Roonman
Ive watched a lot of anime and a few months back got this really cool idea for an anime, which I then turned into a light novel, and that became a webnovel. Thank you for being here! Destiny is all!
Écriture
de la lecture
50
Lire des livres
I love how pessimistic the guy is lol, rip his parents though. I think this is an interesting story, especially because it's reincarnation after a tragedy so there's a different kind of incentive for him to change worlds. The grammar and word structures need work because they make the story a little hard to read at times. Good job and keep on writing my dude!
same
Devil is usually on the left shoulder, so it's interesting he says its on his right
Good Job author first of all, writign can be hard to do. I think the story is good, i liked th eexplosiveness fo the begining, you know revealing that she poisioned him and all, I liked that. I think this is a good story, my only problem with it is grammar, I think if you write in google docs it would point out some of your mistakes which could help. Good Luck!
I think that this is a really good novel, i only read a few chapters but everytume i read one it made me want to read the next and the one after it. The world building and character devlopment are great so far. I think you sometimes use words that are unnecessarily advanced, it makes the text feel unnatural. And ofc stability of updates but authors have their own lives to tend, so good luck managing time going further!
or it is '46, im not sure now
2256*
I think that this is an okay introduction chapter and that it should be placed in a prologue volume so that people aren't confused. The first chapter doesn't contain any information, idk if it was an accident but yeah just letting you know. There isn't much material to criticize, so I'll try to give you a few pointers. Try to make your dialogue more natural, so that it resonates with the reader more. I thought the way you gave the information about the world was too direct, so maybe rewrite that since you plan to rewrite the novel. Other than, good job and good luck my dude! Keep writing!
This is the first story of its kind for me to read here, heck it's one of the few historically accurate memoirs I've ever read. I appreciate your strength and your struggles, don't ever let her get you down again. You got out there and you can learn and grow to become whatever you want. Much love my dude, and never stop writing!
Jesus Christ, sorry you went through that dude
change wattpad to webnovel btw
I honestly thought this was going to be another reincarnation story so it was refreshing to see that the main character just stayed in heaven instead. I like this idea lol, it's kinda like purgatony on YouTube or good place, other than the fact that those have a more comedic side to them, while this seems a bit more serious. I think the character design of the main character, wanting to commit revenge on bad people from her life, gives a good space for character development thoughout, the direction obviously depends on the author. Anyways good work author, keep it up!!
ohhhh I had a feeling that's what happened