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the adventures of a lost soul

I'm new to this platform I've never wrote a story before I had to use all my brain cells to get that 1 chapter out I thought it would be a good idea so I follow what happens in the spoilers I am hoping to publish a total of 50 chapters and if I get 100 votes or something I will carry on righting I want to be criticised so I can make my my novel better for you quick heads up I'm only 13 so what I Wright wont be fantastic I don't even know what I should do it as a 1st person so your seeing it through the eyes of Lin Feng or a 3rd person view I am hoping someone will see this novel and tells me how I should Wright it

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A mysterious system

Lin Feng stood in a vast desert unmoving like a statue, suddenly he fell on to his knees looking around.

''is this a dream'' he muttered

[system initialisation 99%]

What is this he curiously looked upon the screen that had appeared in front of him he stuck out his hand it passed through the screen and then he tried to get up using his left arm but then he noticed the arm was no longer there.

''ahhh'' blood was flowing out of where his arm should of been he stated turning white

He passed out falling against the ground with a large 'thud'. But something appeared before his eyes just before he passed out to be precise 3 holographic screens like the one before.

[system initialisation 100%, completed]

[system his detected severe injury to hosts body healing host]

Lin Feng's arm began to grow back as in by magic and the colour was returning to Lin Feng's face he slowly began to regain consciousness

A loud groan escaped his mouth ''ugh''

'What just happened? how is my arm back?, how did this happen?'

He suddenly looked forward at the holographic screen was it this, the thing that called itself system then he looked at the 3 holographic screen.

[altering host's body for stronger compatibility with hosts affinities and adapting hosts body to be able to use all elements. initialising body to have the most room to develop]

What is this thing Lin Feng asked suspiciously then he saw a countdown.

[5]

[4]

[3]

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