Re: As My Heart Grows Cold

The synopsis is really short which is attractive to me, i generally like short synopsis to read. The story contents, and chapters are excellent, i have no words to describe how the story is evolving into beautiful scenes. Just this book needs an attractive cover.

Very appreciable awakening of a child who lives between social reasons: how to fall in love and others how to get along through the virtuality of a game. Commendable is the dynamic of describing your game and your feelings. Would she do the same in his presence? Social networks shorten distances. A person cultivates relationships as he participates socially.

The way you described what is happening "in-game" is commendable. As a gamer myself, I can say that it's true to life. You explained the mechanics really well. It is important that it is somehow explained to the reader so that they will understand what the MC is doing and why he is doing it. It's good to see that the MC isn't sociable irl but has friends in-game. I love the poems that the MC wrote for *someone*. They are carefully written and you could feel the emotion. The way the MC describes a person is well written too. There were grammar lapses throughout the story and that should be fixed. The subject-verb agreement part. Although, I must say that I cringe at the first few chapters. I mean the "having crush" and "having a gf" part. I understand that people have different tastes in romance and represent different personalities so I buckled in and read through that. 😂😂😂 It must be a necessary part of the story. I am hoping that the MC will mature through the plots.

The Good: I can relate to game related crushes. A little bit of mysteriousness is a great way to get people hooked! The Bad: Too much mysteriousness leads to confusion, where are you taking the story? Even romance novels need a little bit of solid material. After 8 chapters I feel like I've only learned the MC is a standard teenager and the girl has a creepy brother. The Neutral: In my opinion, negative feedback is much better than positive feedback. Don't get hung up on positive feedback. If someone says "I like how mysterious the guy is", don't pile on more mysteriousness, it will dilute what you've already established. (At least that is my opinion)

ME LIKEYYY :D What else can I say lol there's only 2 chaps available, and yet this book already made me feel things lol Writing-wise, no complaints hehe! It's beautifully written, with no noticeable mistake! :D I like how everything is wrapped in this thin veil of mystery, and yet it's still so comforting to read! :D The synopsis makes me guess what will happen next aaa I'm curious hehe! Great job, author! <3

Looks like I've found a new book to dwell on. For just the first two chapters, it's mysterious and intriguing. I can't wait to read more chapters and I can't wait to see how his heart grows cold. Please y'all should read this masterpiece!