Describe yourself
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the chapter is from Liam's view but this paragraph is talking about what the boy is doing. So the first "his" makes sense that it refers to Liam (since in the context the lad wouldn't be trying to look into his own eyes, so the lad wouldnt be an applicable noun for the pronoun to reference) but the next "he" is more ambiguous. The context only works if its refering to Liam, but in casual english the way its layed out it would normally be referencing to the lad. My brain got stuck here for a seconds before I parsed it the way you meant. if you don't see an issue don't change it 👍
the previous paragraphs said he killed a fox and a bear. bear is mentioned twice so I assumed that's what was being referred to here. (especially since he says how he wishes he caught a boar)
"the moonlight was barely enough for him to see clearly"*
"Growing his attributes became harder as well. Warden had slain twice as many copper ranked beasts so far, but his attributes increased minimally."
As if it was only natural* you don't need the first "to be" here in this sentence.