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Little6883mthCommentéCh 5 Chapter 5- Little6883mthRépondu à thesacredmenaceCh 2 Chapter 2
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do you!
Ps. People don't actually like the 'come forth and serve' and preferred the Original so from now it's just going to be the original 'Arise' - Little6884mthRépondu à Little688
I didn’t write this to bad mouth you.
"Yeah. The reason why the steering is so hard could either be a problem with the steering box itself or one of the ball-joints in the front of the car. I can't be sure just from looking but I'm betting on old ball-joints being the cause. One of the first symptoms of them being old is the steering wheel hardening. If that guy doesn't replace them, they will break and his car will literally fall to the ground." - Little6887mthCommenté
Bro I’m reading this on my iPad so you good lol.
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👍
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I appreciate you reading my paragraph and thank you for your story, bro.
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Bro, your story gots a lot potential bro, I mean it’s good I really mean it, but there hasn’t been one fighting scene whatsoever, (training doesn’t count), your story is about dxd and bleach they are both fighting anime, I mean, I like my romance but you gotta have a balance you know what I mean. I like op characters as much as the next person but your character is too strong, Think about it, the heavenly dragons were top 10 or whatever and your character is stronger than them and when you do get your fighting scene, it would not be entertaining whatsoever because i would already know the outcome. reason, Do you know the feeling of when you’re a playing/watching videogame/anime and you feel like you/they could lose any point, that’s the feeling I’m talking about. But it’s just fanfic at the end of the day and I hope you keep writing bro. P.s i’m sorry for the paragraph, and I know it’s not that serious, again, sorry for the paragraph.
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Six?
When Team 7 got to the coast it was to find a thick fog had rolled in. Tazuna had led them to a man who had been willing to offer them passage across, and now the six of them were inside a motorboat to cross the waters and head into the Land Of Waves. - Little6889mthCommenté
Hey what about 5%? It would make the story more balanced. I mean, I don’t know anything about writing a story, so you do you in a positive way.
( A/N Im thinking of giving him 20% right off the bat since this deku is well trained unlike the canon one, should i give him more? ) - Little68810mthCommenté
Idk how you did but you manage to make a good movie reference. there’s some people who are just cringe with movies references.
"… The name's Constantine… John Constantine, asshole." - Little6881yrRépondu à Bryan_Growl
Perfect for that moment, bro
"Have you ever wondered why I'm not with Vegeta almost every day despite my 'mating' cycles? It's because he sees me as nothing more than a game that is to be won, his pleas for love are nothing but empty words... Hell, it's also the reason why I would rather lock myself up in the 'cell of containment' for days than have sex with him, however even my sanity has its limits, and I don't want my brain to fry because of it..." Darles finished. - Little6881yrCommenté
you might wanna fix this
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Hey. This sound like fast and furious a little too much.
Ace may not have believed in peace but there were a few things that he did believe in. Freedom and Family. He would do whatever it took to help his brothers achieve their dreams. That is what family is for right? And Kaguya was a tyrant who was slowly taking freedom away from the people of the world. These were two things that Ace would willingly fight and die for. - Little6881yrRépondu à Little688
I mean the Mc not the kid.
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2009
'Timid, easily flustered by a handsome face, and doesn't seem to have any combat training. Not a threat.' - Little6881yrCommenté
Hey this remind me of Sherlock Holmes movie
'Timid, easily flustered by a handsome face, and doesn't seem to have any combat training. Not a threat.' - Little6881yrCommentéCh 16 First blood.