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Fate/Doom

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Someone suffered a mental breakdown and did many heinous things before killing himself, unless he imagined that his other life would be just a new life with some additions.

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Pokemon Alternate Universe Adventures

A man from an Earth gets the choice to start over in any Universe and chooses an Alternate Pokemon Universe. Let us see if his journey to the top is succesful and the impact he will have on his new world. Pokemon is owned by Nintendo, Game Freak and Creatures Inc. I just use their sandbox for the plot of my MC and my OCs. This will be a "slow" paced story, in fact it's "super slow paced", so please don't expect the MC to directly start his journey in 20 chapters or so, actually multiply that by like 15. A lot is going to happen before that happens. The first 10-20 chapters or so are information heavy, depending on what kind of reader you are. I try to keep my chapter length between 2000 and 3000 words per chapter. My release rate is 4 chapter/week for now. I have a patre*n for those that want to support me with access to some advance chapters as a thank you. patre*n.com/Azrail93 This is an alternate pokemon universe so there will be differences to the games, manga and anime. So if something in the story is different it is most likely on purpose. The original sources are seen as suggestions not laws. Differences can be: Type variants, evolution conditions, strength mechanics, world building and more. If I am at some point asking for reader input I will do so but otherwise I will ignore most suggestions. So please don't spam things like catch this pokemon or do that next. I have my plot planned and external input will be considered when asked for. If I see a suggestion that I believe fit my plot flow I will use it and will credit the commentor. Comments on spelling and grammar mistakes are welcome. I will try to correct said mistakes with time. Constructive criticism will be read and considered. Insult and hate comments will be ignored or deleted depending on severity. Readers naturally can comment their dislike but one worders will be ignored. If the reason for the dislike is explained I will read it. Like previously mentioned pure insults and hate comments will be ignored or deleted. The same is true for simple hate reviews or insulting ones. Reviews complaining about something I warned about, such as the slow pace, will be deleted as well.

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Writing Quality [3] - I don't think I need to explain why. I see some grammatical errors and wrong use of commas. Not to mention that the Author capitalizes words in the middle of sentences that aren't meant to be capitalized, while he doesn't capitalized the ones meant to be. Stability of Updating [4] - I can't say it was very fast, but it wasn't exactly slow either, so good job I guess? Story Development [2] - Besides the main plot of the canon, the personal ones aren't good at all. I'd say below average or even just average itself. It's just basically the MC being stupid and doing idiotic things that the author tries to justify himself in the paragraph comments as I observed. Character Design [2] - What else can I say about the main character? Oh I know, a hypocrite murderer with so called "morals." Although the beginning of the story was confusing, it was quite apparent that he killed the wife of his sister's murderer who was INNOCENT and killed his bullies as well as the politician himself which is quite understandable considering his situation. But then when Gilgamesh wanted to kill innocent people, he acts like a hypocrite and tries to reason with him that they were innocent? Spoke like a true hypocrite. He acts as if he's meant to save the world and condemns evil but the real one is him. World Background [4] - World background, there's really nothing much to say about this considering that it was a bit detailed but there are some pretty stupid things too but the author does miss some things. Overall Thoughts - Hands down, one of the worst Fate Fanfic I've read, if not the worst. I've seen a lot of worse ones with worse attitude and more grammatical errors, but this won the spot as the first mainly because of the author and the main character. First lets focus on the MC. The beginning chapter showed the backstory for him and how he ended up reincarnating. What kind of parents or sibling would let a 12 year old girl buy groceries at night?? He wasn't even responsible enough to do it himself, and he should have expected this to happen, maybe even something worse might happen and the sister gets kidnapped and used for child trafficking or worse. Then we move on to his hypocrisy where he kills the politician's wife who killed his sister. There was no statement that she wasn't innocent, and he just suddenly barged into their home and knocked their daughter and killed the wife. Understandably he kills his bullies and the politician himself, but why did he kill the innocent wife? Maybe because he was mentally unstable, but then we move on to the scene where Gilgamesh wants to kill innocent people and the MC tries to "reason" with him since they're so innocent. What hypocrisy, the author stated to me in a paragraph comment that he did that because it was connected to the MC and he didn't want that to happen. So does that mean that the innocent woman he murdered wasn't connected? He even acts so conceited and nothing like a psychopathic murderer that he is in his past life. He just became obviously stupid to the point that he doesn't even use his statistical points to fight Gilgamesh which led to Medea's death. And then like an average-joe of a main character he is, he swears revenge and swears an oath to the nine heavens to take his revenge! (Jk lol) Then we get to the point where he rescues Sakura and is apparently disgusted by the worms. He kills the person who adopted her which was nice but then he discovers more of those worms and decides to keep them because it might help him. Hypocrisy to the max am I right? MC: Wow the worms are so disgusting, I hope Sakura is still virgin. 5 mins later. MC: Wow this looks disgusting, I'll use it. Also he's so cringe with the "I, Victor von Doom" thing like wtf lmao. I'm already thinking if the author himself is a chuunibyou lol. The author wasn't good because he doesn't even explain things in the story and does illogical things as he explains instead in comments lol.

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