has been in conflict with its antithesis, the False Flame. According to their holy scriptures, the Holy Flame created all lifeforms and humanity was the perfect one. Envious of this fact, the False Flame attempted to create its own humans but was incapable of doing so.” While functional, it doesn’t flow. A lot of English geeks would end the commentary there, attributing good flow to something that you get a knack for producing naturally. They are wrong. Flow is just an overall impression that comes from the clarity of language, economy of words, and structure variation. It’s purely mechanical. Trimming the selection and using stronger language paints a more vivid scene and improves the flow. Observe: “Their “Holy Flame” was the greatest power to exist. It molded all life from its embers, lauding humanity as its most perfect creation. Incapable of such a feat, the False Flame fought eternally against its antithesis in a conflict born of jealous rage.” Not the cleanest but it does get rid of the uncertain language, allowing more of the imagery to come through and condenses two paragraphs into one. It also cuts out 35 words. This doesn’t seem like a lot at first face but when applied to the entire text it adds up. Note that in the original, the fact that the Holy Flame created life is mentioned twice, some readers might glance over this, but when touching vulgar or taboo subjects it stands out. You’ll notice that the narrative uses perspective shifts rather often. This is good for peeking at secondary characters or even elements of the scenery to get angles that the main character can’t provide. It is very hard to pull off in a manner that doesn’t do more harm than good. In Duality’s case, we get head jumping at strange times with little benefit. A particularly severe example can be found when John encounters a thief in the forest. There’s a constant back and forth that delivers much of the same information a single perspective could with a delivery that feels broken up due to the number of times the readers have to reorient themselves. An example that’s more up in the air lies in the large section devoted to Dene’s early days in the North where we learn about and empathize more with her than John. The story, however, isn’t done yet; lodging a complaint on that end doesn’t seem fair. I will say that careful consideration needs to be paid to the amount of time spent on flashbacks and alternative perspectives overall. If overused, the story will become messy and laborious to follow. Other more minor but still damaging issues include misuse of commas, odd word choice, some inconsistent capitalization in the earlier chapters, and overuse of alternative dialogue tags. In its current state, I find it difficult to say whether or not I’d recommend Duality. The issues stated are much more pronounced before the 17th chapter where the quality takes a jump for the better. I believe that the story would do well with a few days worth of editing to bring the entire piece to a consistent level and iron more of the glaring issues out. Failing that, I’d recommend rewriting or deleting the earlier chapters entirely, as drastic a solution that may sound. Duality is not a bad piece by Webnovel’s standards, it just feels like it can be pushed to be much more. To that end, I sincerely hope that JohnnyKbca isn’t disheartened by my review, but sees this as an indication of their potential as a writer. Keep being awesome.

Fiona_Singer
Fiona_SingerLv3

I started from the beginning for about seven chapters and jumped to 17th chapter like the author requested, and it is indeed a huge improvement, so it seems you are a quick learner in right direction. Good for you XD The writing is jerky--considering the author is still learning it's pretty understandable--but when reading it I don't really feel it's "bad", as in it hindered my understanding of the plots. Yes, it's bit plain, not quite enough of complexity and refinement, but it's simple and straightforward like you can understand it with a glance, making it effortless to read, which I would say may be a good thing to keep. In this part about writing style, I would suggest two things: 1. Try to get rid of some too oral or casual usage of language, for it might be acceptible for daily use, it won't be too proper for written form (I made that mistakes too sometimes XD); 2. Try to find your own style of writing, which means reading, writing and rewriting more to find a way to write that gives your work some personality. Doesn't have to be an eloquent one, just something you like and you feel like fitting your own characteristics. The story development was pretty standard reincarnation and cultivation at first, but I'm glad the author chose to better it with a more mature writing style and a more meaningful theme for the novel. Character design, too. I started very curious and hoping, since it's the first black MC novel I read on this site, and little bit disappointed when it seemed to be an ordinary webnovel work, but now I'm picking up the hope again after Chpt 17 XD. Not that I assumed black people are just always full-of-anger, but uniqueness is fundamental to literature and the topic of colors will be an interesting place to start, especially considering how white/yellow-MC predominant this website is. I'd personally look forward to the author recreating the struggle of black people in a fantasized world XD.

JA_Anton
JA_AntonLv3

It seems the reincarnation plot is really quite popular these days :) Nothing against it though, and I must say this story mixes reincarnation with action and magic quite well. The idea of the 'awakening' is also a good addition. The premise of the novel, with the warrior levels and all, reminds me so much of an RPG game. The thing I liked the most about the story is the fact that the MC can kill. He's not one of those *****, pacifist MCs that could not strike a finishing blow due to morals and all. The development in John's abilities (the second life one) is also believable. He did train and wasn't just automatically strong without doing nothing. I find John really likable whether the past or the reincarnated him. I do have a few suggestions, and some issues I noticed (Please note that these are just my take. Feel free to use or ignore my comments as you see fit) The pacing of the story is okay since the author managed to show John's improvement as a warrior. However, I'm not fond of the way the author explained a lot of technicalities of the world in dialogues (during John's training with his mother). It was a lot of info to take in at once. Also, I don't have anything against third person omniscient POVS. But I don't think the POV of certain characters had to be included--specifically, those who eventually died a few paragraphs after their introduction. It just broke the flow of the narrative a bit for me. Writing-wise, I noticed a few minor grammar errors and some odd phrasings. Moreover, I think the author should check for some redundant statements. For instance: 'His plan was to find an opportunity to poison Verich.' I think this sentence is no longer necessary. It was already implied by the sentences that followed. Lastly, the author should also look into dialogue formatting. A comma follows a dialogue tag when writing statements. For the world background, I already have a good idea of the first world (John's first life with hints of military and CIA and all). But the fantasy world is still a bit vague for me. Beyond John and his mother, the forest and their house, I can't say much yet. To be fair, the novel is still ongoing, so perhaps the author would add more details in the next installments. Overall, this story has a good plot and an intriguing lead character. I did enjoy reading this, and I'm looking forward to how the story will progress in the next chapters.

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