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    Balas midgetydeath

    He is one of the only people that can make healing potions, and he is a beginner. He has the upper hand. Yes, they can kill him but if they do they lose a potentially steady supply of healing potions. They'd have to pay the phenex families's absurd fees. His potential and current value can not be overlooked. Another rias can be birthed. Another him can't.

    Right here, I was not the weaker party in this negotiation, I was the one with the upper hand even though I was the no-name mage while she was basically the princess of the underworld. 
    Highschool DxD: Dragon's Ascent
    Komik · Bronz_Deck
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    THX FOR CHAP

    Ch 25 Chapter 025
    Naruto: Sacred Scroll
    Komik · Miguelho
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    It is a pretty fun read. There are a lot of grammar mistakes. I feel like by just improving on them, this fanfic will grow. I like the power set and while mc is powerful, he isn't yet op, although it might feel like it. Honestly, I wish you would focus a bit on background and world-building because we still haven't met tony stark even though he invested in mcs company and the mc is a potts. Also, what happened to the hydra spy that is his maid or something(I forgot her position)? Overall its a fun story and its a fanfic so...five stars

    In Marvel with Greatest System
    Filem · Boring_World
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  • AvatarLOK2
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    Its not a bad story. It has a lot of potential. I like the ideas and the character himself. Its pretty good. If there were any problems, it would be that you tell more than show. If you improve on that then the story would be even better. The ideas are there. Its a fanfic so five stars i guess.

    The serene Swordsman
    Komik · Daoist0kxr4h
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    i love your work

    Ch 41 A King VS A Spear Boy Part 1
    Spear Boy Gets Creative (Cao Cao SI) DXD Multicross Story
    Komik · EzioAuditore_1
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  • AvatarLOK2
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    This is just a pretty fun read in general. The character is done pretty well. I like the pacing and the updates are consistent. I really like the story. I hope that you keep it up.

    Different Batman
    Komik · Cedric_7512
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  • AvatarLOK2
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    This is fun. I'm loving the personality of the characters. I can feel the distinctness of each. The writing formatting isn't my favorite and could potentially be improved upon more but, I like it. This story has a lot of potential and I hope you continue and improve.

    In TVD/TO as Kol Mikaelson
    Televisi · ItachiWeasel
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    Balas AenarionVoldigoad

    He's not childish. He just doesn't care. Nothing can really harm him so why should he? If he gets stabbed, he heals and he can practically get ifinitely stronger through a multitude of ways. At that point I would do what Saitama does and look for a real fight or try and fix things because I know that I can't die. But, we are allowed to have different opinions and perspectives and so we're probably both somewhat right though, I like my opinion more.

    "It's so that you don't let yourself get stabbed like a moron again." That was rich coming from her considering the kind of shit her comic book version did. Not that I would call her out on it since that would cause her to ask some uncomfortable questions. Still, that left me at the very question that started it all.
    Marvel Mutant, I’m a Burning Martian!
    Komik · EgyptianDio
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    Balas Shinxbi

    To awaken the mangekyou, you have to kill the person closest to you. People can lose people but, the mangekyou is hatred itself. Madara got it when he killed his brother. For Sasuke, it was the same. It is not bloodline purity, it is pure unadultered hate and malice.(Sorry for my spelling.)

    This theory of his was supported as no one wanted a jinchuriki/tailed beast getting controlled even if there was no one there who could possibly do that. Yoriichi just scoffed at that and thought only if they knew the future.
    Naruto : The Demon Swordsman
    Komik · Charizard6
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    This is fun. I like all the science talk and how while a bit inflate most of it is true. Also the character is fun. My biggest problem is just a problem that most translations have which is that you can tell its a translation with how the english is being used. I wouldn't even call that a problem at all. Good luck author.

    Rick in Marvel and DC: Fusion
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    good chapter. This was so fun. You are so creative man.

    Ch 18 Capitulo 17
    Word Marvel (Sistema De Asimilacion)
    Komik · Junior09
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    great chapter dude

    Ch 5 Chapter 04
    The Vampyr Diaries
    Televisi · Flint679
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    Dude your writing has been fun so far. The story has a lot of potential and while there are only four chapters out right now, I feel like this story could be one that I can wait for. I hope that you finish it at sometime and can't wait for the next update.

    The Vampyr Diaries
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    My guy, your writing is fun and I honestly think this has a lot of potential. You write well bro. The sarcasm is top notch. I honestly have no problems with the story so far. Good job and I hope for the best.

    Spider-Man: Dimensional Anomaly (MCU)
    Filem · Subaru71077
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    Balas Lucifer09

    can you send me the link for the untranslated novel?

    Good or Bad, Does it matter? (Harry Potter Fanfic)[TN]
    Derivasi dari karya · Lucifer09
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    Story end. Have fun author.

    Ch 9 chapter 9 : Sadness and regret
    INVINCIBLE : FEAR
    Komik · The3Entities
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    Balas p3d0_Man

    And? There were no rules why didn’t rias do the same? She could have told issei to do that in the fight. It would have worked. She just didn’t think.

    But beneath his determined exterior, a maelstrom of emotions raged within Guy. He detested Rias, his twin sister, with every fiber of his being. To him, she was nothing more than a spoiled brat who had everything handed to her on a silver platter. She never bothered to train, yet she complained incessantly when things didn't go her way. Rias was the darling of the Gremory clan, the apple of their parents' eyes, and it gnawed at Guy's very soul.
    Guy Gremory: The Forgotten Twin
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    Balas p3d0_Man

    Issei also beat Riser without Juggernaut drive.

    But beneath his determined exterior, a maelstrom of emotions raged within Guy. He detested Rias, his twin sister, with every fiber of his being. To him, she was nothing more than a spoiled brat who had everything handed to her on a silver platter. She never bothered to train, yet she complained incessantly when things didn't go her way. Rias was the darling of the Gremory clan, the apple of their parents' eyes, and it gnawed at Guy's very soul.
    Guy Gremory: The Forgotten Twin
    Komik · ThatWriterGuy
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    Bro did you see how strong Rias and her peerage became in less than a year of actual train. Kiba's potential, Akeno's potential, Gasper's potential, Koneko's potential. They are all overpowered as fuck. They never needed Issei to win plus when rias goes crazy she shows why the power of destruction is so potent. Literally they have sirzechs, grayfia, gremory family connections all of of which could have helped with their training. I mean Riser should have lost if Rias was taking shit seriously. I mean even Sairaorg with no actual power of his own other than what he got by training or journeying could be Riser without his sacred gear. You are talking crap bro. Rias isn't a crybaby. She is a nice person. It is just that she was spoiled. I mean Sirzechs and his crew could all train them. Rias literally has so many overpowered peerage members that it is crazy.

    But beneath his determined exterior, a maelstrom of emotions raged within Guy. He detested Rias, his twin sister, with every fiber of his being. To him, she was nothing more than a spoiled brat who had everything handed to her on a silver platter. She never bothered to train, yet she complained incessantly when things didn't go her way. Rias was the darling of the Gremory clan, the apple of their parents' eyes, and it gnawed at Guy's very soul.
    Guy Gremory: The Forgotten Twin
    Komik · ThatWriterGuy
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    It is a fun story. I like it.

    Marvel: Psychomimetic
    Komik · king_frosh
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