Is this really a Game?!

Hello everyone, I'm TheReign and this is my novel, I got this idea from reading all kinds of MMORPG and apocalypse novels so don't be surprised if you see some similarities, I hope you enjoy it and constructive criticism is always welcome, but this is my first try at writing a novel so don't be too hard on me.

Stopped after 10 chapters, way too much misplaced comedy and incoherences, that pulled me out of the story. There's only 1200 pioneers in the world which I assume has a 7 billion population which makes the chance of being one 1 out of 6 million and of course there's 4 of them being in the same school. It's also not explained why monsters would appear before the terraformation, whether they'd appear for everyone,... After getting these powers and the terraformation, you really get the feeling these guys are in a summer camp. Millions of people may die but all they think above is mocking each others and playing jokes. There's also the convenient fact that you have 2 sons of mma champions, a champion archer and a kid from an assassin family all in the same school... Too much for me to believe it'd be genuinely possible if such event were to be happening. It's a sloppy beginning.

So far I quite like the book, theres some similarities with other works I read but since this is the authors first work I’ll overlook some of the small details and inconsistencies, but one question, why can’t I vote for this?

writing quality takes a very steep, very hard dive about 60 chapters in. english writing is in past tense, not present. the story is a bit pedantic, and lacks any sort of development. the characters are stock tropes and stereotypes, and fifty chapters in they have yet to develop in any way, minor or major (no, levelling up and gaining skills do not count as character development). the world has little to no background information given. you know almost nothing about it. the characters magically know about monsters, attributes, skills and abilities, but nothing is ever explained to the reader.

This is probably one the better fantasy/survival world Webnovel in these website 4/5 would recommend giving it a try________________________

I have only just started reading this novel so I can’t comment on much, but I have noticed something I think the author should know. The writing in chapter 8 is pretty awkward. I could tell something was off in the previous chapters but I wasn’t able to pin point it until now. I finally realized the problem while reading the fight scenes of chapter 8. The tense frequently switches from past tense to present tense. One of the main rules in writing is to choose a tense and stick with it. Otherwise it makes the pacing of each scene feel all messed up and off. Going back and editing all of the chapters with conflicting tenses and converting them all into past tense would make the story flow a lot smoother and improve the general quality of the writing. I recommend past tense because it is the one more suited to this kind of story. If you would like specific examples of where I think these problems are and could be improved. I would be happy to help.

writing quality 4: to many misplaced comedy story development 4: average character design 5: pretty well thought and interesting characters updating stability 4: average world Background 5: give enough information to be interesting but not enough to predict what's gonna happen

I personally love the the characters they are well fleshed out and we'll thought. While the world building is pretty amazing the author gives us just enough information to be interested but not enough to answer all mysteries. So I highly recommend giving this underrated story a try

if you like the typical "lets get strong together, while i lead the pack" genre of novels, this is the right story for you! If you DONT like that type, then it isnt 😂

This book is so far more than fantastic. Really interesting concept and the way the book is written is great and well readable. I can't wait for other chapters to kick in. Looking forward to continuing to read this book.

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The start is admittedly a little slow however it does get better and the story is now moving at a better pace (currently on chapter 524). However each adventure the group goes on is interesting if there is one thing I will say is that in the first 50 or so chapters there are a couple of chapters of when it’s just the group grinding however when it gets into later into the chapters the fights become gradually better written and more satisfying overall story is currently 4.5 but the first 100 chapters is about a 3.75-4. So if u are in the first hundred chapters and u don’t have much else to read I would still recommend continuing as long as you like some parts of the story.

This the first story I took interest in and that I actually wanted to read it to the end but since that could take some time can someone tell me why there is a question mark on human race I’m dying of curiosity

hidden gem of webnovel, fluffy is my god now btw. Love this novel, give it a change you will be hooked in 5 chapters it is amazing. I have only ever seen 1 cliche, no romance so far, mc is awesome and each character has their own backstory and plot which is enjoyable.

Barely any cliches, good grammar, updates good, bunch of free chapters, all characters feel unique, captivating plot that makes me wonder "will this happen or is he this"

cant wait for more chapters. really Good. The best one so far amongst The New ones. Just hope it gets tons of New chapters to enjoy it.......

Awsome book so far. This book is so far more than fantastic. Really interesting concept and the way the book is written is great and well readable. I can't wait for other chapters to kick in. Looking forward to continuing to read this book.

This novel has a great magic system and the MC is not mister perfect but is a party made of friends who don't hold each other back and cover each others weakness!! Basically it is the cliche hero party defeat the demonking type of story template if that was a actual story in an actual universe. But the main reason this ain't famous and also why i quit. It follows the cliche too much like the whole party is blessed by gods etc. So the story is predictable. They defeat a strong guy while lucky having no casualties but this keeps happening over and over. So the character development for main cast is great and specially the fights are probably the best you can find on webnovel but only if you are good in making a 3d image in your head. It is like a naruto anime fight but in written text. Also, remember how i said the character development is great for main cast? It is because it is only good at that time!!! The reason i quit is because others even if gods are soo idiotic!! If it is a son of a god and the god is alive so has resources then it is guarantee that he will the most cliche 3rd rate villan young master there is!!

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this novel is good but I dropped at chapter 164.because I did not feel mc is the mc.because mc is always with his friends and author put as much value as mc to them.every character of that group is important bla bla bla.I hoped read solo mc until 167 then it bored me so dropped.