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DipTheDoggie
DipTheDoggieLv56yr
2018-11-26 07:21

It started off well but the novel went into the Harem and ****** route which ruined it for me. A lot of novels seems to go into the Harem direction and unless well thought out the novels really never last.

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The_Wulin
The_WulinAuthor

hehe, sorry for wanting lots of girls, I can't help it. I would try to make a promise to make a normal story with 1 lover, but that's probably impossible for me. Sad that you don't like the harem route.

XuanBodhisattva
XuanBodhisattvaLv5

Does mc have charm skills or something like that? I hope not, because it will be very disgusting lol.

The_Wulin:hehe, sorry for wanting lots of girls, I can't help it. I would try to make a promise to make a normal story with 1 lover, but that's probably impossible for me. Sad that you don't like the harem route.
The_Wulin
The_WulinAuthor

No he won't have something like that

XuanBodhisattva:Does mc have charm skills or something like that? I hope not, because it will be very disgusting lol.
Kaneki12
Kaneki12Lv4

Bing Feilong – Spirit (Winter Dragon) – Chen yue’s rival. Feilong is colder than yue. She doesn’t have anyone to rely to when she was young. Her clan is destroyed by spirit hall. Make a story for her like the enemies of my enemy are my friends sort of thingy. Mi Heidong – (Space) – she has one of the abilities of transportation which wulin used to get to spirit hall to gather information. Her 9th spirit ability is blackhole. The size of a city or bigger. She used this ability to completely destroy the city which spirit hall reside, because spirit hall still has unknown mysteries in it and she can’t use it before because it still has civilians. Lian Meinu – (Dark Chain) Variation of dragon bones. She and Feilong can fuse, and they’re fusion ability is frosted chain which attacks and make the targeted user to be insane and they used this to kill some of spirit hall users to escape. Zhizhu Nushen – (Cheiracanthium Spider Tarantula) – She is spotted by wulin when he is exploring heavenly duo forest to get his –th spirit ring. At first she didn’t care for him but when she almost died by a ten-thousand year old beast and got saved by wulin she developed feelings for him. She is the first to know of wulins 100,000 spirit rings.

The_Wulin:No he won't have something like that
DeathLingers
DeathLingersLv14

Oh harem well let's just remove this from my library even though I just added it

DeathLingers
DeathLingersLv14

Decided to have a look and this is actually done well it immediately introduces 2 girls unlike others where the guy has that one girl for a while then immediately fùcks another girl since he can't control himself and ends up being an unloyal baśťard. So this is good since hes straight to the point that he will be with other girls I dispise it when he's with that one girl for so long and then ends up betraying her so this was pretty good

DeathLingers:Oh harem well let's just remove this from my library even though I just added it
IdHc
IdHcLv4

I don't get it...why rate something for harem when the tags say harem? That's like rating a horror story a 1 star if it has gore....

FigShiggitty
FigShiggittyLv4

lmao! Good one and so true as well!

IdHc:I don't get it...why rate something for harem when the tags say harem? That's like rating a horror story a 1 star if it has gore....
DipTheDoggie
DipTheDoggieLv5

Because it never had the Harem tag when I started reading it.

IdHc:I don't get it...why rate something for harem when the tags say harem? That's like rating a horror story a 1 star if it has gore....
IdHc
IdHcLv4

I suppose that's fair. I'm an advocate for authors to warn their audience beforehand, mostly because backlash these days is pretty huge. I also hate being caught off guard if something I hate pops up and ruins my mood.

DipTheDoggie:Because it never had the Harem tag when I started reading it.
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AlexMercer
AlexMercerLv2

hello guys , This is a True review and my true feelings ,so don't think that i m angry or don't like ur novel , so i m replying like this. Warning ! Spoiler ! [ included ] { Many places i use ur for your and m for am . and so on . } //////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////// 1. MC and his 2 future wives r too close from childhood and i think in future too . So no solo adventure or main focus or spotlight on mc [ i kinda can't explain clearly , but listen , Like chinese or other xuanyuan novels (name may be wrong). Where story focus purely on MC ] 2. Incest , i hate such stuff in reality , as i m not hungry of lust , i love my sisters so it's kinda hard to read such things for me. 3. MC too weak , even 3 wishes he literally wasted them. i understand author is trying to make him look not too OP. then don't give such options to begin with only to make him look like an idiot, 4. Of course i know in future he will be da*mn OP and fuc**g strong and may become GOD or you know ( like hongmeng ruler or such a thing which no one have ever reach ) 5. But what we want to see is present , not future. few people will like your story , but for me it's just bad or nuisance , so i m dropping 6. Same line died by truck kun All family died by spirit hall , at least for god sake try something new. this line has become too common. ( i have read many same fan-fic ) 7. Author try to make mc Cold but loving. Ruthless but not over the line. Girl or wives or GF intro should be there but dont force story on base of S*X ( at age of 12 lets loose virginity wtf ). Try to write good content instead of random lines and wasting your precious time on something useless ( at least for me , peace ) 8. Give us a picture of his adventure not random talks and famous cliche and same old lines in case of Fan-Fic , try to improve your creativity ( which i think you r in urgent nee ) . 9. Girl or wives or GF should be there but don't involve so much that it started looking like Romeo Juliet or lover story ok , or some S*X drama . They should appear but not in whole story. 10 MC should adventure alone and make new friends , gf ,wives. Of course dont forget old ones . meat them again in some places , fight along then go on [ just like most of the NOVELS ] Author if ur feeling hurt , i m sorry . But what i said is truth acc. to me , so don't take it on heart and work hard . i believe u will improve and be successful I want to give all the guys an example [ especially to authors who r reading it right now ] The Strongest Legend Of Dragon Ball [ i read it on LNMTL ] but guys have u read it If yes , u will be able to understand what i m going to talk [ https://lnmtl.com/novel/the-strongest-legend-of-dragon-ball ] LINK above A very Cool and Good and Best novel which is ruined by Author like that he would have no idea himself So don't rad it In this MC gf are 2 , later he married both. But main problem whole story around 1000+ Even 1 ch. rarely left where these 2 girls mentioned i not there. Even in final big fight which concern complete universe , these girls were fighting alongside. I just have one plea at least if someone like to make such novel at least mention a tag : Multiple MC or something alike otherwise after sometime it's truly frustrating. OK author i hope u will improve Thanks for reading it all guys now u can go [ Just go man ? ] Bye

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