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An0nymous1yrRépondu à Leavemereado7
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Everything changed when the fire nation attacked
The world has changed. - An0nymous3yrRépondu à Dragon_Lord_KuroII
thanks! I'll sure try!
"If you're not gonna get what you want, then I will bring it to you." Hiroto said with a smirked and disappeared into the shadows. - An0nymous3yrRépondu à AnteChao
I just edited the parts before the time dilation, I'm so glad that I at least improved! I mean it when I say thank you so much! I usually don't get replies especially stuff that'd help me improve so I'm sure this will be a great motivator for me. Have a nice day or night haha
Amber is a pure demon, apparently, she got captured by some noble demon who tortured her until the king Rex stepped in. She was in so much stress so became a pure demon... I wish I could've helped... - An0nymous3yrRépondu à AnteChao
Honestly, I agree with you there. I need to get better at not making things confusing, it can be very frustrating reading that. If you don't mind, I have a question, is the first 3-4 chapters better than the later ones? I edited it and I wanted to know if it's still as flawed
Amber is a pure demon, apparently, she got captured by some noble demon who tortured her until the king Rex stepped in. She was in so much stress so became a pure demon... I wish I could've helped... - An0nymous3yrRépondu à AnteChao
Thank you for letting me know. I can see the problem you mentioned too and I'll try my best to improve on that! I'm sorry you feel that way, I still have a lot to improve on so I'll consider this every time I write. Thanks for the compliment on the plot and I'll definitely practice making everything feel less forced :)
Amber is a pure demon, apparently, she got captured by some noble demon who tortured her until the king Rex stepped in. She was in so much stress so became a pure demon... I wish I could've helped... - An0nymous3yrRépondu à Ryo_KamiCh 17 Power 9s
- An0nymous3yrRépondu à Energetic_Beet
What's that?
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Too relatable
"Finally!" Tari said stretching her arms over her head relieving the tension her muscles from sitting for 2 hours straight. - An0nymous3yrRépondu à PlatinumNight
must be one amazing person XD thx for reading!
He's right... why can't this just be generic? Isn't that the whole plot suppose to be filled with cliches? I know if this is actually fictional I'd be breaking the 4th wall and I'd love to do it again, but I just can't imagine who would read/watch this crap. Must be one amazing person... - An0nymous3yrRépondu à PlatinumNight
xD may the tale of the pebble live on
Alright, pebble of pig smiting... I choose you! - An0nymous3yrRépondu à PlatinumNight
ayyyyy I see you are a person of culture
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hell yeah XD unfortunately didnt have blond vampire and bunny girl when they got out of the cave
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No... bet that's an inconsistency... thanks for pointing it out!
Description: Amber in her old world was a beautiful crimson red-haired girl. Her eyes were pure Amber. If she puts up the act, she can be the embodiment of a princess. Although, she finds it annoying to put on any facade all the time. - An0nymous3yrRépondu à azrail_nailo_6
haha spot on
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- An0nymous3yrRépondu à Sage_GeorgeCh 4 Blinding Light