hello guys , This is a True review and my true feelings ,so don't think that i m angry or don't like ur novel , so i m replying like this.
Warning ! Spoiler ! [ included ]
{ Many places i use ur for your and m for am . and so on . }
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1. MC and his 2 future wives r too close from childhood and i think in future too . So no solo adventure or main focus or spotlight on mc [ i kinda can't explain clearly , but listen , Like chinese or other xuanyuan novels (name may be wrong). Where story focus purely on MC ]
2. Incest , i hate such stuff in reality , as i m not hungry of lust , i love my sisters so it's kinda hard to read such things for me.
3. MC too weak , even 3 wishes he literally wasted them.
i understand author is trying to make him look not too OP. then don't give such options to begin with only to make him look like an idiot,
4. Of course i know in future he will be da*mn OP and fuc**g strong and may become GOD or you know ( like hongmeng ruler or such a thing which no one have ever reach )
5. But what we want to see is present , not future.
few people will like your story , but for me it's just bad or nuisance , so i m dropping
6. Same line died by truck kun
All family died by spirit hall , at least for god sake try something new.
this line has become too common. ( i have read many same fan-fic )
7. Author try to make mc Cold but loving. Ruthless but not over the line.
Girl or wives or GF intro should be there but dont force story on base of S*X ( at age of 12 lets loose virginity wtf ). Try to write good content instead of random lines and wasting your precious time on something useless ( at least for me , peace )
8. Give us a picture of his adventure not random talks and famous cliche and same old lines in case of Fan-Fic , try to improve your creativity ( which i think you r in urgent nee ) .
9. Girl or wives or GF should be there but don't involve so much that it started looking like Romeo Juliet or lover story ok , or some S*X drama .
They should appear but not in whole story.
10 MC should adventure alone and make new friends , gf ,wives.
Of course dont forget old ones . meat them again in some places , fight along then go on [ just like most of the NOVELS ]
Author if ur feeling hurt , i m sorry .
But what i said is truth acc. to me , so don't take it on heart and work hard .
i believe u will improve and be successful
I want to give all the guys an example [ especially to authors who r reading it right now ]
The Strongest Legend Of Dragon Ball [ i read it on LNMTL ]
but guys have u read it
If yes , u will be able to understand what i m going to talk
[ https://lnmtl.com/novel/the-strongest-legend-of-dragon-ball ]
LINK above
A very Cool and Good and Best novel which is ruined by Author like that he would have no idea himself
So don't rad it
In this MC gf are 2 , later he married both.
But main problem whole story around 1000+
Even 1 ch. rarely left where these 2 girls mentioned i not there.
Even in final big fight which concern complete universe , these girls were fighting alongside.
I just have one plea at least if someone like to make such novel at least mention a tag : Multiple MC or something alike
otherwise after sometime it's truly frustrating.
OK author i hope u will improve
Thanks for reading it all guys now u can go [ Just go man ? ]
Bye
